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By : RainingatNight
  • From ANON - sexykitten on November 29, 2005
    this is so good plz do more and let me know ok thanks
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  • From ANON - Katzztar on August 09, 2005
    I like this story but I can onle give 3 stars insted of five due the mistakes. They are mostly grammer but there are soem punctuation mistakes as well.
    If those mistakes were fixed I could give 5 stars though....

    examples
    ch.1=Kagome fuming stomped over to them slapping Kikyou she said, "You dirty slut,"
    With the corrections= Fuming, Kagome stomped over to them, slapping Kikyo. "You dirty slut," she said.Oh I don't believe him he's such a jerk thought Kagome to herself.

    'Oh, I don't believe him!He's such a jerk,' thought Kagome to herself. Or 'Oh, i can't believe him, he's such a jerk!' Kagome thought to herself.

    Ch.2

    There are several puntuations missing. = Approaching the caves was sinking below the horizon. Some wolves were asleep, but most were awake working on the day's hunt. When he slid in Hakkaku and Ginta came up and said, "Kouga its good to have you back," they paused, "sister Kagome?"


    "Hey guys, anything happen while I was gone?"

    It is confusing of who is speaking witht hat untimely break. the first part 'When they saw..." should be part of the last paragraph since it linked to it in events =
    As they were approaching the caves the sun was sinking below the horizon. Some wolves were asleep, but most were awake working on the day's hunt. When he slid in Hakkaku and Ginta came up and said, "Kouga its good to have you back," they paused when they saw her behind Kouga. "Sister Kagome?"


    Tehse are soem example of how soem corrections could really improve your story. I am not telling you how to write your story, only saying in ways you can improve the story. As I writer, I prefer it when someone tells me what I made a mistake on so I can fix it instead merely stating there are soem mistakes.






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  • From ANON - animelover88 on August 09, 2005
    i love the story and cant wait for the next one plz write more.
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  • From ANON - Dark_Wolf on June 19, 2005
    that was cool cant wait till the next chapter
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  • From ANON - ~*~R~*~ on April 14, 2005
    I read the original "I hate you, I love you" It was great! Except now I'm aroused and nowhere to go, haha! :)
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  • From ANON - ayame4koga on March 09, 2005
    hey...don't stop there.... plz update ^_^
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  • From ANON - Jasmine on February 07, 2005
    This is good What is next update
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  • From ANON - Artemis on February 06, 2005
    I loved it!!! I've been waiting for a story like tthis!!!! and you got Inuyasha's stupidity down perfect!!! *smiles*
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  • From ANON - Jasmine on January 10, 2005
    come on when is the next one going to come?
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  • From ANON - Arista on January 02, 2005
    i love this story. i've seen very few good kag/koga fics.
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  • From ANON - joey on January 01, 2005
    cool update. as far Kagome changing as long as it is her choice and not because she is trying to please someone else. Like Inuyasha was going to do for Kikyou he was doing that for her and not because he really wanted to. Keep writing this is still good.
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  • From ANON - Jasmine on January 01, 2005
    This story is geting good. Is Inuyasha going to come for Kagome?
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  • From ANON - kogasgirl_1 on January 01, 2005
    cool please update before tomorrow
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  • From ANON - joey on December 31, 2004
    this sounds interesting. I am not a big Kag/Kog fan but I do read them. I think you should leave Kagome human many of the Kag/Kog fics have her changing into a demon......she shouldn't have to change for him. He loves her as a human already. Kagome accepts people the way they are so she shouldn't change unless she really wants to "For herself" and not because she feels Kouga or the rest of the tribe would like her better. I think she already knows they accept her as a human but remember any kids they have would be hanyou so they would have to accept that as well. I know Kagome would not have a problem with that but I am not sure about the rest of the tribe..... they don't like Inuyasha very well. I feel it would be better if the tribe had to accept hanyous as well. But it is your story keep writing it sounds intersting I hope Shippo finds Kagome and stays with her. I hope Inuyasha finally tell Kikyo to 'go to hell' by herself. And figures out what he lost but doesn't get Kagome back.... would like the two to stay friends if possible.
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  • From ANON - kogasgirl_1 on December 31, 2004
    short chapter! hopefully you'd be able to update today!
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