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Reviews for Sloppy Seconds

By : CutiePieHentai

From ANON - kagomegirl on February 17, 2005
i really like your story it was great.i was really moved with the chapter about your story. i really hope you can continue this story cause im really interested in this story. i think you are a great writer. hope you write soon
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From ANON - Chaotic Scribe on February 08, 2005
I am speechless... Well.... I guess not really since I'm saying something, but, wow! This fanfiction is amazing!! I started reading it yesterday..., and spent all of today putting of chores to read some more. I'm so tired because I just couldn't tear myself away from my laptop! I got to the last to chapters before deciding to go to bed since it was already almost 1 a.m. So I got settled and closed my eyes but just couldn't! So I rolled back over, grabbed my computer and read my heart out. Now, it's 1:53 and I... should have been to sleep hours ago, lol. That was truly amazing! I have never come across a fanfiction so attention grabbing and expertly written. I liked the way you never came out right and blabbed events, but rather cut off in certain areas and led us, the readers, to entertaining scenes ^-^ There is nothing at all I can complain about- Zip. Zilch. Notta- I can't even describe how much I enjoyed reading this. You are an amazing author!
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From ANON - Inuyasha\'s_Lover on February 06, 2005
I've read all of Sloppy Seconds and I only have two words to say:
FABOUSLY GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!=)
This story and your style of writing is just great! This one is one of the best Inu/Kag paring story I have EVER,EVER read! Seriously. Every thing was perfect!! Even Kikyo's Character(although I'm a SERIOUS Kikyo Hater!)I'm really impressed with your creative story line,espically mating rituals. I only have one question about that.Will the thing about Inuyasha not being able to hurt Kagome impact them having children,hypothetically speaking?Other than that I think this is the highest of the high on my list. You can count on me re-reading this fanfiction over and over again! Please Tell me you are going to update!?
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From ANON - Shiga on January 31, 2005
HEY THERE! I'm a new reviewer though teh story has almost ended! I just found it and man oh man was it ever good! I've been reading since this morning and I just finished now so i guess that means I'm friken slow at reading! I CAN'T BELIEVE YOU HAVE SEEN THE LAST EPISODE! YOU ARE LIKE A GOD!!!! Well goddess considering your not a man but that's besides the point! Was it good? Did it lack? OH and I loved your music video! That song rules! Tainted love *clap clap* tainted love!! ^_^ I feel bad that I didn't catch this story at the beginning of its posting because I ALWAYS review ever update. Well thsi long review will have to do! I do hope you will be updating so we find out what his wish is! Will it be to keep the well open for her? Will it be for her to live as long as he does? I think it'll be the first one... don't know why just a gut feeling. Of course my gut feelings have often been wrong but their still fun! Oh and I am sooo sorry about your husband =( That story made me cry!! I hope your recouperating from it okay. I beliee you said it's been 4 years but I bet it still hurts. It was nice that you opened up to yoru readers and shared that though since it might have been hard. On a happier note (I hate making reviews sad they are menat to cheer up the author!! I myself ador reviews! Nothing like a good old ego stroking ^_^ lol) this story is the bomb(for lack of a better catch phrase. Though the bomb is a classic and shall live on!) It had me happy, sad, angry, entralled, and I even said "aww" outloud on SEVERAL occasions. My mom thought I was nuts since she thought i was studying for my history exam lol. She asked me what was so cute about World War Two. Needless to say I got in crap for reading instead of studying lol but twas worth it!!! Wow I have yammered on for a while now. I need to learn to stop babbling in my reviews. But I did have 33 chapters to make up for. hmm what else did I have to say before I forget? Oh I thought yoru war seen was great! I suck at writing them! I always avoid contravery in my stories so I don't have to write them lol. OH!! And that was great with the theme of the story thing! I tried to figure it out just for fun but came up short! Big old congrats to the people who got it. Thsoe are some smart cookies... well humans. Unless one of them is a cookie who can read and type and if so an even bigger congrats! I think that's it... I hate Kikyou.... and umm.... I thought the Sango and Miroku story line was great too and... Shippou was cute... OH did I meantion I hate Kikyou? Sorry animosity... I think that's all. If I remember anything else I'll just review again. Now to get to studying history! You wouldn't knwo when the first Naval Service Bill was issued would you? Having a hell of a time lol. BYE

April ^_^

p.s You rule ^_^ and sorry for any typing errors. I often get my fingers mixed when typing, you know?
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From on January 25, 2005
please write more! Please!
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From ANON - essie on January 22, 2005
this great please update
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From ANON - Cassi on January 19, 2005
OMG! That was an amazing scene! The pictures it brought to mind, with the way you so elequently put every word, every expression of their love and their passion. OH, it was AMAZING! Keep up the GREAT work! YOU ARE GENIUS!
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From Kure on January 19, 2005
I love your story. It's brilliantly thought out. It has a plot not so different from what you would expect in the Manga or Anime with like a little Hentai twist that would most likely never be allowed (damn you FCC!). Keep up the great work looking forward to the next chappie.
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From ANON - WiccanMethuselah on January 18, 2005
I spent today reading a fascinating story with an unusual name ... one that initially prompted me to avoid the story altogether. I'm glad now that I took the chance and read the story completely - with author's notes - to the most recent chapter (34). I laughed, cried, and cheered on our heroes and heroines every step of the way. I felt your sadness when describing your husband's passing and how you wove it into the story. I felt your anxiety over your Grandfather. You are a talented, multi-faceted writer, with a gift for turning the (seemingly) smallest plot twist into a cliffhanger several chapters down the road. I look forward to seeing how you wrap all the ties together at the end, and I thank you for a day of fascinating reading!!!
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From ANON - roseth0orn on January 18, 2005
wow, one of the best love scenes i have ever read !!!!!!!
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From ANON - Suze on January 18, 2005
*gulp* Did it get hot in here or is it just me??? Whooooo..... I love it!!! :D
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From KuroKen on January 18, 2005
Whoa. Few things read as well as those that are written with life experience to back them up -before you think me moderately...ok seriously deranged- bear in mind that the things I say I mean with nothing but respect. I asked my girlfriend to read this-the whole enchilada- but I HAD to get her to read this latest chapter first, she came to the same conclusion: the caring, yet wanton way in which you describe intimacy between *sighs because of the clich� he's about to use* soul mates is a force all of its own. It transcends the stylistic needs of the story and even the characters themselves.

To explain lovemaking in such a frank and honest way just has the heft of 'realness' to it.
When Kagome goes thru the "please no more...it's too much" stage or as she attempts to explain "no...not like that..." it increases the degree in which the readers can relate with the story: as much as some other works would have you believe that both parties always know what's going on or even what the 'best' thing to get a rise from their partner is, without ever having doubts or God forbid asking for directions, it is just not as immersing as when the audience gets to partake in Inu's discovery of how to stimulate Kagome's body alternatively to keep from burning the poor girl out or the anxiety both show when because of the newness of their intimacy they fear hurting or offending their lover.
We laughed, albeit a bit self-consciously as we read this together, more than anything we laughed in recognition, we have both said or done the same things when first learning each others bodies, likes and needs�but I digress. *Remembers he has a bottle of Merlot and a girl to attend to*

Again great payoff for the buildup, I can�t wait to see the next chapter. Hurry up and don�t forget Sango and Miroku those two need more practice :-P

P.S. Thanks for helping me get some tonite, heh heh.

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From ANON - snowfall on January 18, 2005
Excellent lemon. I love Inu ear sex. I'm breathless and at a loss for words. The ending was very cute. I'm simply too tired to give an extended review. Perhaps tomorrow.
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From ANON - ectweak2004 on January 17, 2005
The undone buttons totaled five. okay... that was pretty good. a little different than other stories about Kag and Inu mating... but I guess you didn't take in the "mark" that most others do... not to knock you or anything... that was very well written though. Keep it up, you're almost done!!!
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From ANON - Spud on January 17, 2005
Holy SHIT!!!! *moves to stand over vent and turns A/C up full blast* I'm gonna be here for a while, so I'll just get on with it. DAMN that was one helluva lemon!! *does tiny happy dance* You are a very experienced writer. I respect you for that. *bows down* Well, there's really nothing more to say, so I'll wait in murderous anticipation for the next update. Bye!
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