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By : Sabichan

From ANON - Soranji on February 22, 2004
*dies* I cried. But Sess and Rin *blushes* hhehehe *laughs like a mad woman*
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From ANON - Carrie on February 22, 2004
Umm...just to tell you now I sometimes tend to be a typo nazi. I do it to my friends alot, which gets annoying after a while 'caLordLord knows they make typos like crazy. I also sometimes correct people when they pronouce words wrong or speak in grammatically incorrect sentences. It was that damn Catholic school and their fucking focus on grammer. -_- Worst eight years of my life. Anyway, to get to the point, yes there is a point, in the paragraph where you are describing what Ayame is wearing, I think you missed a noun. "...a chained collar around her slim."

Now that I said that....As much as I hate Koga, Yay for him. He has himself his own little dominatrix. I never really thought Naraku was evil, I just didn't like him all that much 'til later chapter. I mean let's admit it, he was a horrible father, but...meh

Great chapters as usual. I'll read chapter 33 tomorrow after work. I really need to get to bed. It's almost 1:30 and I have to get to bed. I only have myself to blame for this though becasue I could just have not read these chapter since I got on the computer so late....hahaha not read the chapters, like that would even be an option. I can't not read.

I should have stopped reading that damn book though. I'm finished and now I have to go get another book. I am slowly collecting a library. It was a good book though. It's called "Bet Me" by someone whos name escapes me right now. It's stupid, but it kind of gave me hope that not all men are shallow assholes that want girlfriends who are a size sixes. I wouldn't have finished it if It wasn't for the train ride, half an hour each way. Just a little word of advise, if you are ever in Philadelphia and trying to find a street, pay really close attention because sometimes they FAIL TO PUT UP STREET SIGNS. I walked like 3 blocks past the street I was looking for. I fucking hate this city sometimes. If it didn't have suck good soft pretzels, cheese steaks, and Tastykakes I might consider moving ^_^ Not to mention the zoo kicks ass. I lub our zoo. The new primate house they built after the last one burnt to a crisp rules. There are these adorable little Colobus (I think I might have spelled that wrong) monkies who chase eachother around and throw lettuce all over the place....

I really need to stop the rambling a bit. I should go to bed. Even though I get to go inork ork a whole hour later (8am instead of 7am) I'm still going to be tired like I always am. So, goodnight and goodbye till next review (which will be tomorrow).
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From ANON - shaid on February 22, 2004
first: Rin and Sessh!!! YAY!!!!! They feel so darn RIGHT toer.
er.

Second: You made me cry. I don't usually cry at these fan fics but damn it, you made me cry. HE understand and he wants her to be happy, that's greaBut But she's not going to be happy without him. That wonderful scene where she's driving in her car and imagineing him next to her... That's going to haunt her. It's going to hurt, not having him with her. And she'll return to him... maybe not immidiately, but soon...

And he COULD go looking for her if he wanted... Naraku never said he wouldn't let Inu find her and if naraku marries Shironi, then he'll be more inclined to see to the happiness of his step-son, won't he? ok, so that's my idea. Prove me wrong?
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From ANON - drake220 on February 22, 2004
ok, mybe its b/c i'm PMSing, maybe its the sappy song on the radio (100 years by 5forfighting) but there are tears in my eyes. oh good lord that was the most amazing chapter!!! the sweetness of the sess/rin thing was so t ant and then inu's love for kagome being so obvious adn unselfish- AH! i can't take this chapter, its too good!!!!! anyone who says that inu acted weirdshould go straight to hell b/c he acted like someone who was in true love would act. she got her wish, she had freedom, choice to make her own mistakes- he knew her, adn THATS why he's happy for her! he knows her better then anyone else adn he knows that she needs this! thus, while everyeon else is hurt that she left without a word, he's okay with it! BECAUSE HE LOVES HER!!!!!!!!! ::does a happy twirly dance:: loved it! loved it!!!!!! if i ever write anything that inspired....i dont know what i'll do, but it'll be impressive. thank you for writing that chapter!!!!!! it was SO GREAT!!!!
BTB, the kouga thing was right on! loved thao! so! so funny!!!!!! poor kouga's become a submissive! hehehehehehe!!!!!!!! whip it! whip it good!!! haha!! i am so happy that you update quickly!
(did i say that i adore this fic? just in case you didnt get it- wow! great fic!!!)
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From ANON - kilame-chan on February 22, 2004
I am in love with your story! As soon as I think I know where the plot is heading you do a 180 on me and I love, love it bad. I know you said you liked happy endings so I'm waiting for the Inuyasha and Kagome lemon chapter!! Don't keep us waiting to long! :)
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From ANON - ladykaa28 on February 22, 2004
YAY! For Rin and Sess. How long will Kagome be gone? Please don't say that it will be for years like Sess. I don't think that even Inuyasha could hold on that long. Now that things are finally coming together in his life the very one that he needs has left. I hope that Kagome will come to her senses soon and go back to the man that helped her become the person that she is now.
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From ANON - ~A~ on February 22, 2004
ohmyg I love your story ;_; It makes me cry! This chapter and when he tried to kill himself. Anyways, I just love it.

Oh, and you're welcome btw ^_~ I was the anonymous reviewer. I forgot to put my name on it ^_^;; Sorry
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From ANON - ladykaa28 on February 21, 2004
Oh my. Ooh! OK! What a chapter!!!
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From ANON - on February 21, 2004
um...chapter 32 is STILL just an author's note... just fyi
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From ANON - kb on February 21, 2004
I cannot begin to tell you how much i love this story. I'm hopin for a lemon for kag and inu, it would be nice for them to finally get together. eeek plz update soon!
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From ANON - Shaid on February 21, 2004
Apparenly I'm that one reader who's really easy to please. What happened to Shoji IS sad, but it's better than thher her two senarios I'm sure most of us thought of. Makes Naraku an ok guy, which I don't like, but hey, I'm not the one writing the story.

And Rin!!!!! YAY!!!!! ::jumps up and down and squeals happily:: I LOVE the pairing of Sessh and Rin, it's too incredibly RIGHT in my mind. Rin is a sweet innocent that counters and softens Sessh's dark evilness.

Anyway, KEEP WRITING!!!!!!

Arigato!

Shaid
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From ANON - Soranji on February 21, 2004
So Naraku's good? I'm happy then.I wanted Inu's mom t be happy. I'm glad Sesshy came back and I'm very happy you included Rin. I can't wait to see what you have in store for us. ^_^
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From ANON - Carrie on February 20, 2004
Okay, Okay. I know you are probably sick of hearing from me, but I forgot something. I noticed in the chapter where Inu was telling Kagome about the "incident" with Kikyo that he said he was seventeen, but in the rest of the story and even right before that he said he was sixteen. Just thought I'd point that out. I know if I did that I would want to know, so I'm extending the same curtesy..

Oh yeah and also I hate Kikyo, if I didnt' say that before. I'm glad- I probably shouldn't sh tsh that snetence. I don't know how far into the series you have seen and don't want to ruin anything, but if you don't care ask me to finish my sentence and I will. ^_^
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From ANON - Carrie on February 20, 2004
I only have one question...

WHAT THE FUCK IS GOING TO HAPPEN WITH NARAKU AND SHIORI NOW THAT SESSHOUMARU FOUND SHOJI!?

*clears throat* Okay. not that that's out of the way....AHHHHHHHHH! ^_^ I love this fic more now if that possible. It just keeps getting better and better. I ALMOST cried on during that one chapter where Inuyasha decides he want to kill himself. That's just so damn sad. Suicide depresses me...which it should because it's a depressing thing. While on the topic of death, I saw two damn funeral processions this week waiting for the bus on my way home (why can't I meet a Bishie at the bus stop? All I seem to meet are social rejects and stalkers. He doesn't even need to be that cute, just semi-normal). I have come to abhore (cool word) those stupid little flags or stickers that they put on the cars. I'm going to put something in my will that says "No little flags or stickers on the cars in the funeral procession, under penalty of haunting." That would be funny. Imagine hte lawyers face when I say I want to put that in there. lol

Oh, I have a funny story. It shows just how whitty my memory is. now, my sister is 2 and 1/2 years older than me so I have literally known her since I was born. Well, she'd not home alot (even more so not that she moved into a dorm) so I dont' see her alot. One day I was in the kitchen and looked out the window and saw her parking the car in the driveway. I went back into the living room and turned to my dad after I sat down and said "What's-her-face is home." I completley blanked on her name. How sad iat. at. I forgot my sisters name. I mean I forget her birthday alot, but her NAME!? Now everytime my sister comes home my dad says "What's-her-face is home" to make fun of me. It really kind of funny.

Now that my random s is is over. Can't wait for the next chapter....really I can't!

O_O I'm so serious about that. I really can't!
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From ANON - drake220 on February 20, 2004
gotta be honest, i knew that sessy-chan was coming back adn rich as king midas (b/c in all honesty does anyone ever see sessy as poor?? no, i thought not) but that he found the father i wasnt expecting. i was expecting inu to find him. adn kag leaving is a bit of a shock. But i loved the relationship between kikyo adn kagome. kikyo is a very mature person in the manga/show/wahtever medium you choose and, once she knows shes wrong, i think she reacted very believablely. great chapters!
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