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Reviews for Show Me How It Ends

By : DeniPie

From ANON - Shadowknight on June 03, 2005
I forgot a few things with regards to this story.

1. Well written with a plot.
2. Good emotional depth that is missing from many alternate pairings.
3. Grammar/spelling is good enough to cover any minor mistakes made, and those that are around are few and far between.
4. After reading my copy of Newtype-USA's feature on Inuyasha, I have been looking at some of the fics with a critical eye. However, it does not mean that I do not enjoy a good alt. pairing. I would like to see another story like this one done, actually, as long as AU is in the rating.
5. The survivor's guilt is called for in the plot. The handling of it is rather off though. The PTSD is also written in, but again a bit off.
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From ANON - InuYashasmybitch on June 03, 2005
Wow Shadowknight, its pretty sad that you would research this crap just for a little story, thats a pretty sad life right there. And plus, I think like 90 percent of the stuff you just listed off is total crap. What are you? The fucking "Fic Nazi" ?The pairing doesn't have to be fucking plausible just to right a story about it. Why waste time writing a fucking laundry list of everything wrong with this fiction when you could be searching the web for a story you actually liked? I have read a lot of the comments bitching about the pairing and I have no idea what is stoping you guys from hitting the "back" button on your computer the minute you found out something about the story that you didn't like. Personally I love this fucking story! Its original and I have never read anything like it and it just kind of pisses me off seeing people go out of their way to put a story down when they could be doing more constructive things with their time. DENIPIE I
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From ANON - Shadowknight on June 03, 2005
As much as the fic is interesting with the plotline, it wouldn't happen. Tis not coming down to flame or any such thing, but since you've kept track with the mangas, you know there is much more to them as a social commentary as it is a romance.

Examples follow.

1. The Sess/Rin interactions are a direct social commentary on certain assumptions of Japan's social mores of racial purity.
2. Inuyasha is also a part of Takahashi-sama's views of some of the social structures needing change.
3. Kouga's, and by extention the pack's views of humans and hanyous would have to take a 180 degree turn before Kagome would be truely accepted as one of the pack. The power resides with the pack's alpha female. Also remember that the humans are out breeding the youkai by a large factor. If any youkai bloodlines were to survive, it would have to be by blending with humans. Goes back to numbers 1 and 2 previous.
4. Takahashi-sama's work almost always has a number of major and minor characters to be nothing more than instruments to encourage the main protaganists to realize their worth to each other. In this case, Inu/Kags. In Ranma 1/2, Ranma/Akane. I could go on, but this point is made.
5. Newtype-USA's May '05 issue had Inuyasha as it's cover, and also an interview with Takahashi-sama. Was most interesting indeed. If any alternate pairing had a chance to happen, it would be Inu/Snago after Kagome returned to her time and the plot device (time portal) closed.

It is quite a good story, but an AU rating would be appropriate for it. Maybe some would get off your case about Ginta/Kag pairing then.

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From ANON - Sirenic Sprite (not logged in) on June 02, 2005
This is the first time I have seen this story. It just kind of popped up. So, I decided to check it out. I read your reviews, and I am utterly amazed at how closed-minded some people are. I mean to tell someone they are wasting their time writing about a particular pairing is just plain rude and stupid. If you don't like the pairing, then stop reading it. Your review was completely pointless if you say something like that. The author isn't going to say, "damn, you're right," and delete their story just to please you. You may be obsessed with a character, but that doesn't mean you have to include them in each one of your stories. I wrote my inu/kag quota, and now I'm on to different things. It's perfectly normal, and perfectly okay. LIVE A LITTLE!
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From ANON - Katzztar on June 02, 2005
Oklay so far I've read only the first chapter. And after doing so, I have to read more since it's that good.

I first wanted to check this out since the summary sounded good. On reading some of the reviews I found one that I dissagrre with. Anon says that this is a
watse since Ginta is a support charachter and stories are not suppose to be writen about them?? That is pure stupidity.

Fan fiction is that, fiction writen by fans.
It can be about certain situation being handled in a different way such as Kagome turning her back on Inuysha for his two-timing.
It can feature different pairings, such as Kagome/Miroku, Kagome/Ginta or Sango/Inuysha.
Or it can be in a completely different setting, such as everyone is in the modern times.

This anon clearly doesn't grasp the width of fanfiction. I am glad that you haven't stopped writing over one person's closed mind over an alternative pairing and added more chapters.

Excuse me, I need to go read the other chapters.
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From ANON - andross on March 07, 2005
awwwww wheres inuyasha! why must we have evil weird haired ginta.! its a great story but kagome's overreacting he was a friend not god she musnt suffer for his death
afterall he helped her on his own acoord!
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From ANON - Tasuke on March 07, 2005
Someone's been listening to a little too much Breaking Benjamin.

A rather interesting story, though I must say I absolutely loathe the pairing. Ignoring other characters for the sake of a barely recognized secondary character just doesn't seem like a good way to write a fanfic. I'm not insulting you or your ability, which is I must say; quite impressive. I'm just saying that your ability is being used on something that isn't necessarily a well traveled road. Either way, very well written.
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From ANON - Claire\'sHat on March 05, 2005
this is the only review i have done during my long forays into aff land. the reason for this is that out of all of the many, many, many and i DO mean many(not that i don't do other things besides read on occasion) fanfics that i have read, yours is the one that has the most original plot line. your way of keeping your readers guessing what will happen next and of portraying the emotional struggle of the characters is excellent, at several points throughout your story i found myself having to stop and find something to wipe my face with because of my blubbering. anyway, because of all of that i found myself compelled to review when i had avoided it for so long.

by the way, people that think its wierd to have ginta as a main character are obviously stagnated in thier ability to think, comprehend, imagine and in any other way be creative and open minded in thier thought processes.

so, i see that by your update date its been almost a month (ok little over half a month) since your last posting, and you obviously have a completed or partially done chapter ready to post..........PLEASE POST THE NEXT CHAPTER SOON!!!

i would also like to take the time to suggest an equally good story(and if you feel the need to put this story on your recommends i highly agree with you) "Tales From the House of the Moon" by .......ummmmm i totally forgot, but hopefully you should be able to find it. its inuyasha of course and a sess/kag pairing of which i'm quite fond of

i will stop typing now, apparently my refusal to review has created an overflow of review spewage to which you have been the recipient of. bye, and again, please find it in your heart to post the next chapter, or maybe even two chapters, yeah.

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From ANON - srg1 on February 18, 2005
Good story, Can't wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - lovia silverleaf on February 16, 2005
Wow this story is great. It is definetly a lot different then stories that you usually see for Inuyasha and Kagome. I really want to see what will happen between Ginta and Kagome. But I also want to see what will happen between Kagome and Inuyasha. Keep up the great work.
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From ANON - MysticInca on February 16, 2005
I dont care what anyone says, this fic is awesome! I am a huge fan of alternate pairings, and there are times that the canon is just so... bleh. To overdone half the time. This is NEW! I've never ever stumbled across a Ginta/kagome fic. I love it, simply and totally adore it.
Out of all the secondary characters in this anime, Ginta has always been my favorite. His antics have always cracked me up, and with you writing a story to elaborate his personality, I've fallen for him all over again.
With Kagome, we're seeing a darker side of her. A more depressive edge to her personality. This is something that I'm overjoyed that your writing about. Yes we all know she's the glue in the little group and she's full of sunshine and bubbles, but she is also human. If half the writers spent their time and 'analyzed' their depictions of Kagome, they would realize that in a sense their writing a "mary-sue".
Sadly the fanbase for Alternate or non-canon couples is terribly small, even though there is a slew of Yaoi out there, we are the most hated of the writing community. It will never make any sense to me.
For this alone I thank you from the bottom of my heart for creating such a wonderful story. I am eagerly awaiting each update, the story can only get better in my eyes.
Bravo! You have a winner and a devoted fan!

MysticInca
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From ANON - Foamy Jr. Knower on February 16, 2005
i love you cuz u love foamy!!!!! ROAMY RULES... but anway not bad.... good....plot
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From ANON - Dragon Lady on February 16, 2005
You have written a wonderful story so far, and I'm glad to see you update again. (bad me for not reviewing sooner!) It is kind surprising to see that you have so few reviews, but there's really no helping that. Some of the fics I've read I thought were very poorly written and unoriginal, yet people replied with rave reviews. *shrug* There's no accounting for taste, I suppose. I personally think the whole Kagome/Ginta pairing here seems rather interesting. It's refreshing to see a well written fic without the overly cliche pairings. (I have nothing against the normal pairings, and I enjoy some of the fics featuring them, but they're used so often it's hard to find anything original in many of the stories.)
I eagerly await the next chapter of your fic! And I wish you luck in finding a suitable editor.
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From ANON - Brenna on January 22, 2005
I applaude your creative mind and very good use of grammar.I must say that I am impressed.
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From ANON - Persephone of Abydos on January 12, 2005
I only discovered this story tonight, and I've grown thoroughly addicted to it! Please write more!
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