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Reviews for LOVE POISON

By : YoukaiMusashi

From ANON - Cynbad146 on October 25, 2005
What a chapter! (Puts hand to forehead.) I am . . . impressed, again. Those were some deep emotions coming across my screen. I, pretty much, felt like I was in Kagura's shoes. She is a fiesty one with a crack whip tongue. A good match for Sesshoumaru's haughty demeanor and calculating ways. I am not always sure how to take him when he deviates from his typical cold self and actually makes brief conversation with slight implied humor. (Too many descriptive words?) However, it seems that Kagura can rock his boat with her temper. Fire up his ice. (Makes for good entertainment!) We all know, that for all of Kagura's and Sesshoumaru's FO and I do not care attitudes, that they sometimes do care. I imagine that it is extremely difficult to represent Sesshoumaru as caring in these fanfics, and not overdo it. Your on it, as usual.

On another thought, why do I always get a clammy feeling when Kikyo is on stage? Even if she has a live body. She comes across as walking hate to me. Kikyo may be all knowing but she never seems to know what it would take to make her happy. I have a hard time warming up any sympathy for her even though I know she has traveled a rocky, potholed road, with a bad road map. The cave scene fits her. Something scarey for Halloween, huh?

It never ceases to amaze me what people can dream of and write.

Thank you for your generous response in your last A/N. (Runs around with big banner stating, "GO YM!")
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From ANON - penpaninu on October 25, 2005
I'm always here for you! Happy birthday by the way. And bloody good show as always! I was pleasantly surprised to see an update, but very pleased. You rock!
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From ANON - Enchanted Faery on October 25, 2005
I was so excited when I saw that you updated! As per usual, this chapter is excellent! The way you have Kagura contacting Sesshomaru (I know you have done it in earllier chapters) is very original! I never would have thought about doing that in any of my fics! Great job! Totally original! I cannot wait to see what you have in store for us next! 10 out of 10!

EF
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From ANON - Snowfall on October 25, 2005
Um, I looked back through your reviews and noticed that I have been a bad, bad, reader. I have not given you the reviews that you deserve. I had also promised a technical review and haven't given it. So, here it is. Your style is excellent. The sentence structures are varied enough that the reader does not get bored or annoyed with repitiion. In fact, it flows so well that the reader is drawn along with the characters, moving within the world that lives inside your mind. It is not an easy thing to paint everything that you see. We may not see absolutely everything, but enough to make the story real for us. Your characters are nicely IC and three dimensional. You make them live and breathe for us. And what a plot you have! Even now, I am certain that we cannot fathom the depths of your twisted mind and will soon see even more surprises play out. What good is a story if every event is predictable. There is very little predictable about this fic. It keeps us in suspense, yearning for more. And you do tease us well. The fact that I can read this fic without wincing at a glaring hominym error or grammar error pleases me to no end.

As for your comments comparing yourself with other author; just remember that most of the best authors have anywhere from one to five beta's at any given time. Were you to read their works straight from their own pen's, you wouldn't always be so impressed. What makes you a good author isn't how much flowery language you can use, or how well you can color the world with a wide vocabulary, etc.; it is whether or not you can bring enjoyment to the masses. And by the number of reviews you have gained, I would say that you are doing an excellent job. Different authors have different styles of writing, and while a particular style may seem to you to be better penmanship than your own, recognize it for what it is, a style. If your style is not strained and you have no complaints, there is no reason to change it except for your own self-satisfaction. There are authors that I believe are worth their weight in gold, just as you do, and I do try to learn from them. But you should know that you are not lacking. You are in the small percentage of authors that actually puts out the highest quality work and have every right to be proud. Of course, there will be issues with any awards organization and it's procedures, but being nominated says a lot about your work. It is being recognized because it is in the top of its class in all points on the scale. These purpose of these awards is not to give the authors a big head, but to showcase to other authors what their work could be if they worked harder, to encourage them to engaged the help of others, to improve the overall quality of fanfics everywhere. The motivations are not so simple as many might believe. You have been held up as an example. Take pride in it.

Snowfall
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From ANON - Snowfall on October 25, 2005
WooHoo! WooHoo! *snoopy dance!* (thumpity-thumpity-thump) You updated and with my Sessy-sama!!!! What a wonderful job you have done. The very idea of giving Kagura's heart and souls to Kikyou had never occurred to me. Naraku is soooo evil. Oh my, and Sess thinks of her as a 'secret lover'? That's sooo sweet. It is absolutely wonderful how you have managed to bring those two together so ethereally. Eeeewww! Kikyou on the floor in Onigumo's cave! Ach! I figured that Naraku would want to fuck her brains out. Hihi. I don't care because I got to see interaction between the free wind and the sexiest and most powerful youkai in the series. Yes! I'm glad that you have been able to get those two together. I believe that the pair is fitting since there really isn't another viable option.

I'm sorry that you had to endure complaints when you edited your fic. I have heard them before on the main list and believe that those who criticize must have more at stake in the insecurity department than they are willing to admit. The admins haven't had the opportunity to work on this problem, but it is on the list.

Thank you for a wonderful chappie, excellent twists, and for SESSHOUMARU! *eh, what kinda drug was in that chapter?* @v@ :-)

Snowfall
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From Dunkelgelb on October 25, 2005
Damn, is this good stuff, or what? Reading this story is leaps and bounds better than the series itself, maybe even the manga, too - your writing is flawless, no one is OOC, everything is believable, character feelings are tangible, and there are probably more things that I haven't even picked up on yet. I can only wonder what the lemonry will be like. >:)

Kagura rules. Sesshoumaru rules. "Love Poison" rules. You rule!

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From ANON - karla on October 21, 2005
you can give those flamers of yours a message: Fuck them!!!
i think your work is great, you have cool writing skills and i hope you keep it up. tell that Anon-whatever to go fuck himself!
Keep writing pretty please!!!! i want to know if Inuyasha will ever sum up the courage to take Kag as a mate.
maybe or maybe not in his demon form. demon form please!!
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From ANON - vtchachi on October 10, 2005
Great chapter. I really enjoyed the scene with Naraku and why can't Inuyasha just come clean?! Baka. I mean he had the perfect chance, Kagome just went through it and would understand what he went through. Oh well, I am sure it will all work out. I love Kagura as well. She is so dynamic. Thanks for another great chapter!
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From ANON - vtchachi on October 09, 2005
Oh my, Naraku! What a cliffhanger. Sorry this is so late :( I have kind of fallen behind since school has started, but I have been itching to catch back up on this story. And you have done an awesome job, I am dying to find out what happens next. I can't wait to read the next chapter tom.
Thanks for the great chapter!
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From ANON - firedevil798 on October 08, 2005
AWESOME STORY! I just love your complicated plot...I just can't get enough of your fanfic! You have talent! Honestly, you should erase all of the InuYasha stuff in LOVE POISON and get it published, or, write a whole new story and get it published. If you do get ANYTHING of yours published, be sure to contact me. I will SOOO by your book. Just love the way you describe everything and make it so clear about how InuYasha feels and how he thinks. Now, because of you, I fully understand him. Keep up the outstanding work, and I really hope that InuYasha will quickly tell Kagome the truth...it's killing me! ^-^

Ja ne~
firedevil798

PS: Contact me at cindy_ho798@hotmail.com.

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From ANON - Amonymouse on October 07, 2005
that flamer is a pathetic loser who just searches for fights. Forget him. Keep writing, chick, your story is a great one.
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From ANON - liany on October 06, 2005
You're absolutly right. You have all the right in the world to be mad and yet you chose to be peaceful about it. I could have never been so relaxed about it. And sincerely you shouldn't even give a dam about anon. I bet they're just jealous because you're a very good authour. I'm not trying to spoil you but you're really good.

I've been reading your story since a month after you post it and I liked it from the start. And I'm very hard to please. So you have my complete support. Don't ever give up because of them. And I'm sure that many of your readers agree with me. just continue to wright and update when you can. ^_^
Pls forgive me for not leaving an e-mail address but I don't want to waste time deleting their trash because they just love annoying people and push their luck so much.
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From ANON - cynbad146 on October 02, 2005
YoukaiMusashi,
Just checking in. I think the story is just as good the second time around as it was on the first. Cynbad146
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From ANON - ladyireland4 on September 28, 2005
You have go to post more...I am hopelessly enthralled.
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From ANON - JupiterIris on September 28, 2005
It's been the longest time since I last read a chapter of this. I think I got to the middle, then stopped for a couple months, lost the name, then finally found it again and finished it. You are indeed an amazing writer. Clear, descriptive, and aware of proper characterization. Not to mention very good at writing love scenes. I'm a big fan of Rozefire, and she's an absolutely respectable role model for me to continue to write. In a little while you will be at her level (it's not like your that far off).
Some people just feed off anger. They look for a fight, and they spend their time insulting and hurting. Critcism is good if it's constructive, but simple, pathetic flames are just poor in character and intellect. This person was just plainly idiotic and impatient. And the insults were not deserved.
You are one of my favorite authors, chick, so get the next chapters going, will you? :)
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