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Reviews for A Bus Stoirytirytale

By : Sabichan

From DreamAngel on May 31, 2004
Like WOW!!! I just spent the entire day reading this story. Damn near 12 hours glued to my screen... It's AMAZING. I love the way you ended it. But I have to say... it leaves everything open for a sequel... And to tell you the truth, I don't think a lot of people would be complaining... Anyway... I'm rambling so I'll signoff... Once again, GREAT STORY.
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From ANON - akuma_river on May 26, 2004
Wow. What a great story. Though you did put them through hell. You never did say what happened to Kouga and Ayame and Kagura. But I guess that Kouga finally found a sadist to make him happy. And Ayame seems just like the sort of women who can beat Kouga into a good boy. Beat heh I be she used whips too. Loved the story. Keep up the good work.
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From ANON - Anon on April 13, 2004
Unfortunately, reading the last two chapters of this wonderful tale have made me late for work, so i can't detail as i would like...and i sincerely hope you can swear in reviews because if you really really want my honest opinion....That. Story. Was. Just. FUCKING. FABULOUS!!!@#$%&*#@$ ILOVEDIT.

I am nearly tempted to take a "casual day" and just reread the whole damn beautiful thing!!! Thank you so much. I really appreciate how you seem to care so much about your update speed and that you finish things and mostly that you put forth the effort to write such wonderful stuff and share it so willingly. It may sound really dumb, but Fanfiction in general really gives me alot of hope for the future of humanity. E
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From SilverFox on March 26, 2004
* sniffles * I loved it! Every chapter of it! It took my two nights and one afternoon to read this, but I read it all! I just can't believe all the little twist and turns you put in this and not getting lost in the P.O.V's. It was sure different, I can tell you that. I just have one thing though...What made you decide to write through P.O.V's? Not that I am complaining, just wondering is all...Anyhoo, I am sure glad that Kouga wasn't involved in the rest of the fic after Kagome left Inuyasha...( I kinda teared up at that ), plus I was surprised that Kagome neventientioned that little fib to get those truckers away from her, I don't think Inuyasha would have freaked out too much. I actually thought it was damn funny the way those guys reacted...And then the way Kagome left them with the check and all...That had cojones!

Anyhoo, this was a very good story told from all prespectives, from Inuyasha, Kagome, her mother, and a bit from everyone elses too. It was simply wonderful! Well I am going to take a peek at your other storie too...Later! ^_^
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From ANON - KagoKitty on March 22, 2004
SABI-CHAN!!!
I'm crying over here! Mind throwin' the tissues my way?? Thanks...
What can I say besides...WOW.
Yes, wow...wonderful storyline, creative patent pending names, beautiful description...everything I love in my stories!! And it's AU to boot!! *giggle* Wow, I know your probably thinkin' like, "What the hell? This chick is totally too late to be reviewing..."
But I have a HUGE schedule. *gomen gomen gomen* Since I was using sick hours...I decided to use them on somethin' good...like some fanfic reading!! I found and read this in 3 whole days!! *puffs up in pride* And I just CAN NOT wait to read your other fantastic stories. I love that lil' brain of yours, ya know...may be exactly what you need one day...
Oh, and don't feel so bad about only knowing oldies for some while...*sweatdrop*...I'm so sad in the same sense that I was actually SINGING ALONG with all the lyrics. heheheh...yeah.
Hope to see ya around soon!!
=^-.~^=
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From ANON - Shaeya Sedjamiramir on March 18, 2004
WAH!!! I'm so sad that it's over!!! This is such a great story. I really loved your use of lyrics...especially "Bus Stop". Very clever. The smut wasn't smut:-) It was tasteful:-) I really, really, really liked it. REALLY!!!
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From ANON - nokomarie on March 18, 2004
Well, by all means, strike out on your own and promote it shamelessly.

But I don't see the point of taking a finished story and making it origional as being very sensible. You will have to rewrite so much to explain where you are even coming from....Just start a new, origional story, let all previous reveiwers know and we will read. I will, anyway.

By the by, your lemons are awesome. Not physically possible, but awesome. Been there, done that! Breaks furniturerns rns out to be astoundindgly uncomfortable or the wrong position described for results. But at least you don't appear to be asking your audience to grow an extra vertebra or arm or so. (my personal favs,!!) My vote *****!

One negative: lose the towel. Put down tarps if you want to get that goofy, do the laundry at some point. Towels make me think of saving the sheets for multiple partners or illicit sex. *Sigh*, no I never did any such thing but I have good reason to know...you are indicating something you don't mean.

Geez...what weird post...
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From ANON - Lady Kagome on March 18, 2004
Wow...

Just wow. It took me over three days to read this... every spare moment I had was spent staring at a computer screen, greedily taking in your wonderful story. I haven't slept more than an hour in the past 48 hours, and I blame it all on you... and your magnificent way of bringing the reader right into the story.

Thank you so much for sharing this with us humble readers. I only hope that my own story can be half as good and half as loved as yours is.

Thank you again, I look forward to reading more of your work.

Jennifer
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From ANON - Soranji on March 17, 2004
*crying* there will be a sequel right? I need more. This got me through the semester knowing I had a great story to read. I will miss it. I loved this story. It was and is one of the best I have read in a long time. Its up there with 'Turnabout is Fair Play' and my favorite author and friend, animechick262003. I reallpe ape after a rest you write some more. I don't know if I can function without a chapter of something from you.. And I promise you write a new story and I'll explode on a daily basis. lol ok bye bye now.
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From ladykagome0818 on March 17, 2004
Okay, I sat down to read this a little while ago because I noticed that it was complete, and it was about time to actually read a whole story. :) So thank you for that to start.

Now, I must add, that you have the greatest sense of humor. I love all your little one liners, and since you commented about how Bill and Johnnie really took place in your life it makes it even more iestiesting imagining this story.

You really let some guy braid your hair on a bus? That's insane lmao, I commend you for that tehehe.

Anyway, I am going back to your story now, as I am addicted. :)
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From ANON - RavenSwp� w on March 16, 2004
This is truely a great story! I loved every minute of it. I loved the whole idea of it based off that song and this story made me feel so much. I really think you have a real talent there and I hope to see more stories from you in the future. Thanks for the experience!!!
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From ANON - LadyKagome on March 16, 2004
Hi there, I haven't read much of your stoy yet, just part of the first prolouge with Inuyasha's interaction to Kikyo. But I looked at the song you used "Sic Transit Gloria" and the title seemed really familar to me. Well it turns out that I heard this song for the first time last Wednesday on a local radio station, and it really spoke to me, but I couldn't figure out what it was called!

So basically, thank you for using these lyrics, I think that they fit very well with what you are writing, I hope that the rest of your story is as good as the beginning. (Don't worry, I will leave a review when I am done... I have just settled in to read the whole thing lol)

Sorry for the randomness of the review!
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From ANON - drake220 on March 16, 2004
oh
wah........................
i'm not ready to let go yet!!! i really really REALLY think you should post this on ff.net. oh, this is the best story ever. most wonderful and poignant story EVER. i loved it. i got sucha kick reading it. do you know i've actually reread this story? yes, i have adn thats how good it as. you absolutely MUST post another story though i really dont know how it will surpass this one. parting is such sweet sorrow but the going was good and all good things must come to an end. now that i've exhausted my repetiore of cheesy trite sayings, i'll leave you with this:
THANK YOU FOR WRITING THIS FIC!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU ARE A REASON FOR WHY SITES LIKE THIS WERE INVENTED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Ickabod119 on March 16, 2004
WOW!!! You have blessed us readers with an unbelievable story!!! I hope you post more stories for us to read ALL HAIL THE GREAT SABICHAN!!!
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From DyslexicSquirrel on March 16, 2004
"Even though I can't play anything or sing worth shit, I have a passion for music that fuels everything I do." I'm like that, too. Well, I can technically play clarinet, but I suck. And my singing? Woo, don't get me started. Music is a big part of my life though. I am constatly listening to something, except when I sleep. ^^ I have been influence by so many songs and gotten so many ideas for fics, it's ridiculous.

I am sad to see this fic over, as as they say (whoever they are) "All good things must come to an end." And this, I know, is in no way the last good thing that you will write. They had a little boy! I know you're not supposed to care. People always say you should just want your baby to be healthy, but that's kind of a given seeing as no one in their right mind will say, "I want my baby to be diseased." When I have kids, and seeing as how things are going in my love life or lack there of will be a while (good thing. So not ready for kids yet), I want a boy. Not that I'd love a girl any less or anything, but I want a boy.

Oh, I was talking to one of the people I work with who goes to school in Boston. She was here for Spring Break and shid sid she was going to take pictures of all the things about Philly she misses. Do you miss Wawa? I thit mit might just be a Pennsylvania thing (someone corrct me if I am wrong). Wawa rocks. If anyone doesn't know what a Wawa is, just think of a 7 Eleven, but better. They have asome coffee. ^^

I think I have rambled enough and I have fics to wrind pnd posts on Gaia to make so hope to see a new fic from you soon! Can't wait.
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