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By : arina
  • From ANON - xxxx on July 16, 2005
    tongue isnt a hard word to spell ya know

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  • From ANON - Ann on July 04, 2004
    Two words- spell check.
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  • From ANON - hentiafluffy on May 14, 2004
    thanks for all the reveiws. I have edited the story to youre specific problems thank you and hope you'll continue to read it
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  • From ANON - hentiafluffy on May 14, 2004
    thanks for all the reveiws. I have edited the story to youre specific problems thank you and hope you'll continue to read it
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  • From ANON - hentiafluffy on May 14, 2004
    thanks for all the reveiws. I have edited the story to youre specific problems thyou you and hope you'll continue to read it
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  • From JuneMann on May 14, 2004
    I will not be gentle. I was going to read further chapters in this piece, but somethitopptopped me. Lack of paragraphs. No offence, go back and edit this. Put in some paragraphs. This isn't a short piece you're doing, without these simple divisions a person can get jumbled up. Lord knows I did!

    Don't worry, it was an otherwise okay work. Just I kind of a have a thing against no paragraphs.
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  • From ANON - hentiafluffy on May 07, 2004
    you guys will have to wiat for the next chapters because I'm still working on them. sorry. oh and thanks for all the reveiws it has really helped alot.
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  • From ANON - hentiafluffy on May 06, 2004
    I'm editing my chapters as we speack so if you have requests to make the chapters better don't hesitate to tell me
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  • From ANON - deep serenity on May 06, 2004
    hey, not to bad for first fic. use spell check and find another word for "nibble"
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  • From ANON - hentifluffy on May 06, 2004
    well this is one of my first stories so on the later chapters I will try to beef it up ok :D
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  • From ANON - Whiskas on May 05, 2004
    ok i guess it was ok but there where quite a few of grammar erros, and it sorta seemed to shoot through rather quickly in dialouge wise like at one point it would be at a certain point but then just automatically jump from something completely off topic. and you really didn't do a good job of describing the scenes or the characters' states.
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