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By : CutiePieHentai

From ANON - Revera_04 on January 14, 2005
Friggin awesome story
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From ANON - Suketchi on January 13, 2005
Hello,

First of all, I'd like to say thank you for such amazing work.Never in all my years of reading fanfiction, have i EVER read anything so astonishing....Seriousley. You are an inspiration to us all, including myself, who have had difficult lifetime experiances, showing us we're able to express ourselfs though writing, weather it be from our imagination, or a way to let out suppressed emotions that have been built up inside for so long.

The way you write is absolutley magnificent, each detail pictured in our heads, every scene visible in our minds....its,..there are no words to discribe this overwelming writing style...I am, which doesnt happen at all, speachless. For those who know me, know i am one who speaks my mind, weather saying something positive or negitive and you my dear...you....are a fabulous writer. I myself write and dont come close to your expertice, and no one else that ive read, including in books, do either.

I've been reading fanfiction for a very long time now, and have recently started my own fanfic, and would be greatly honored if you would read it and tell me what you think. It will never live up to the greatness of your writing, yet if you were to look at it and tell me what is good/bad in it, seeing that your such a talented writer I would hope you could give me some...pointers...per say. I bow to you, and hope that my post will be answered, for meeting someone such as yourself, would be a great thrill...honestly. Anyway, I also wanted to say, that i usually never do post a reveiw on any stories i read, weather i like them or not, so i hope this symbolizes that i truly do love your story.

Again, arigato for such an amazing peice, and i hope to hear from you soon. If you are intrested in reading my story, please let me know, and i'll email it....so yeah. Oh, and please update soon, that was a...'cliffy' right there, so please hurry.lol. thanks again,

^_^ Suketchi
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From ANON - Sandro666 on January 12, 2005
Okay, this is an unusual request from me, but the story was so good, and so right, and so enticing that I wish two things from you:

1) Please update with an ending soon, and not a crappy short one (I don't think you'll do this but just in case) along with a sequel

2) Change the word "Koi" to Koibuta, or whatever the original name is for the reason that the word "Koi" is the derogatory term for an orgasm, so saying it sort of just dampens the mood (No pun intended)

Once again thanks for such a great story so far, and when you do update I ask that you will please email me at: sandyblackhawk@hotmail.com
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From ANON - kinky lurker on January 12, 2005
well, i have to say, the fluff is good. (the kami saw the fluff, and was proud) you did a wonderful job depicting a very poetic and moving end to the relationship of kikyo and inuyasha (hate the pairing, love what you've done with it!). i also think that the fluff was just beautiful between kagome and inuyasha. not to mention, the seductive bathing they shared with one another. (i would loe to take a bath with the two of them so long as they washed my back... ^.~)

a few mistakes that i noticed though, kikyo's soul skimmers are shinidama-chuu. and i love you is aishiteru. there was one more, but obviously it wasn't that important or i would remember it here at the review stage, ne? other than that, this was a wonderful chapter and i really, really, really can't wait for the next chapter with the lemon.

tell me he's going to be a little rough with her. please? i mean, he was sweet and loving and kind and beautiful in this chapter, but i think i need more from him than that. especially if the mating ritual binds all of them, mind, body, and soul than there should be a little roughness, ne? and way to go kagome! (the horny little miko!)

okay, now that i've written you a novel, i enjoyed the chapter and i look forward to more from you!

ja ne!
~hanyou-elf

and hey, what do you mean when you say it's far from over? give me more! (begging here)
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From ANON - malice_elisa on January 12, 2005
The author's note was great and I'm glad your grandpa doesn't have cancer. I'm glad you're able to vent through your story and feel free to do it as much as you like.
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From ANON - malice_elisa on January 12, 2005
another great chapter. This chapter was so sweet. It's great that they finally worked everything out and now all they have to do is go through with it. It's good to have you back. I hope your week wasn't too horrible and that everyone is ok.
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From ANON - Spud on January 12, 2005
You made me CRY damnit! But it was still beatifully written and plotted. Loved the beginning. Loved it, loved it, loved it! The WHOLE godforsaken chapter! *whimpers* but you cut it off right before the lemon! I feel so cheated. :.( But lemon comes next chappie! *reads A/N* Awww... I feel so cherished... I would add that I feel warm inside, but that's just because I had mexican chili for lunch today. :D Can't wait 'till you update, so for the love of God, do it soon!
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From ANON - ~*(kagome)*~ on January 12, 2005
omg when i read when inuyasha sed will u marry me kagome i gasped this is the best story ever and u deserve alot of credit for this *sigh* i wish this was in the episodes this would b a relli good movie 4 inu/kag *claps* u r a relli good writer and i hope 2 c a update soon *gives you inuyasha movie 2 and inu plush*

Ja-Ne!

ps. u spelled ashiteru wrong lol jus 2 let u kno
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From ANON - YoukaiMusashi (not signed in) on January 12, 2005
Jen...what can I say? Again, wow. Wow. This chap blowed my mind...so erotic and sweet and wonderfully written...so here I am kissing your ass again :) Girl you are so freaking talented...one day, one day I'll be like you...::wistful look:: And did you see? ::jumps up and down:: I was actually Nominated too! I never knew about this until Scherezade told me! I'm so flattered and I still can't believe it! Anyway...I just wish I could say more in my reviews other than how talented you are and how much I LOVE this story and all your stories!!! But if I started telling you Everything I loved about this chap (and the whole story for that matter) I'd never finish...there isn't a single thing wrong with it!
I'm so glad it was a false alarm about your grandfather...I hope things are ok with you...all my love goes to you, Jen. I hope my email didn't offend you, I hope it helped a bit...email me if you feel like it, ok? Like I said, you can always count on This Youkai Musashi. I wanted to email this to you, not put it in the review...but it just came out and here it is. Also I don't mean to be a bother. I wish I could do more for you...all I can do is be there :) You always have my support, as a fan and hopefully a friend :) Also, is it awful of me to ask you to email me with some suggestions about chap 8? I realise it was rushed...want to edit it, make it as good as I can...I know I can never measure up to you or Scherezade...if you have the time and it's not too much to ask, would that be ok? I love you girl!
Your fics are amazing, you are amazing and I'm honored you would even take your time to read my fic...I hope this wasn't too demanding or anything, I didn't mean it to sound that way...send all my love to your family (especially the little one :) ) and as always all my love to you. You deserve happiness more than anyone I know. Hugs love and ramen! YM.
PS: Did I mention this story is absolutely Perfect??? Did I? Did I? Let me say it again...it's absolutely Perfect! Want more! :)
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From ANON - catt on January 12, 2005
WOW!!!! AWESOME CHAPTER!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!^_^
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From ANON - offdutyninja on January 12, 2005
that had to be the best uh... pre-mating of inuand kag i have ever read! fluffy to the max but still pure inuyasha! and thanks for the shout out, i'm a small person so i thrive on the little things. i think is awesome that you are willing to shore your self with complete strangers! we as human beings should be more trustful and friendly to others. you can always consider me as a friend!
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From ANON - hanyou slave on January 11, 2005
That was a wonderful chapter. It is the first time that I have read a fic in which Kagome's life was not extended, but Inu's shortened. I did not get impatient. Seuric helps keep us occupied. :-) Quality is worth the wait and you give us quality work. Plus, I've been busy working on a new fic.

I too have found friends here. Their stories and reviews helped dull the pain of a kidney tumor and they didn't complain much when the work was sloppy. The kidney has been removed and I'm editing right now fixing the errors made by AFF's database corruption and adding more detail. The months of waiting for a diagnosis and surgery would have been much worse were it not for the wonderful people on this site. I don't know that they will ever realize their worth.

I am glad that your grandfather does not have cancer and hope that he is well soon.

Though I look forward to your next chapter, don't rush. Take your time.

Hanyou Slave aka Snowfall
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From ANON - Chio on January 11, 2005
It was a really sweet chappy!!!!!!!
You make me see them in my mind, it was wonderful description.
The next chappy is a lemon!!!!!! *drools*

Thanks for sharing.

Chio
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From ANON - xXDark SlayerXx on January 11, 2005
Hmmmm no hug or praise from me, i've reviewed u before on fanfic.net and I don't even get a measly thank you, hmph, maybe next time i won't review your stories anymore! Hahahaha I can imagine your face right now 0_0* Icant believe this, she is totally a spoiled brat*. To tell u the truth i m not i really luved your story and everything I read the first 29 chapters in two days. It was really good, you get my vote at the fanguild awards I hope ya win on that joint, anyway congrats im thinking ur story is almost done and if u want to learn a lil bit bout me go to my bio on fanfiction.net, i am one ghetto ass girl. P.s will there b a sequel?

Ja Ne, ur biggest fan* even though i dont really review on this site*
Dark Slayer
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From VampireWitch on January 11, 2005
Rushed to read the minute you told me this was updated (which I really appreciate, thanks :) ). As to Kikyo's character, I haven't seen any of those really later episodes to judge, though I do believe she isn't as cold and heartless as she normally seems, simply because there is part of Kagome's soul in her. So to me, it was definitely a possibility for her to act that way. I love, too, how you captured the emotion of that moment.

I think the best part of the InuYasha/Kagome half of the chapter is how he was willing to wait for the human ritual of marriage before mating. Heh. The image of how shocked he must've been when Kagome just asked "When do we mate?" - someone should do a picture of that. I would, if I were a better artist with the InuYasha characters, but I've only just started with fanart.
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