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By : ryukotsusei

From ANON - whirleeq on February 24, 2005
NO NO NO PLEASE DON'T MAKE THIS A TRIANGLE. UGH. This story is just so not set up for a triangle, I fear that if you do it now it may ruin it. I love your stories girl, and this one in particular -- I am only being honest. If you cater to each and every whim of each and every reader, you're plot is going to quickly spiral out of control.

Okay.

That being said, I really liked the fact that you did the second half of this chapter from Kuronue's point of view. It was refreshing to say the least, and I could emphasize with his level of confusion. I really wonder how he's going to react when he finds out that Youko has not only taken a mate, but a miko of all things. I'm glad that you also brought shippo back -- his death in particular had me swalling a particularly large lump in my throat -- and I'm interested to see if you are going to 'bring in' the reincarnations of Miroku and Sango. If you did so, the reincarnated Miroku should still have his Kazaana -- Naraku's not dead, after all -- and he should make quite a good ally, not to mention comic relief. Again, I understand if you do not - sometimes it's hard to bring in all the characters, especially when you want to keep your plot moving along.

Good job with this chapter, and keep up the great work! :)
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From ANON - Kura-kun\'s-lovr on February 24, 2005
Yay! Yay! Yay! He's finally in! My Kuronue looked sooooo cute! *Squeals* So I'm pleased to see you have taken my suggestion to drag Kuronue into a three way or whatever it would be called. I think it's great and should be done if you can find a way to bring him into their relationship. I just can't see him without Kagome, just as I can't see Kurama without her either. And I agree. I don't much like Boton either. Here's a thought, though. You did say that you weren't going to make her be in love with Kurama, just thatb he gets annoyed with her presistant quetsions. You could make her fall in love with Kuronue. That way if you decide to pair Kuronue up with Kurama and Kagome, it could be another problem to deal with, not that you don't have enough. And oh, pelase do not bring back Inuyasha. I know he has given Kurama basically his blessing, but its Kagome who would be torn in two. I fear that she would turn away from Yoko even though she is bonded to him. And that would suck! So, anyway, thic chapter was great and I'm glad to see you've finally brough my Kuro in. When he returnred to me for a brief intermissiong he assured me you were treating him most kindly except when he and his brother tried to steal yours and mine under garments. I assure you I punished Kuronue accordingly. Please make sure you punish his brother. Ja ne. Oh, an thanks for reciewing my story and I have indeed started a Kuronue/Kagome one-shot. I'll probably ave it finished by tonigt. Also, I think I'll do a Sesshomaru one and just a Yoko/Kagome one. But for now, ja ne.
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From ANON - KogasHentaiLuver (not signed in) on February 24, 2005
I like the story just the way its going. I'm glad you brought Kuronue to help them, but if you make it a threesome I doubt I'll continue reading. There is just no way I could find it plausible in this particular fic. It's going to be hard enough for Kag to let go of Inuyasha, and where she is making wonderful strides with her feelings towards the siliver Yoko, she still has to deal with our red-headed Kurama, there is no way she would accept Kuronue in a threesome. Not to mention, her mother would never approve, not the way you have developed her character. It's too much of a stretch. Well, I've said my peace and given my opinion because you did ask for reviewer response. I'll be anxiously waiting to see what you end up doing. ^_^ I've thoroughly enjoyed this story and all your other stories so far. Keep up the wonderful writing.
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From ANON - LIZ on February 24, 2005
I LIKE THE IDEA OF THOSE THREE TOGETER.
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From ANON - xoulblade on February 24, 2005
YEAH!! Kuronue's back!!! *ahem* sorry got alittle bit carried away! *does a happy dance* lol you can tell I like Kuronue, huh? Well......anyway I'm going to the next chapter (nice chapter by the way)
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From ANON - KogasAngel on February 24, 2005
Well, I am sure that you are fully aware of how I feel about Kuronue. After all, he is all I talk about when I review you. LOL. So, sure. I would love to see a three some. But it is still your story and I love it no matter what you decide. Though, it would be nice to have the reincarnated Sango and Miroku join the fight against Naraku. And what about ole Sessy boy? If he didn't die, it would be nice to see him to have survived the 500 years and join in the fight. Ahhhh, have I told you yet that I love this story? Well, I do. Please update quickly.
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From michelle5137 on February 24, 2005
Hey, just a question! And you don't have to answer it if you dont' want to, but, what exactly is your planw with Kuronue, of excuse me, my Kuronue? Have you thought of perhaps letting Kuronue join their little union? I know that your first story is a Kuronue/Kagome/Kagome pairing, but um....well it's just a thought. And Kuronue is hot!!!!!!! Well, this was a great chapter and I can hardly wait for my Kuronue to show up? Oh, gotta run my Kuro is calling. And have fun playing with Kuronosuke! Ja ne. Oh and one more thing, I released a one-shot ficcie featuring everybodie's favorites Kurama and Kagome. It is on aff.net and fanfiction.net if you're interested.
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From ANON - Gem on February 24, 2005
oooohh this is getting sooooooooooo good. Interesting idea haveing inuyasha visit in spirt. (laughs) even dead he is still possesive and protective. Have the feeling it is going to make for some interesting times latter. I have to add I don't know the YYH characters but I like how your writing Kurama, you just gotta love those naughty bad boys. And this one comes with a responsible side, who knew that was possible?LOL
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From ANON - Kura-kun\'s-lovr on February 23, 2005
Hwy, Ryu, I got a bone to pick with you? Where's my Kuronue? Is he lost? Is he captured. Oh and also, through out soul bond he asks me to let you know he expects to be paid in full by the time he is done with his role in your fic. Oh, also he wonders how you are treating his brother. He hasn't seem him since you dragged him off to your bedroom? Have you perhaps tied him up and had your way with him? Oh and also there are some things you must know about Kuronosuke. AS I'm sure oyu've already figured out, he is a major flirt and a perv. Be sure to watch his wandering hands because they have a way of getting away on him. Anywya, nice job on your story. Things are progressing smoothly and I sound like a I'm typing a telegram. But seriously, when are you bringing Kuronue in? I hope it's soon. But for now update frequently. Ja ne.

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From whirleeq on February 23, 2005
Oh gods... I can't believe you made Youko do that with her family in the room. Even *I'm* blushing at the thought! Me likey where this is going, but you're going to have to elaborate on Naraku's 'dream power'.

So, you're going to bring Kuronue in, methinks? Interesting...

I really like the interactions with Kagomes family. You write them well and believable and it's very easy to understand how they're feeling. Kudos on that!

One small thing with this chapter: I could never see Youko with 'servants'. Plants that did his bidding, perhaps, but servants? He was always on the move and on the lam and very much a loner, save for his partner. To me, the servant thing just didn't mesh...

Take care and thanks for the extra long chapter. It was really great!
--julie
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From ANON - redtatsu on February 23, 2005
Wow. I just wanted to write and say how much I injoy your writings. It always fascinated me how people can create stories in there head and could put it to paper without it sounding like jibberish. Thank you for sharing your gift of storytelling. And I hope you can find a way through your writers block so you will someday finish your other stories!!
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From ANON - Autumn Norris on February 23, 2005
Yay!!! New chapter!!! Woo Hoo!!!! Sorry... I'm very hyper... anyways... AWESOME chapter!!! I loved the little argument between Yoko and Kurama at the beginning! You had me practically falling out of my chair in laughter!!! Please update soon!!! I don't really need to tell you that... you have like 2000000 chapters out a day!!! And I love you for that!! =) THANK YOU for bring Sessy into this story, even if it's not a major role!!!! I just LOVE Sessy SOOOOO Much!!!!! OK then... about that new story you were thinking about... the one when Sessy kidnaps Kagome... well I would be very very VERY scared to see a fight between Sesshoumaru and Yoko... I would literally be pissing my pants... But that sounds like a pretty cool story!!! I can't wait to read a Rurouni Kenshin/ Yuyu Hakusho/ Inuyasha crossover by you, if you ever decide to write one!!! Well... I got's ta go!!! Wow... this review is hella long... Oh well!!!! Update soon!!!! Oh and I Love you with a passion!!! =P (One of my favorite things to say is '... with a passion'... don't ask why! It just is!)
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From ANON - lehcar132 on February 23, 2005
I have been reading this story and have enjoyed it so far. Now that all of the characters have been developed a bit it is getting more interesting. I like this side of Kurama. He is usually portrayed as somewhat of a wuss. I can't wait to see how he gets Yusuke back. I have read all of your stories (or at least as far as you have gotten on them) and think you have a lot of talent. Hope you finish them all but either way keep up the good work.
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From JADEPRINCESS on February 23, 2005
It is once again I the SHADOW. I liked the first ten chapters but that is all I have read so far. I have been busy writing my story, so now I have to play catch up and spend hours glued to my computer reading yours. I Have been in this situation dealing with your other story. I think you are secretly evil and write massive chapters at a time to keep me from getting any sleep. You are brilliant I love,love,love, your stories. Do try and get some sleep though cuz if you don't your brian will shut down and then what am I to do at night when I get done writing my chapters and want to read your stories. Your stories are like drugs and you are the pusher please keep supplying.I rate your story so far on a scale from 1 to 10 a 25. I think you would do good with a kenshin Xover so go for it. If you write it I will read it . Much Love

SHADOW OUT
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From ANON - Gem on February 23, 2005
Ok now that i gotten over the trauma of "major character deaths" im really getting into this. Lots of emotional ups and downs, conflicts and quite moments, making it a well rounded story. And I appreciate the fact you have been updating regularly, making the time to do so. keep at it.
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