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Reviews for The Sins of the Father

By : whirleeq

From ANON - DEEP SERENITY on February 24, 2005
I liked the last chap! Must confess I hate the drug part at the end, that sucks, don't want Inu child to be that stupid even though she's really mad and confused right now.

Anyway, good writing and yes you pairings are your business and while people don't have to like them they don't have to read them either or should be mature enough to look and judge the story as a whole
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From ANON - Diane on February 24, 2005
I must be having a blond moment since all 3 errors are in the same sentence from the Yuki part, I was looking everywhere for it & couldn't find it;

�Woah, what�s with the hostility Higarushi? I only was only trying to commend you and give you some moral support.�

I already pointed out the 2 slight spelling goofs & since I finally comprehended the rest of the sentence instead of ignoring it I would take out the 1st only in the sentence & have it as I was only.

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From ANON - Diane on February 24, 2005
Very good chapter, I noticed 3 errors so here they are & I hope this helps.

I saw 1 sentence in the Kagome/Kenshin or Shippo/Kenshin part that had only twice in the same sentence but now I can't find it, if you run across it I think only would be fine in either spot but not both, from what I remember.

�Woah, what�s with the hostility Higarushi? I only was only trying to commend you and give you some moral support.�

Whoa & Higarashi are misspelled in this sentence from the Yuki part at the end.

Looking forward to seeing what happens next.

About your 'rant' how can someone object to the pairings in Guardian when the last time I read it the pairings hadn't been decided yet beyond either Heie/Kagome or Kurama/Kagome? Personally I like K/K but since it's your fic you do what makes you happy & ignore the flamers. I've have weird little K/K 'reunion' scenes running through my head ever since I read chapter 2.
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From ryukotsusei on February 24, 2005
I love how conflicted the emotions where in this chapter. I can sympathize easily with the both of them. The tension is great, I can't wait to see how they work through it. And now adding a potential drug issue into it with Kagome's daughter is only going to add more stress to the situation. Keep up the great work, please update soon.
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From ANON - Coffee Gyrl on February 20, 2005
Hmm this was a great chapter no such thing as merely filler its all important. I loved this chapter and of course the coffee part. ^_^ So this blood bond 'I wanna bone you' feeling goes both ways huh. Nice. Should make things interesting on breaking the ice. I like in chapter 10 how you had both Yuki's and Kenshin's POV in one chapter. I'm curious what his thoughts are as you said his smile seemed false and she was going to call him on it. This aspect of Kenshin is widely interpreted, some put his darker Battousai side as a quasi split personaly but I always wondered if the 'rurouni' personalty was what he wished he was or a mask and that the Battousai never actually changed per se except in that he quit his day job. In the OVA's even as the Battousai he is still a nice guy (to everyone he dosen't kill) He always plays cute but switches to serious so fast you gotta wonder how much is really going on in that head of his. I like that you've kept Kagome's spark, I mean sure she's older and more mature but she always was a firecracker even to Sesshamoru. Kenshin seems to have commitent issues as he was always threating to start wandering again and was dancing around how he felt about Karou for so long now he's roped into a pretty binding deal here with a stranger, I'm wondering how he's felling? Trapped? Maybe a little manipulated? Plus he was always a kinda shy guy even with Tomoe now that he knows his dreams are actually memories just how embarssed is he that he had wild doggie style sex with her (I think that was a new one to him) Or is he to shell shocked to be thinking about that right now? (you can tell what I'm thinking about 0_0) Now Shippo wants Kagome to travel down the well and start helping him kill Naraku/Kohaku how much of an issue is this going to be to Kenshin? He doesn't want to start taking heads again but I think for Kohaku he'll make an exception but how much is this going to bug him. I think Kagome is much better equipped to handle Battousai than Karou, not to dishonor her memory but she always seems to me like she doesn't want to see him as the Battousai even if its to save her life. Well this is what's running threw my mind at 2 am in the morning. I love that you updated this I'm totally in love with this story. Please keep'um coming:)
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From ryukotsusei on February 19, 2005
another great chapter, the guilt Kagome is feeling at the moment must be astounding. Good job on the Kenshin/Kag interaction, I'm lookingforward to seeing how their relationship developes. I'm sure it isn't going to be easy on either of them. Throw her daughter into the mix and wow. I look forward to reading the next chapters, please update soon.
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From ANON - Mija on February 18, 2005
hey I didnt think it was filler...I totally liked it...and when Kenshins eyes turned gold did that mean he was lusting after her??? hehe...that would be a real indicator to Kagome when he was feeling ummmm frisky, hehe anyhow totally awsome chapter I love it and what will her head strong daughter say to Kagome going back??? and what will happen when they do go back??? and Koga??? omg wondering whats about to hit da fan, oh and Sano and Yakiho???? what will they think about Kenshins new mate?? and his new knowledge of how he is half demon??? ooh I sooooooo cant wait hope you update soon, till then be safe well and happy much huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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From ANON - ennui deMorte on February 17, 2005
Brilliant chapter 12! Forgot to review this earlier, so I'm doing it now.

I love that you made Kouga Kenshin's teacher and after looking at the picture from that link, I can Totally see it! I love Kouga's observation about the kid being almost as stubborn as the mutt ~ that was great!! Another point for my theory that Kenshin has InuYasha's soul.

I also liked Kouga turning into a huge wolf ~ you never see any of the wolves change like that, but it is logical that they can do it just like the Inu's can. Having him changing into a huge wolf and howling like that brought up the image from the 3rd InuYasha Movie at the beginning where InuTaisho, suffering from his mortal wounds, after he finished talking to Sesshoumaru, transforms into his huge Dog Demon form, howls and then flies off into the night. This is how I saw Kouga transforming ~ way wicked mental image!

Can't wait to see more!!
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From ANON - KuwaLove on February 17, 2005
I loved that chapter! I love Kouga! Thanks for making this chapter! This story rocks and it seems that you know a lot about both shows, which is great. Most people, when they write crossovers, only know about one of the shows and a little about another show. I hope you continue this story! Please update as soon as possible!
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From ANON - Diane on February 14, 2005
Just in case you're interested as far as I can tell Sesshoumaru's sword is spelled as either Toukijin or Tokijin.
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From ANON - Jasmine Fields on February 13, 2005
Outstanding crossover!!! Love it!
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From ANON - me on February 11, 2005
i sure hope this has a happy ending
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From ANON - Diane on February 11, 2005
When you get the chance you should probably go back & redo parts of chapter 1 [or 2, the 1 where Shippo goes to the well with Kenshin] to reflect what happens in later chapters & edit the travel time since Kenshin wasn't in Kyoto but Tokyo so it wouldn't take Shippo 3 days to get from the dojo to the well, probably take him half a day if that if he was running at top youkai speed most of the way since you said that the oni forest was a days ride by horse from the dojo in a later chapter. Also you have the gang seeing her off at the well after 2 months & in the latest chapter you have Kouga seeing her sneaking off for the well, etc after a month. Hope this helps & doesn't sound too nitpicky, it's just rather confusing when you read it & later something changes from how it was portrayed in an earlier chapter.
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From ANON - Coffee Gyrl on February 11, 2005
Have I told you lately that you're a genius? If I havn't said it recently then let me say it again YOU'RE A FREAKING GENIUS! I can't believe how well you blend these different stories. I just love how you wrote Koga it all blends together so well my heart does cartwheels every time you post a new chapter. Poor Koga when he see's her again she's going to be wearing Kenshin's ring...uh I mean mark. Thank you for being the wonderfuly smart and talented writer you are and sharing your gift with us.^_^
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From ANON - Fairia13 on February 10, 2005
I remember back in another chapter you asked a question about hakamas, or Kensin's "skirt-thing pants." (LoL!) Hakama's are Japanese pants traditionaly worn by Kabuki performers, Samurai warriors, merchants and buisnessmen in ancient Japan. There were namy differnt types for formal occasions, working in the fields and horesback riding. I believe that the bottoms of th pants measure 42 inches in width, but they have wide pleats in them to make them appear smaller.

What the use of hakams was for merchants and buisnessmen, I have no bloody clue. The samurai however wore them because the wide legs and pleats were designed to disguise any movemen you were preparing to make.

Of course, since they're japanese, and they have a certain way of doing everything there are of course certain ways to fold and wear hakamas. And let me tell you, folding those things are a pain in the ass. (I never did get it right...)

Other than that, I like your story, good job!
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