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Reviews for Curse of the Dragon

By : fallenangel7583
  • From ANON - snowfall on March 04, 2005
    Oh, I almost forgot. I really do appreciate the fact that your chapters are long and have a lot of meat to them instead of being short and leaving the reader to feel deprived of any real progress in the story. Thanks.

    Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
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  • From ANON - snowfall on March 04, 2005
    I spent all afternoon and half the night reading your story straight through. That is a rare thing for me. The story is fantastic, the angst tremendous, the family ties surprising, the horror intense, the love abundant. Let's not forget the action. I love it. I like that you have kept all the characters in their original pairings and as IC as possible given their individual situations and character growth. You did an excellent job keeping the character's original speech patterns. God, you did such a great job with Sesshoumaru's. I like how you made Kikyou out to be more than what she appeared. Your references to the classics were greatly appreciated and well timed. Your style is excellent. You made me laugh so hard and almost cry. That is the best compliment from me that anyone will ever get. I laughed so hard when Sesshoumaru sent Inuyasha into oblivian 55 minutes earlier. The way you wrote that was hilarious. There were other places that affected me similarly. As a reader and writer, I believe you got the response you were seeking.

    Now, do not take this as an insult. I write and don't take criticism with grace sometimes either, but I'm hoping to do it constructively. I wouldn't take the time if I didn't like this story so much. Only for authors that I believe should be encouraged to continue do I give a review. A teacher once told me that sometimes you need two sets of eyes to find mistakes referring to having someone else take a look at the work, and she was right. No matter how many times I edit my stories, I come up short, finding mistakes later. What I found interesting in your story was not so much misspellings, typos or grammar mistakes. That's normal. What I found most surpising was the misuse of words and phrases that made some parts confusing at first. For instance, the word 'glare' in place of 'gaze' or 'glance'. Or 'peruse' in the place of 'pursue'. There were complete phrases that were misplaced given the circumstances. I would understand if 'american english' was not your first language. If it is, a beta reader would be of benefit, not for story plot or style, but simply for the mechanics, which can be confusing enough for those native to the english language. I have read some stories written by people for whom 'english' is a second language and have sometimes found his/her skills better than many american adults.

    Let me say that these errors do not diminish your talent. Mechanics are tricky. If I am willing to overlook the errors, then know that it's a great story because I'm a freak when it comes to language. Misuse is like scraping nails down a chalkboard. You are good enough that I was happy to overlook it, a very rare thing indeed. Most other stories I would drop after the first few paragraphs. So, if you will get your story beta'd, I would love to put it on the website I am constructing. I just hope I haven't pissed you off so much that you would ignore the compliment and refuse. And, I hope you continue to write. I checked out your profile and will read your other story within the next couple of days.

    Oh, and I haven't gotten the database corruption errors out of my story 'Kagome's Blood'. If you check me out and read it, please don't hold it against me. And, I don't have a beta either. Some beta's may take weeks to finish a chapter and I don't have that kind of patience. I don't do anonymous reviews. It's cowardly. So, flame me if you must. I'll understand.

    Keep writing,

    Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
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  • From ANON - essie on March 03, 2005
    as long she aint seeing dead people she'll be ok this great update
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  • From ANON - anime fan on March 03, 2005
    yay! another great chappie.hope all goes well for Rin. the aftermath of rape is horrible. and poor sango, with her brother (not poor sango with Miroku....haha) anyways... just a note... if Inuyasha fucks up just ONE more time, i will personally save Kagome the trouble of hurting him, cause i'll do it myself!! please let this be his last fuck up. i fell so bad for them. And Kagome really needs him to be a good boy after what happened....please!!

    thanks! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 02, 2005
    OHHH bad cliffy! i hope that was just a dream!
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  • From ANON - morlana on March 01, 2005
    laugh what happened? Did I miss something how did Naraku get in the room? Was he Sess all that time? Is she dreaming or was that Sess in the living room and how didn't Ryen feel anything?
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  • From ANON - Sarah on March 01, 2005
    OMG!!! Must know what happens!!!!! This is my FAVORITE story! More, More, More!!!!!
    You really are a great writer!
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  • From ANON - catt on February 27, 2005
    OH MY GOD!!! AWESOME!!! I am such a big fan, I totally love ur story!!!, YOU SOO GOTTA UPDATE!!!!
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  • From ANON - essie on February 26, 2005
    damn that was some handle he got to see the POW fairy this is great update
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  • From ANON - Robyn on February 26, 2005
    That was a good one! I loved it.
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  • From on February 25, 2005
    GAH! You write faster than I can read! Lol...this is my one night off this week and I spent like four hours of it catching up on what I missed. *Sigh* It seems like so long ago that Yash and Sessh were driving with Launia. But, hey, I'm still loving this. ^_^ Can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - EgyptianKiss (not logged in) on February 25, 2005
    Hey that was an awesome chapter. I don't know how you make them so long. I update everyday so I don't have much time write, but wow. Please update really, really, REALLY soon. EK!
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  • From ANON - Mandy on February 25, 2005
    OHNOES!! More nastiness... ugh, I am totally hating them already. But I guess you have to have some conflict in there or it would be pointless. Everything will work out though right...uh...right? *crosses fingers* Don't get me wrong, you do a wonderful job of putting emotion into him while trying to keep him in character. I am just a hopeless Inu/Kag fan. Really I think it's awesome that you update so often.. life happens and I am sure you also have a million other things going on. This along with the birth of my brother's baby made my day *shameless proud aunt plug*. Keep it up! This is by far my favorite story. Thanx, Mands
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  • From ANON - essie on February 23, 2005
    this is great please update
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  • From ANON - Honoo on February 23, 2005
    Oh no! Is naraku like possesing Het or something? cause the red eyes at the end and stuff...but Oh no! the two bastards try to break Kagome and Inuyasha!! Eeek! Don't you dare do that or I shall sick a tree on you, it'll give you splinters and other mean stuff! Don't you dare do it! I love this story by the way and can't wait for the next update.

    Honno!
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