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Reviews for Unexpected Endeavors

By : Scottishfae
  • From ANON - Clopin on July 29, 2013
    not a bad story, all in all, but you should've devoted more time to reading over and correcting mistakes or at least finding a beta to have done that. likewise, a bit more research for the proper Japanese honorifics and romanized spellings would've been recommended, for example: it's Sesshomaru-sama, not -dono. while -dono commands respect, it is not as respectful as -sama, -sama is reserved for lords and such.
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  • From demonsangel on January 02, 2013
    Wow, that was a long story. I loved it! Sad its over, but it had a very nice ending, great job and congrats on the story!
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  • From seleni101 on December 09, 2012
    First off, the story is well written, good grammar and the like. I like all the plotting going around although I would really love to see Kagome more involved in the plotting but that depends on how you envision the story. However, I feel like there is something missing to the story. Maybe a little more emotion from the characters would help. A little more description as well. Another thing that kind of bothered me was how easily Kagome accepted Sesshoumaru's proposition. Even if she is all honorable, she seemed to have a pretty bad impression of Sesshoumaru. Besides, she is supposed to love Inuyasha even if he doesn't return her feelings that way. In a few words, I don't see Kagome hooking up with Sesshoumaru without feeling some kind of attraction towards him. She is not the type of person to let herself be pulled by the river's current. Actually, she is more like the salmon while Sesshoumaru is the river itself. Also, something I learned rather recently, is to keep the point of view more focused in the main characters. I tend to do that but I'm working on fixing the need to write things from the perspective of Inuyasha, Sango, Miroku and any other stray character that pops up. Lucky for you, you keep it focused on the subject at hand. I tend to go on a tangent. And I tend to over-think things. And rewrite them too. Anyways, the story is great and this is one the good stories out there. Keep up the great job!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 08, 2012
    Great
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  • From ANON - TKE on November 29, 2012
    I'm absolutely loving this story!!!
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  • From ANON - Shelbie Wilkinson on November 26, 2012
    I love this story it is well wrote. I can so not wait for the next chapters of this story so please update soon!!! Im on the edge of my seat and once again, excellent work!!!
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  • From ANON - leli on September 30, 2012
    Wonderful story. I did see a few spelling mistakes as read the chapters. I like the flow of the story and it's development. Update soon please.
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  • From ANON - puppydog on August 09, 2012
    I missed this story! I`m glad I didn`t take it down from my bookmarks. Please keep going. It`s so good!
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  • From Miss.Undo on August 08, 2012
    Omg I love this story! Please update soon!
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  • From ANON - AngelKawaii on May 05, 2012
    I don't usually leave reviews, but I love your story! Please update soon. :)
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  • From GaiaEco on April 23, 2012
    please please please finish this story its awesome! I wanna know what happens next!
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  • From ANON - sapphire on March 29, 2012
    this is an awesome story :) im glad that she was saved.
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  • From ANON - rere on March 14, 2012
    i am sorry to say this is not a positive review for all of the story so far. I found that too many things were happening at once and i found the story to be somewhat boring. I dont really know if i will continue to read it, but i do hope you continue to write because regardless of my opinions i find that you are a very good author and the characters are brought to life under your obviously capable hands.
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  • From ANON - lechat on February 25, 2012
    This is very exciting. Thank you for continuing so soon. Hope you can get another chapter or two done soon??
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  • From ANON - elisa on February 25, 2012
    It's so refreshing to read a story with a solid concept that doesn't seem rushed. Thank you for sharing your story with us!
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