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By : Vyncent
  • From ANON - Diane on December 29, 2004
    Chapters 16 & 17 seem to be the same chapter posted twice.
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  • From ANON - Nocturne22 on December 21, 2004
    Sometimes hard to read because of spelling errors..... LOTS of them. But, this is really good! I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Guard Geek on December 09, 2004
    Awesome story, and i loved the ironic ending, i think it was all very well done, and i agree that you ended at a good place. but maybe a sequel? a story of the children finding their power and prestige? I'd like to see them grow up some, and see what their adult lives would be like. once again i loved the story and the ending Good job!
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  • From ANON - Caitriona on November 27, 2004
    I have enjoyed this fiction quite a bit. While some ofthe last chapters seemed a little strained, the first 3/4 of them moved quickly and drew the reader along. The stiff characterization of the outward face of Sess. was perfect, and the inner face of him was also really good. The author wove a good tale of the Jewel's secret workings with Kikyo, Inuyasha, and Naraku. It was believeable and would have melded well with Cannon. Just having Kagome being a weak pushover without the background the author wove in would have been a real letdown. But surprise, it worked wonderfully. IY's hookup with Sango was a little strained, but fun after all of the Sango/Miroku fics, it was a nice change.

    All in all I would give this fic an 8 out of 10 or a B+ for enjoyability.

    Caitriona
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  • From ANON - LJoL on November 22, 2004
    Wonderful story. The plot was fluid and intoxicating, and the characters fleshed out very well. I personally felt the Kikyo rape scene would have been better off left as merely suggestive rather than described even as much as it was, but that is merely a personal preferrence rather than being a sign of plot failure. You do have issues at times where words come out garbled thanks to some kind of an error in formatting, this especially seemed to occur during certain chapters in the earlier part of the story. As an example.. a reader would be reading along through this wonderful story of yours only to come across something like, "it cauheaaused to think about it again." The error in these cases seems to have been that two words got merged together and then parts of the merging repeated once or twice more.

    Finally, I agree with you that this story ended with a wonderful closure point and to continue it to the point of the modern day events would have been a let down in fact.. but you missed one last line that should have been used at the very end of the epilogue chapter. "It seems history would know who truly was the unworthy one." As to me the epilogue is trying to show that the series name is pointing to Kikyo when the plot led people into at first believing it was referring to Kagome's self-perspective. That one line being added onto the end would have been the ultimate irony and the perfect closure to this story in my opinion.
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  • From ANON - darklady on November 14, 2004
    so cute ;.; and sweet nice job
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  • From migele on November 09, 2004
    that was intertessting.
    I really enyojed it!

    is it over or will you write the meeting of Kagome and Sesshoumaru with her family?
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  • From ColShaLin on November 09, 2004
    Wow. This is in INCREDIBLE story!! I read your name mentioned in the author's notes of someone else's stowho who had a very high opinion of your story) so I decided to check you out. I just spey eny entire day off reading, and I am just floored. This is so original, and so very touching. I'll tell you, I cried so many times during chapter 20 that I had to reread a lot of it!! I originally read this on Single Spark, but I decided to to comment here because it's so much more fun for everyone to SEE how many people love your story!! I thought I lucked into another chapter when I saw that this version has 21 but alas, it was just a mistaken duplicate chapter. Anyway, I love your style and originality, and I now look forward to spending my next day off reading the rest of your work. Thanks SO much for sharing!!!
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  • From ANON - Jennifer on November 08, 2004
    I really enjoyed this y...y...is there going to be an epilogue? even so...you are soooo talented and i can't wait to read any others you have or will write...koodos
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  • From ANON - darklady on November 07, 2004
    really good story i greatly enjoyed it however just my opinion but its a bit wordy and long winded you will say the same thing like ten times and different people will keep explaining things over and over as the reader they know whats going on and you don't need to let us listen in to all the explinations
    just a little critism x.x; gomen

    great story though!
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  • From ANON - vblum12 on November 05, 2004
    this is so good!
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  • From ANON - richonyx on November 03, 2004
    Yo! I love this story! The last chapter was great! Sango and Inuyasha finally gome-ome--Hooray! And poor Kouga--he never knows when to leave well enough alone. For a moment there I thought you were going to have him cross paths with Kikyou and take her to be the pack whore or something (my hentai rules me most of the day), but I hope he isn't too badly damaged from his little disgraceful performance. Anyway, great story and looking forward to your next update!
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  • From ANON - snowfall on November 03, 2004
    I'm glad to see that Kagome is being widely appreciated and so has begun healing her heart. That whole Kouga thing was great and I can't wait to see what Sango and Miroku are up to. Thanks for updating so quickly.
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  • From ANON - Shadow of Light (from mm.org) on November 03, 2004
    i have tried leaving reviews on mediaminer.org but the damn thing won't let them in even when i log in so i will place my reviews here.
    ch 17 ~ kikyou, you got what you watned so deal wiht it, bitch! and kagome, hey she spoke! but i don't blame her, i'm worried whether or not she can see her family.
    ch 19 ~ ha!! take that you pathetic excuse for a being!! ain't so high and mighty now, kikyou!! and kouga you braindead mutt!! man i like the guy but i think kagome should've lifted him high int eh air... then drop him on his head. stupid--canine!! inu has a thicker skull but shit at least he didn't push his luck! anyway glad he made a appearance and hey, next cahpter he'll get the stick outta his ass. though kinda wish sess would gut him jsut a bit...
    oaky i better gm gem getting really bitchy. bye!
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 02, 2004
    wait..i thought kikyo lost her voice
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