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By : ryukotsusei

From ANON - Ralina on February 19, 2005
I think I might have a solution to your problem with the time paradox thing. Perhaps Kurama could go to the past if Youko wasn't in charge (I don't think he'd like that much though). If he just existed dormant while the 'other' him was still alive, they might be able to both exist at once, or you could have him die 500 years ago and Youko had to wait for the right chance to occur for him to be 'born' again with Shuichi. You actually have a lot of room to play around with the creative liscense we are able to have when writing fanfiction. I'm looking forward to the next update, good luck with it, and keep up the great work!

~Ralina~
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From ANON - Seishini\'jousha on February 19, 2005
*pats her back* You poor person...Me thinks you need a better email server...What about Outlook Express? It never failed me before! Of course, I probably never received as many reviews in the mail as you have... *blinks* Onward, no more depressing crap...Save that for the fics *creepy smile*

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*ahem* I have a question...well actually more than one, but whatever. How come Hiei's scent on Kagome was so profound, according to Youko's sense of smell? When is Naraku going to try to get Kagome? Why is there not enough sexual tension, darn it! >__< I guess I'm just so used to your other stories where tension was just so...abundant! I actually never reviewed your stories since you update so quickly...I suppose I feared you not responding to my reviews and that the questions I asked would be obsolete by the time you did respond.... I do wonder when the rest of the Spirit team members come about, and if they do: Please, I beg of you, don't make Kuwabara be such an oaf...It's disheartening to read fan fictions that rip on Kuwabara because he expresses his emotions so...vividly...I find him to be heroic in a sense; what with him defending those that need it and kicking bad guys booty... I'm not a Kuwabara fan girl; in fact, I support everyone...even Kikyo! Not the cruel clay monster she became, but the once-living Kikyo! Even I have my limitations ^___~

Good day!
Seishini'jousha_mesunokitsune
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From ANON - whirleeq on February 19, 2005
Oh lordy lordy... you know you could have made this a LOT easier on yourself writing wise by sticking Kurama with just one soul? The Kurama/Youko thing is always difficult. So far, however, you seem to be doing well with it -- especially since you have them with slightly different mindsets regarding Kagome. It makes it more believable.

I still think this is your very best work - relationships where one or more parties has suffered an extreme loss are always difficult, but captivating, if written well.

Did I read that you are actually considering writing a kurama/kenshin/kagome fic? :) I actually read one called 'A Choice of Roads' a while back. It was really good, and the fic that inspired my own attempt with kag/ken - a sadly underated pairing, but I think one with a helluva lot of potential -- but I'm biased; I love the red-haired ex-assassin bishie ;). Anyway, 'A Choice of Roads' stayed very true to canon, and brought Kurama in as a twist at the very end. It was rathar short, but very good. If you haven't read it, and you're interested, let me know - I'll find the link.

Anyway, keep writing, love your work as always :)

julie
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From ANON - Ox King on February 19, 2005
Oh my gosh, I'm sorry I haven't reviewed in so long. Chapter 11..... yesh, I wanted to go out and kill a few chickens to make my self feel better. It made me cry. Chapter 12 made me feel a bit better. I think it was a bit ingenious having Youko mistaken Hiei as Kagome's wood be killer. A great way to introduce the past Hiei with the present. Chapters 17 and 18 really flowed together in how you introduced the rest of the SD and how Shuichi/Kurama made an apperance. It is going to be interesting in how you are going to finish the bond. Ummm Lemon pie. Also how the 3 of them, are going to deal with being mates when they live in 2 differnt places. Are they going to get married the human way and get their own appartment to satisfy Youko's over protective urges? So many things to think about and write. Hummm, thats a good thing on my part. Keep the chapters rolling. I live for your updates. Yes thats me, you biggest fan for this story.
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From ANON - xoulblade on February 19, 2005
*dreamy eyed* mmm that was sooooo romantic....*ahem* sorry. I was wondering would you mind helping me with my story? Anyway I cant wait until you update, which I know it would be soon!! Besides cliffhangers are your specialty!
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From ANON - Richelle on February 19, 2005
I absolutly love your story! And you're such a fast updater!
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From ANON - Mija on February 19, 2005
awwwwwwww that made me cry, that little dream sequence with Inu...ooh my Inu baby...still love him, but if Kags is going to be with someone else why not Kurama I say, or hiei which I find rather amusing myself hehe oh btw ty for the review on that one hehe...again great chapter short but soo sweet and I totally agree, I like seeing Kagome's feelings, it would be weird for her to just accept it all without thinking about it first and I like how your working this out, you do it well, again ty for that short but sweet little chap, untill next one you be well safe and happy much huggles and smiles Mija...and sniffles for my Inu....(walks away with tissue in hand...INU!) hehe...
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From ANON - MysticAngel77 on February 19, 2005
Egads you update nicely! Although it would be great to one day find that you posted like 20 more chapters all at once and the story was complete, lol as if right? You're doing a great job, just like your other wonderous stories! I'm really liking the relationships going on here in this one though. I especially like how Hiei is being nice instead of just a plain ol cold hearted jerkwad. It does seem like it's progressing sort of slow, but you cant really rush something when someone is supposed to mourn, ya know? Everyone dies, Kagome cries for like 10 minutes, gets up and skips happily through some flowers holding Kurama's hand.. ha.. ha... no. Anywho, keep writing and updating and the cookies will keep coming! *piles some cookies on your keyboard* Get workin'!
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From ANON - Mija on February 18, 2005
omg those were two more awsome chapters, I liked the little fight between Hiei and Youko, but when will he explain Kurama and him sharing a body??? and when will Kurama be able to come back out??? omg ok I know its all sad and confussing right now for her, but just imagine??? having both Kurama and Youko??? yummy...they share a body and therefore will share her, she can have a cute ass red head one night and a yummy silver haired fox demon the next, no cheating but some variety...hehe...ok..(pulls mind back from hentai closet) ookkk now not thinking Youko can go threw the well, but then again Naraku did tamper with it and it now allows demons to pass, and Youko is demon...hmmmm this could get soooooooo intresting...hehe, will Youko go before Naraku comes??? or vice versa??? knowing Naraku when he gets his ass kicked the first time by Youko and the others he'll run back down the well to his time, only to discover that haha he cant keep them from coming after him because of his meddling witht he well...hehe this is going to be sooooo good I cant wait...again awsome chapters great writing, sooooo cant wait for more till then be well safe and happy much huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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From ANON - xoulblade on February 18, 2005
Too bad you can't write....Meanwhile back in the Fuedal Era.....anyway I glad you updated so soon :D get some sleep *evil smiles* But I cant wait until you update again!!
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From ANON - Ralina on February 18, 2005
Another wonderful chapter! Bravo! I just had a funny thought after I read how you wrote it would be funny to have Naraku get run over by a bus or a train. What if his miasma had no effect on anybody in this era because they are so used to pollution already? They'd cough and say that that is some of the stinkiest gas fumes they'd ever smelled, but it wouldn't knock them out or anything! Yes, he could still go around killing people by spearing them, but I don't think he has reckoned with a modern day police force either! Hmph and he thinks it will be easy to take over and rule the people of the future! lol Keep up the great work!

~Ralina~
P.S. Wouldn't that twist things, to have Naraku defeated by regular humans (the police force) before the spirit detectives, or any of the others got there?
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From ANON - Mija on February 18, 2005
ooh damn that Naraku...grrrrrrrrrrrr...but I soooooooo cant wait to see him try and take Kagome, I really cant, hehe Hiei is extremly more stronger now then before and then theres Youko and Kurama???? not to mention the rest of the YYH gang when they find out whats going on, again an awsome chapter I soo cant wait for more, actually the last two chapters lol, I havent been able to get on but so glad I did to catch these two awsome chapters, great work I soo love to read your fics, keep it up k??? again great wonderfull chapters and DAMN that Naraku...grrrrrrrrrrrrr huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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From ANON - xoulblade on February 17, 2005
oooooo *claps happily* 2 chapters!!! Lol sorry, but at the moment if Naraku is going to take Kagome, hes mince meat when Youko gets a hold of him! I can't wait until you update!
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From ANON - whirleeq(not logged in) on February 17, 2005
wow... just... wow....

Girl, this is BY FAR your very best work. The characters are well written and in character, you haven't villified Inuyasha, the story flows well... WOW..

I really can't wait to see where you go with this! This rocks!
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From JADEPRINCESS on February 17, 2005
Hey you're on a roll here keep it up. I know the feeling it's like you just can't stop writing. All your stories are magnificent I love your mind. You are my favorite aurthor. I wish you would read my story and review. I hope the writers block that you have on your other story "Whispers in the night" soon comes to an end, cuz I am obsessed with that one in particular. When I first started to read that one it was 19 chapters long. I stayed up from 1 o'clock to 5 o'clock in the morning, because I could not stop reading it eventhough I had to get up at 6 o'clock that morning. I love this one as well, I have read it since you first posted it and was one of the first to review. I also love that Kurama and Kogame get together in this one since you said they will not be in "Whispers in the night". Like I said before if you write it I will read it. Keep up the writing I am sure this one will only get better.

Much love,SHADOW OUT.
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