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Reviews for Butterfly

By : Hikariangel
  • From ANON - sma_orlando on December 26, 2014
    Please finish this story.
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  • From ANON - TROLL on July 08, 2012
    Actually, no, it doesn't express stronger feelings. It's just confusing and plain annoying to people who don't know Japanese. I don't care if this turns out to be the hottest yaoi I've ever; if you scatter fluent Japanese sentences throughout it like that, I won't bother looking at it because I'll be getting dry and bored from strolling to the bottom just to understand what Sesshy said to Inu. -_-
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 30, 2006
    Just to let you know, your japanese was very wrong, your grammar sucked, and you used the wrong phrazes. Not to mention, that in english you should write in english, not in Japanese, and it doesn't matter which laguage you write in, it's the way you use the word to decribe emotion that gives a sentence emotion, not the words themselves. You got very lazy, and dicided that writting in Japanese would solve your problem, and your english chapter was no better. Obviously you don't read or watch Inuyasha, because the shit that made spill forth from Inuyasha's mouth would have made him choke and gag, and Sesshomarou as well if he even was the least bit moved by that crap.Do a little research Baka, and know what anime your writting for, as well as what language you are butchering! I speak four differant languages, english and Japanese being my two main, thanks to my parents, and I nearly threw up looking at how badly you butchered the japanese. Not in all dialects could you have gotten your translations that fucking wrong, or your sentence structure that fucked up, and if you wanted to translate the shit, put in the scentence, not at the fucking bottom. Not that your translations were right, but damn. Put some effort into writting if your gonna do it, no one wants to read a half assed effort on an anime they happen to like. Sumimasen, demo you really need to understand that you aren't going to get great reviews by just spouting out a buch of shit, and hope it flies. Put some thought into what you write from now on.
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 30, 2006
    First of all, if it says english, use mainly english! Don't use japanese fore most of it, that makes no sence at all, and it doesn't help to have the words translated at the end. Comon sence.Second of all, how much Inuyasha have you seen or read where the crap that fell out of Inuyasha's mouth works?! First of all Inuyasha wouldn't let that swill fall out of his mouth, especially not to Sesshomarou, and second, Sesshomarou would probably smack him up side the head with tokijin, before running his idiot ass through for saying that shit. THat's about as moving to his heart as it would get. I'm sorry, I know you probably put a lot of effore into this thing, but I simply am not seeing it. It has no flow, no plot, and can't even be called decent. You relied too much on the japanese to express your emotion when you should have been relying on words. English ones that discribe the emotion. Words are just words if not used properly, no matter what language it is in. This is honestly one of the poorest fanfictins I have come across.
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  • From ANON - INU on September 07, 2004
    WRITE MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Quichi the Vole Slayer on January 11, 2004
    Get rid of some of the Japanese phrases and maybe I'll actually come back to read this. It's far too difficult to get through when you are using obscure words here and there. There are alot of phrases that Otaku know and know well, but you've gone overboard. I can't really tell whether or not it's a good story.
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  • From ANON - Trista on October 26, 2003
    Keep going I think it's great! FUCK THEM IF THEY DON'T LIKE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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  • From ANON - No One Knows on October 11, 2003
    Awesome so far! Hope you write more soon
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  • From ANON - poppu myushiku on June 21, 2003
    Sorry, but a lot of your japanese is wrong.
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  • From Dilandausgurl on June 12, 2003
    please update soon!
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  • From ANON - ami maxwell-chan on June 10, 2003
    Hm, well see, the Japanese doesn't express anything better, it just confuses everyone who doesn't speak Japanese..and probably those who do, too, because you can't arrange japanese sentences in the same way as english ones, which you did. It's okay to throw in a couple of japanese words that aren't important to the plot and that most people know anyway, i.e. baka, onna, kuso, etcetera, but try to refrain from putting in whole sentences of Japanese, and especially combining japanese and english together. Like if ich start sprechen things in Deustch with nein real reason, it's just annoying. I'm sure a lot of readers passed up your story because they didn't want to have to scroll back and forth just to figure out was going on. So work on that, k?
    Hope I helped,
    Ami Maxwell-chan
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  • From Dilandausgurl on May 20, 2003
    i really like the story, and the Japanese words u put into the first chapter.
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  • From ANON - Kurai on May 20, 2003
    and your jap's grammar isn't that great either, I can understand most of the words but ... the grammar just screws me up and ... please write in jap only when you're sure it's right ... the jap dialogue made about no sense
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  • From ANON - Kurai on May 20, 2003
    it will really help if you don't write in japanese, cause technecally everything should be in jap then and then no one will understand, even as it is its hard to understand and i can't read a fic while scrolling to the bottom trying to figure what they are saying >.< please write in English! (and your jap's grammar isn't that great either, I can understand most of the words but ... the grammar just screws me up and ... please write in jap only when you're sure it's right ...)
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  • From ANON - Oneida on May 19, 2003
    Really I wouldn't sugget mixing two languages like that period. Peppering in a word or two from one language is okay if the setting calls for it. But that really killed the fic. I couldn't undand and it and don't care to read up on the side notes...try an all english version maybe?
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