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Reviews for The Seduction Game

By : XYZ
  • From on April 14, 2009
    Okay, I reviewed on fanfiction, therefore my job is done but...

    Great fic!!!!!
    Okay, on my preferences, I prefer more frequet updates even if they are shorter.
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  • From rowdygirl on April 12, 2009
    All I am going to say on the matter is: you have the right of free speech, you have the right to voice your opinion on any subject which engages your intellect. However, others also have this same right and if you choose to voice your opinion in a public forum, which this is, then you must be prepared for others to do the same, and voice divergent opinions. That being said, while I respect that you chose your story as your forum, it did detract from the storyline. It is a good story with engaging characters, I am certain that it will withstand the inclusion of your essay. As for those who are mortally offended by it, they can read some other story - there is NEVER a reason for nastiness or cruelty, as the saying goes, mean people suck.
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  • From SimmerDee on April 12, 2009
    Great bleeding story... got wind of it because of my dear friend TiffanyM who it seems has been reading it on some site called cadkitten. Well any-who I decided to poke my nose around to find it on a site I had an account on, hope you update soon
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  • From on April 12, 2009
    i really love this story i just wish it would move a little faster
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  • From Alpine02 on April 11, 2009
    I ran across this story for the 1st time today and I read the whole thing in like 2 hours.. It is absolutely fantastic.. I loved the whole thing and I really am hoping you will have the chance to update soon. It is now getting really quite exciting and is a great WIP.. Thanks so much for the great read and I can't wait to see what happens next.

    P.S. doesn't matter if you write long or short chappy's... Just like updates sooner.

    Hugs
    Alpine
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  • From animelover5656 on February 20, 2008
    Really good and this is my second time reading it and i still love it!
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  • From Fourshotchild on December 23, 2007
    This story is pretty good. I'd like to
    see where you take it. I like the fact that
    you put in real debates and issues. It makes
    the story unique. Keep up the good work.
    I want to see how Inuyasha and Kagome hook up!
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  • From evasal on December 20, 2007
    sorry to hear about your diagnosis, hang in there!

    i am in love with this story, and i love seeing inuyasha change! I hope you are able to get well and treated (i don't know much about cataract). So don't force yourself but update soon! I look foward to learning about what you have in store for us readers!

    and that mist..... what the hell? @.@ looks like inuyasha and kagome don't have an easy road ahead of them!
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  • From LibraCourt on October 16, 2007
    Wow, I love this story, be sure to update again soon!
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  • From Dunkelgelb on October 15, 2007
    Very good writing, though. LOL, war
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  • From Dunkelgelb on October 15, 2007
    We in the United States Army and United States Marine Corps are not waging some kind of blind slaughter on the Iraqi populace - we are attempting to stop a religious civil war, eliminate al-Qaeda, and rebuild the country, whatever the reason Congress sent us in in the first place. The only thing CNN or MSNBC report about is "X number of U.S. troops killed by IED" or "Soldiers A and B murder innocent civilians," and they're never around while we're doing good things and always watching when a few idiots fuck up. At the very least, I know that I am not a war criminal or homicidal maniac given a rifle by Uncle Sam. I'll be in Baghdad in two weeks; wish me luck.
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  • From rowdygirl on September 02, 2007
    So are you ever going to finish this story? We've been waiting ever so long. It is a good story but would be better if it was finished.
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  • From ANON - rowdygirl on January 05, 2007
    this is great! i've had so much fun reading it. good thing kagome is more forgiving than me, i'm afraid there were moments where i would have made sure his days of fun were over...just because i could and he pissed me off. are you a marketing or business major? i only ask because i will be getting my fine arts degree after i get my degree in ceramic technology. however, you definitely gave me the impression that you've been studying too much! i think you should spend more time writing new chapters and posting them. but that's just me.
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  • From ANON - fallenangel7583 on December 22, 2006
    hey gurl!!! realized i never reviewed this chappy! but i think i sent you back an email on it. ^__^ anyway, you know your work is always golden!! i miss this story, though!! it's the damn best writing i tihnk i've ever read! (and mind you, i'm an english major). get to it, Lady, and write us some more smut or i'll send the chupacabras after you! >.< miss ya!!!!!! hope all is well in life, and that you're doing good!
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  • From ANON - shaid on November 19, 2006
    I am incredibly confused here. First and foremost, it's obvious from your writing and your authors comments that you're intelligent, well read and have a deffinate(sp) opinion on things. I'd also like to point out that I agree with "Inuyasha's" sentiment about Bush. I'm just not able to publicly announce such things due to my position in my community as a caretaker of the VERY young.

    But beyond that... Straight to the point: the story is very frenetic. A lot of it seems to wander and meander in odd tengents. The main plot is solid, and I want to make sure you're aware the I LIKE the plot and many of the characterizations. However the narrative and dialouge seem very stream of consciousness. You seem to lose your way on occasion and have a hard time finding your way back. I'm not saying you're a bad writer, or that I'm not going to continue what you write on this story. My intent is to help you. I like the plot. I even kinda like Inuyasha as a mysoginistic man-whore with a deep pain in his past. What I really like is that his demon side ackowledges her as his mate before his heart can get adjusted to it.

    I honestly am looking forward to more of your story... I'm just a little exhausted by the pacing and... wow, that's a picture of two men about to kiss in that banner... Sorry, distracted. Anyway, I like the story, but the stream of conscinenceness stlye kinda gets to me. I just feel that the style doesn't lend itself well to the plot. Both the dialogue and narrative seem to be jumping all over the place, like there is a LOT you want to say but can't find a way to say it other than to just blurt it out. It often feels rushed and hurried. I'm sure you take days and days to write each chapter but they still feel unpolished. And I know it's just fanfiction, but... it stills feels rough.

    Got to admit, though, I like the dynamic between Kagome and Inuyasha. I'm not usually fond of him being a playboy and using women, but you seem to have added another layer to him with the Kikyou thing. I'm seriously wondering about something... When Kagome asked his what she'd have to do to get him to accept that she doesn't belong to him, he told her she'd have to sleep with him. Well, technically, she just did. :-) How is that going to affect their wonderful, if volitile, dynamic?

    I hope you can update soon and I hope you're not offended by my comments! They were meant as constructive criticisim and should be taken as such! Good luck on the next chapter and have fun!
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