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Reviews for inuyasha gets a bath

By : inuyashasgirl
  • From DL69 on June 29, 2005
    THAT SOOO NEEDS A SEQUAL

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  • From ANON - L.A. on January 15, 2005
    That was a cute story, and a very nice, flowing feel to it. I enjoyed it, thank you for writing it! lol

    L.A. (Author of The Truth Behind Their Eyes, and The matchmaker)
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  • From ANON - LadyYami004 on August 20, 2004
    Interesting..somewhat hard to read, maybe you could break it off into paragraphs...and I know Inuyasha is half demon and all..but... he wouldnt know within seconds of release if Kagome was carrying their child. Maybe a short while after or something like that. Yeah he's part demon..but he's also part human. 0.o But good plot and dialogue. A bit rushed but pretty decent.:)
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  • From ANON - Kagome on March 08, 2004
    weird..0.o
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  • From inuyashagemini on February 15, 2004
    That was a good story. you should write for the real show. my friends and i like your story alot. your story is hot and loving.
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  • From ANON - MelanthaNocturne on December 27, 2003
    Very cute. I like it much. Grammar's a bit shaky, but it's a lot better than many stories I've read. Big Tip That Trips Up a Lot of People: When you are writing dialogue, it should look like this:

    "Hey." He stopped and leaned his shoulder on the wall that shs ags against. "What's wrong?"

    She sighed. "Nothing. Just--nothing."

    He tilted his head, looking concerned. "No really, what is it?"

    So...that is the way it goes...yeah...n_n;; Sorry, I just want to help.

    I like the story and...hey....have you seen the 10th Kingdom or something? 'Cause your Inuyasha reminds me of Wolf...^_~ Anyway, if you haven't seen it, you should...but I'm pretty sure you have, right?

    ~Melantha
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  • From ANON - No One Knows on September 17, 2003
    A very sweet and awesome story
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  • From ANON - Kyoto on July 30, 2003
    I love it! iis it a short story? or are you going to update. either way i loveed it!
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  • From ANON - Rachel Maley on July 14, 2003
    Nice enough lemon. A few suggestions, though:

    1. Learn to use paragraphs! It was very difficult trying to read this with everything run together.
    2. When getting Kagome pregnant, at least give her the dignity of agreeing to it first. Trust me, *I* wouldn't be happy if he knocked me up without at least discussing it first. Something along the lines of: (Inuyasha) You would bear my children, Kagoma? (Kagoma) Yes, Inuyasha. I want to have your children. (Inuyasha) Why? (Kagoma) Because I love you, and I want to have the children of the man I love. (Me now) See? This lets the reader know that the child is being conceived in love with both parents wanting it.

    You have potential. Keep writing!
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  • From ANON - Diane on July 12, 2003
    The story seems good, but it's VERY hard to read all run together like that. You might want to see if you can break it up into paragraphs.
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  • From ANON - Cat on July 12, 2003
    Not bad, but paragraphs, please. Where are the paragraphs?
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