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By : Elysant

From ANON - modra on October 18, 2004
oh, and i almost forgot... whatever happened to that liitle fox-demon from the beginning of the story who was all beat up (i'm gonna venture a guess that it was shippou...?) he kinda showed up and it seemed important but you haven't mentioned him since. umm... yeah. just curious :)
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From ANON - modra on October 18, 2004
wow... awsome story so far! i absolutely love it! so i'm guessing the whole kikyou mess is far from over huh? now, i really don't dislike kikyou in the anime, (well... much :P she's not all bad) but i must admit her villainous fanfic incarnations are rather fun.. haha... so, any possibility of ayame hooking up with kouga? not that i don't love his arguing with inu and all... well anyhow, i've rambled on enough. again, great story, great characters. you mention english not being a first language, but i haven't really noticed many grammar mistakes, nothing that i found distracting. anyway, update soon!
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From ANON - Nire-Neko-Sama on October 18, 2004
Awesome chapter!!...Glad that your feeling better and back into action!!...^^..LoL Can't wait until next update...Hope it's soon!! XD
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From ANON - Drew on October 17, 2004
Yay! Finally! TWO more chapters! Im so happy you finapostposted. And two chapters at that. LEMON FlufFluff! All very nice! [ I had a feeling Kikyo was the waitress! Good thing she got told off.] Write more lemons soon, alright! I love this story so much. Anxiously awaiting your next chapter...
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From ANON - Takhisis on October 17, 2004
liked?? I absolutely LOVED that lemon scene! WOW!! I think I'll have to take a cold shower before I go to bed! I'm glad you're better already, please don't keep us waiting too long! ^_^
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From ANON - Shjorpa on October 17, 2004
Hej!
T�nkte skriva p� svenska eftersom jag inte f�r g�ra det s� ofta n�r jag kommenterar folks verk :)

Det h�r �r v�ldigt bra m�ste jag s�ga. Jisses, f�rst var det den sexuellt laddade atmosf�ren mellan dem tv�, och sen sexscenen som var otroligt sexig. �nskar min f�rsta g�ng hade varit s� bra. Ingen av oss fick orgasm den g�ngen :/
Det var sk�nt att de l�rde k�nna varandra lite innan de hoppade i s�ng (men att det �nd� inte gick femtioelva kapitel innan man kom dit som en del f�rfattare g�r). Det g�r att det k�nns troligav�rdigare som en romanshistoria, och inte typ "tja" *sex* "�h, jag �lskar dig!" "dito bruden" p� 0,5 sekunder. Udu vdu vet vad jag menar... :) Det var ocks� sk�nt att slippa s� m�nga av stereotyperna som (tyv�rr) �veranv�nds inom Inuyasha fanfiction. Ofta tr�ffas de, hatar varandra, br�kar som tusan medan Sango och Miroku st�r bredvid och skakar p� huvudena �t dem (�tminstone n�r Miroku fortfarande �r vid medvetande) och sen inser de att de �lskar varandra ochg�r g�r de p� date i en n�jespark och lever lyckliga resten av livet tillsammans med Sango och Miroku som lyckades bli k�ra unde kor korta stunder han inte hade hj�rnskakning. De k�nns mer genuint att de drar relativt j�mt eftersom de m�ste �n att de b�ddar s�ck �t varandra och s�nt. Tack f�r att jag fick se karakt�rerna jag �lskar snarare �n omogna fjorton�ringar med samma namn.
En sak jag funderade p� var VARF�R Kikyo inte l�g med Inuyasha. Det f�rklarades inte riktigt. Jag menar, om jag vore ihop med en s�dan snygging i fem �r s� skulle jag inte l�ta stackaren f�rbli oskuld medan jag skaffade en K.K. Hon visste ju inte att han �r hanyou, och om hon ville verka som en 'duktig flicka' s� hade hon ju kunnat v�nta ett par m�nader in i f�rh�llandet innan de gick s� l�ngt med varandra. Bara mina 2 �ren ;)

Ha det bra!
/Shjorpa

P.S. Jag ser g�rna en till onaniscen med Inuyasha i huvudrollen ;)
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From ANON - plz update soon on October 14, 2004
plz update soon i ahve been reading from the beginning and its so good so update soon plz plz plz plz plz plz plz
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From ANON - its great on October 12, 2004
I think its really great so plz update soon plz plz plz
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From ANON - Julie on October 10, 2004
This is a really great story. I noticed you haven't updated in a few months. Are you going to continue to update?
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From ANON - MidsummerDreamer on September 30, 2004
Hey!
This is a really great story! I usually don't approve of AUs because I so seldom find realistic ones, but this is right on mon money! I really hope you update soon. I want to see how it all comes out.
Keep up the good work!
~MD
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From ANON - Faye on September 29, 2004
wow! I'm really really enjoying your story! Lately I've been skimming through some fan fictions, and I think on a livejournal community someone reccomended this story, soI thought, hey why not? Although I'm not very fond of AU InuYasha storys, just as a personal prefrence I guess, but your story is so great! You keep the story line moving, and the detail of your characters is so close to the originals. Mostly when I read an AU fiction, its like they only keep the name ofthe character, and everything else has changed, but not in your story!
I'm not here to criticise (oh gods I cant spell) you, so I'll tell you which parts I'm liking so far. I like how you mention Inu's car, and how its red, then later on how Kagome gets a red dress, I get so caught up in reading I don't notice that red is his favorite color, until it's mentioned, so that allows me to think back, which in tun, keeps me interested. I also liked how you let the relationship grow between InuYasha and Kagome before anything inimate happened. So many times I read a story, where they first met, and one chapter later, they've already done it. If that happened in every day life (even though, as we both know, this isnt everyday life), then we would all be whores. haha. Anyways.
I am very much anticipating your next chapter, so while I wait, I'm going read over which parts I may have missed (I kept getting interrupted by phone calls). Thank you very much for sharing your creativity with me and for being such a wonderful writer!

Faye
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From ANON - Chokoreto on September 25, 2004
URKK!! I HATE YOU!! LOL!! YOU MADE THIS S SOO SOO GOOOD!! >___________< Your writing skills is magnificent i juss have to say that juss to get that anger out of my body! hahahhas anywayss love the plot and the way your story is in placee. I hope you have lemons in the near chapter cuzz it would make me happy loll Hmm..... i wonder what happen to Kikyou after Inuyasha found out she's cheating on him. Would she try to win him back? LOL Though no offence or anything i "hate" kikyou...anywayssss more chapters pleaseee!
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From ANON - Margot on September 23, 2004
Hey girl! Its been awhile since you updated and I was thinking, you know, that maybe YOU SHOULD!!! You can't just leave me hanging here when they FINALLY get together!! How cruel can you be? Please! please! please! I'm begging you PLEASE update!!!!!
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From freakenbree on September 20, 2004
Okay, I have been waiting patiently for you to update, and I am dying now!!!!!! Must update...or say...I die! *cough hag!* Ooo...candy... ((BTW: Great story, I absolutely love it!!!))
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From ANON - Zee and Ray-mon on September 18, 2004
R: "Are ya portuguese?"

Z: "Where the hell would you insinuate that from? You haven't got a clue!"

R: "Are you Cree?"

Z: "An Indian?!"

R: "Are you Portu-Cree?"

Z: *Stabs Ray in the eye with a pencil* "Shuddap!"

R: "What's this gunk?"

Z: "Never mind. We honestly admire your writing and grammer skills. Most people would just write 'dey rub eachodder, den dey f***! The END!' You have some of the best writing skills that I know of."

R: "I think this stuff ain't good for my cold. I'm missing some lovin' here! Inu!!! Kag!!!! how beautiful!"

Z: "We've been missing you! I'm praying for the evil s tos to go away, for both you and Ray. Moreso you because she's trying to get me sick."

R: "I just don't want to be lonely, tis all..."

Z: "You just like to torture me."

R: "Moo!!! *turns away* So, are ya Slovenian!?"

*BANG!*

Z: "Sleep is good for your body anyways."

R *swirly-eyed on ground* "But I don't wanna go to school today. I wanna stay here and bake cookies with you!"

Z: "Let us pray."

"We miss you and still wait for the next chapter. Although we didn't get cliffed, we feel you've only toasted one side of the bagel (How are you suppose to make those anyways?) Au Revoir for next time!"
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