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By : HimeAndi
  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on August 04, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 22, 2006
    Honestly, I don't see what people are going on about about your characterization. To me Sessh is VERY OOC. Too talky, too sympathetic just too not him. The lack of pronouns in your writing is also highly grating. Yes, in Japanese pronouns are not used as often, but this story is in English. Use some damn pronouns. Even Sesshomaru in Japanese refers to himself with "watashi", not repeating his own name over and over again in any reference to himself. And same with Rin. The occasional pronoun would be nice. Even though she does refer to herself by name, she DOES use pronouns. And it just sounds more natural.

    Your lemons, eh. Were ok. The internal hymen thing, gah. Hymens are located OUTSIDE the vagina, not inside. Also, a girl like Rin running around and riding Aun all those years would most likely not have one anyway. And if Rin was as wet and excited as you state in your story, her first intercourse would not be that painful. All these lapse of reality moments really ruin a lemon that would otherwise be pretty decent.

    I can't comment on the Sessh/Kagome chapter of your fic, because that pairing make me ill. But the first two chapters had Sesshomaru OOC, I would hate to see how horribly characterized he would be in that pairing anyway.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 15, 2006
    good story!
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  • From ANON - lr on September 07, 2005
    great story
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  • From ANON - L\'amor on September 07, 2005
    I adore this story, i never saw this point of view before. I love the whole Rin and Sesshomaru pairings, and making Rin the reincarnation of Kikyo was wicked. Everyone knows Rin will become a powerful prietess and you got to wonder where the power came from. At first reading this, I was like, "No Way, that is completely wrong". Mainly because I am a die hard traditional pairings (Inu/Kagome, Sango/Miroku(Miroku comes second cuz he's the girl in the relationship), and Sess/Rin), I even went to the point of thinking of reasons of why this couldn't occur. Like the fact that if Rin was in fact the reincarnation of Kikyo, she would be born with the Sacred Jewel (Shikon No Tama, *hope I spelled that right*) in her body, and that within days she would have been killed since she was born at the time of the ruling of demons when they coudl sense it, and killed for it. Then I began to think, no one knows how this actually works. Maybe the jewel disintegrated within the soul and physical accompaniment of Kikyo, and it was dispersed all over the place, and took a couple of lifetimes (no one knows how many reincarnations came between Kikyo and Kagome) for it to come back together in one solid physical endbodiment, like the jewel that Kagome ends up on her side. Another of my arguments was that Rin is hinted at being a powerful miko, (i don't know more then a few since I only watch the anime, but a few friends of mine say that it's strongly emphisized in the manga, I dont know). Like in the 3rd movie with the rosary beads where she manages to destroy a demon, and when kagome tries and nothing happens, because Rin has greater spiritual power. So I was like, it is possible for Rin to be more powerful then Kikyo but Kagome has to be more powerful then Rin for this to work out. Again though, I was thinking, no one knows how this works, so all my arguments against this story was destroyed, and i discovered that I really like it. I have to applaud you for being able to think of such an original plot. In all honesty I dont think i could have done it, again my head is usually stuck in somehting that someone else already has done. And sorry for writing for so long, I'm just pointing out the fatc that no one should not like this story because everything is plausible, fi you say its not, think about it harder, it is. Besides, this is someone's story adn they're allowed to do what they wish and change what ever they want. Sorry again, changin topics. This story was wonderfully written, and I loved the fact that it started early. Not because I'm into children or anything, but mainly because of the simple fact that this was like 500 years ago (give or take a few years), there was no age of consent, except the whole once you have your first period, and at the very latest one summer after that you will get married. Also, in my head it gives them more time together, and I'm a romantic sucker at heart. Oh, I also loved how you connected Rin and Kagome, the fact that Kagome didn't fear Sesshomaru, and there was something about the eyes, (oh somethign to kinda promote that this story is plausible is the episode of "Jaken Gets Sick", Jijenji says that Rin reminds him of Kagome, it could be both in spirit and looks, everyone always mentions the fact that Kagome and Kikyo have an uncanny resemblence, even though that has nothing to do with soul, only genes). Ooops wrote too much, nywyas, again, incredible mind to be able to come up with this plot and type of idea, congrats, i like the writing style, and lvoe the story, thanks!! L'amor
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on August 16, 2005
    I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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  • From ANON - bayusandiw on July 31, 2005
    the Three... WHAP... (offstage whisper, down boy) *_*... maybe in the Last of Their Kind!!... i really like that story too.
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  • From ANON - bayusandiw on July 31, 2005
    Now with what happened they need Inuyasha to make it three-some!! although i think He's prolly dead with not being around. and yeah... i think kagome's too fast in converting to rin and i'am one of those who says it is unlikely either... no offense meant though. Now that that out of the way, what about her(with inuyasha) promise?... i'm really looking forward toward the three-some!!^_^!!. the Three... WHAP... *_*...
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 23, 2005
    it was...disturbing (rin is only 9!)... but not that bad
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  • From BelleVixenBitch on July 22, 2005
    Normally, I'd hate the kiddie sex, but this was wonderful. You did a marvolous job and I must say I'm a HUGE fan of the Rin also being one of Kagome's preincarnations. *applauds* Please continue!
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  • From ANON - vashta on July 22, 2005
    Hey, I like your story, but I don't see Kagome sitting by and letting Sesh call her Rin and not treat her as herself. Wasn't that her pet peeve about Kikyo??! Of course it was. Now, he is just going to have to get to know her as Kag, and fall in love with her!! I kind of feel like she suffered an injustice with her first time being that way. He can't expect her to be like Rin, come on here, tell me I am right, she is not going to roll over and take it!
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  • From ANON - lilly on July 22, 2005
    Wow... I'm almost moved to tears. You are such a wonderful writer, and so descriptive! I read 'The Last of Their Kind' and had to read more of your writing!! This story is so moving and fascinating. The theory of Rin being a reincarnation of Kikyo is truly inventive, and it actually makes sense! I never really thought about it before, but it really could be possible. [This is why I read fanfiction, to enjoy other people's fascination and analysis of some of my favorite series.] I truly enjoy this story and am eagerly waiting for the next part. Please continue to write such wonderful, creative, and breath-taking tales.
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  • From ANON - blisblop on July 04, 2005
    That was very sensual and truly a fantasy worth having.You write het sex with a dexterous hand.Well done.
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  • From ANON - jem on June 18, 2005
    You are an absolutely awesome writer, and this is why I asked youto continue... was this SUPPOSED to be the end? ::sob:: I hope it isn't...
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  • From ANON - jem on June 18, 2005
    continue please!
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