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Reviews for The Sins of the Father

By : whirleeq

From ANON - sexililkagome on March 04, 2005
UR 100th REVEWER!!!!!!!!!!!!!! OMG LOL KEEP IT ^!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - kagome on March 04, 2005
AWSOME
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From ANON - Coffee Gyrl on March 04, 2005
*see's new chapter, jumps up and does a happy dance around the room* Oh thank you so much for your note at the end Sessha's very flattered and has now made it her new mission in life to double up on reivews to encourage our illustrious writter. ^_^ Man that part with the thoughts going though Kenshin's head when he's comforting Kagome was PERFECTION!!! I can't imagne a better understanding of his character. I like that you mentioned Shippo's bare fox feet I keep forgeting that about him. As the series goes on Shippo is definatly becoming more like Miroku, he had a his first love with one village girl with the fake shard and a flirtation with the other girl who had the mistaken Kirara, he even figured out what a good thing Inuyasha had going when he has Kagome clamping her legs around him for a ride when he copied his 'move'. LOL. Also when Miroku was mistaken for Hachi and he tries to have Shippo back him up he plays innocent but in his mind is like 'sorry dude' that just cracked me up. It makes sense that Shippo has a stock pile some where he always had a lot of possesions for a demon. When Inuyasha was shaking him out the first time for the jewel shards his pockets were crammed full of stuff. Poor Kenshin's turning green at the grave dust was amusing. I love how he gets all wary when he sees that mischievous glint in her eye its so cute. That he keeps stealing kisses from her is very sexy as well. I have a picture in my mind of Kenshin in a hot a heavy make out session with her with that miko's gi open to her navel, his waist length hair falling down and his thoughts on how 'sinful' a picture she makes in that getup when she's all breathless. Don't worry about the slow build up to THE LEMON I like a lot of presure and your smaller lemons and limes are very good. ^_^ She realy keeps him on his toes around her the sexy playfulness is great. I was picturing how his Shita would be different than an Osuwari and came up with what a soldier looks like when he hits the ground to avoid incoming fire. I've done it myself (my hubby's in the army) you hit the ground first with your chest with your hands close to your body and at your side, when you do this your face is only like an inch from the ground and the impact to your chest makes you grunt vs. an Osuwari where Inuyasha hits with his chin first and always eats dirt. This would mostly just shake up Kenshin and not really hurt him, unlike Shippo's head-banging, back-breaking, grass eating Osuwari. LOL yes very just revenge coming from beyond the grave for all of Shippo's tricks. Thank You so much for the quick update I'm shaking like a junkie for this story. ^_^
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From ANON - Jasmine Fields on March 04, 2005
*snickers as Shippo falls to the ground* lmao. Kagome is still quite clever, eh? Love that.
And I can't wait til Sesshou is released from his god-awful imprisonment and becomes healthy
once more--oh yeah, and bent out for revenge. THAT is what I'm looking forward to probably
the best, besides the lemon... oh yeh, and the destruction of all evil when Yuki comes into the
scene.

Until next time (which I hope is SOON *nudges author in the ribcage*),
-Jazz-
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From ryukotsusei on March 04, 2005
Hehehe that was priceless, Shippou apologizing at the end. I loved it. Another excellent chapter! Can't wait to read the next one.
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From Atropa on March 02, 2005
Finally I got to read it... And you are doing great. I can see that it's taking on epic proportions :)
Hope to see more from you soon.
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From KuwaLover on March 01, 2005
Wonderful chapter! I believe that boy that the old man was talking about was the son of Sango and Miroku? Am I right? Anyway, I sitll don't know who the old miko is, I just can't figure it out. Oh and as I was writting that last sentence I had a thought, what happened to Kikyou? Since she is technically dead, would she still be around? That's been bothering me a little. Anyway, I can't wait for the Koga scenes! I love Koga! Kohaku is so evil! You made everything turn upside down and made everything that use to be right now left! I love what you are doing and I want you to update soon!
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From ANON - Coffee Gyrl on March 01, 2005
Wow you're really cranking them out way to go girl!!! Thank you so much for the physcial discriptions I had really pictured Yuki looking a lot different. I'm totaly for pairing up Yuki with Sano he's way cute and I know when I was 13 I was crushing big time for my 19 and 20 year old camp counslers. And that crack at Sano's hair was very funny. I liked Souta's reaction to Shippo and Kenshin, why does Souta's girlfriend's name sound familar....hey are you thinking of Escaflone? Is it a running joke that most people think that Kenshin was taller when they find out that he's the Battousai? If it isn't then it should be I find it rather amusing. Hmm this Higurashi Yasuo sounds very interesting I can't wait to meet him. And who's this old miko? I noticed that Kenshin made a mental note to ask his hosts about the rosary but hasn't yet and he hasn't tried to take it off either, is it still working? He dosen't need it the same way Inuyasha did but I can see a funny 'oro' coming out of this if Kagome acidentaly put the 'sit' on him. LOL. Why am I not suprized that Yuki's going to follow her mom down the well she probaly won't have a hard time of it with her dad's blood and sword. Kagome might want to start thinking up a new rosary for her head strong daughter. How's that for having a miko mom and you with youkia blood, I'll bet she can seal her in a shack too if she put her mind to it. This is really an amazing story I can't wait to see what the other side of the well brings for our hero's. ^_^
Oh and ps you need to insert a set of quote marks on 15 with (")So Kags, are you going to introduce me to your strange friends?" other than that its beautiful.
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From ANON - Diane on February 28, 2005
Very nice couple of chapters, looking forward to the next 1 & finding out what happens next.
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From ANON - Deep Serenity on February 28, 2005
good chap, I think that if YOU want to to the Sano romance do it! Your story, as long as you make it believable on how they come together I'm all for it. and technically in Sano's time, girls 13 were okay to look at, so that doesn't bother me.

Anyway can't wait to see where this is going, and as long as the writing and story line remain good I will enjoy the story.
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From ryukotsusei on February 27, 2005
Pairing Yuki up works for me, I'm sure that you'll work it into the story quite well. Poor Kenshin, growling at any male that comes into physical contact with Kagome. I wonder how that is going to work out when Kouga see's her again? I look forward to reading the next chapter, update soon please!
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From ANON - Neo-Crystal on February 27, 2005
THIS IS EXCELLENT!!!!! you should bring in Kirara!
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From ANON - Coffee Gyrl on February 26, 2005
I hope Kagome remembers to bring some coffee and a french press with her otherwise she's going to have some wicked caffine withdrawl headaches. Man alive I can't tell you enough how much I just love this story to death. YOU ROCK!!!!! I'm worried for our hero's though they are seriously out-gunned. We've got 3 good swordsmen (Kenshin, Kouga and Shippo) but none of them have a weapon that can stand up to Toukijin. Yuki's can but she can barely make it transform let alone use the windscar and blacklash wave. I hope Totosai or his aprentice can put a rush order on some swords. Myouga knows about the well and I don't think Naraku ever knew about him so it shouldn't be too hard to bring him back but Kirara...maybe she's recovering at Midoroko's cave the one with the shield at the slayer's village. I hope Kenshin can manage some illusion because a lot of people are pretty pissed at him right now. There is one sentance I think would read better if you moved the comma "It wasn't something he blamed her for (instead of here) although, his rational mind knew that it was most likely a result of the 'bonding'." I don't mean to knit-pick and if this type of thing bothers you or puts your muse off in any way just let me know. I know muses are tricky things and I would never want to discourage yours in any way shape or form. I would like to request though that you add a little more physical discriptions such as "He watched her leave, sadly, before turning narrow (yellowed, amber or golden) eyes to the other occupant of the room." I figured since he was fighting the Battousai his eyes would be somewhat changed. I LOVE how you write with the emotional discriptions but small physcial ones a) help me picture the scene in my head and b) I'm not very familiar with the RK cast and I don't know what everyone looks like. I'm a little fuzzy on everyone's height as well. I figure Sano and Sesshomaru are about the same height, as Kagome comes to about Sesshoumaru's nipples and Kenshin dose the same with Sano. But Kouga's only like a head taller than her so he's not as tall as Sano. And if Kenshin can wear Kagome's sweatpants then they have to be about the same height too. But how much taller than Kagome is Yuki? And is Shippo the same height as Kenshin? You don't mention if anyone is tilting their heads to look up or down at someone else so this is all theory. Again I don't mean to knit-pick its just that this is such a good story I often drift off while rereading it to picture the senario in my mind. I love this to pieces and want to thank you so much for updating often I check this web site 4 times a day to see the new chapters added. I hope your thesis is going well. Thanks for the cookies they were yummy. ^_^ And please don't let that horse's ass dampen your enthusiam for your writting, its like you said it's your story you can do what ever you want and if he has a problem with that then he can just piss off.
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From KuwaLover on February 25, 2005
I come back and find two chaptera! This story is sooooo good I love it! It is defintly well written and I love the conflict and everything about it! I can't wait to see what will happen once they go down the well and who they will run into. I can't wait to see Kouga and Kagome together and how Kenshin will react! Now that will be great. Sensai against student fighting over Kagome! Kouga wanted her as a mate, but Kenshin has her! That's going to be good! So please update soon!
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From ANON - Kura-kun\'s-lovr on February 24, 2005
Hey, I've been meaning to review but just haven't gotten around to it. But I should let you know that I love your story. It's great to see a Ken/Kag story since there are so few that are any good out there. I think it is very reasonable that Kenshin is the way he is because he is a hanyou. I often kept looking at him in the anime and wondering if he really was or not....and with Shippo being his father, it just totally fits. But anyway, I do like your story and I hope you update soon. In case your'e interested, I'm going to be releasing my own Kag/Ken pairing in the near future although it'll probably be set up on fanfiction.net. Ja ne.
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