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By : ryukotsusei

From whirleeq on February 28, 2005
LOL, yeah, Naraku is definately a hottie in an evil, twisted sort of way.

Sometimes the villians are sexier than the good guys. Hey, have you ever considered doing a 'dark kagome' fic? I think she could pair up well with Itsuki (who's all heartbroken after the whole Sensui arc.) or some other YYH bad-guy-hottie, or even (gasp!) Naraku. and then you can send the YYH boys in to try to bring her down. :)

All these bunnies run rampant in my head, and they just have to go somewhere, so I'm sorry I just can't help it if they decide to jump your way from time to time LOL. ;)

Interesting chapter. Poor Hojo... he's so very dense. I don't think you should kill him off, it would be 'overkill' (okay, bad choice of words, I admit.), and being an idiot doesn't in my book qualify him for death. Now, if he turned all villiany like in your other story, that would be a different case. But if you add an arc like that, you could probably kiss goodbye to the under 50 chapters thing! Personally, I think that you wrapped up the Hojo thing quite nicely here, but I think Kagome is going to be pretty pissed off with Youko though for cutting the boy.

Keep the updates coming! ;)

--julie
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From ANON - InuMiko on February 28, 2005
Okay. There is no way that Kagome would easily forgive Youko for the permanent facial scarring thing. Regardless of his ridiculous little school boy crush and obsession, Hojo's first act was to try to protect Kagome. Warning or not, he'd have no way of knowing about the existance of demons, and he reacted exactly how I would have expected anyone who cared about her to react, by trying to get him out of there. To me, it just seems unnecessarily harsh. Plus, a reaction like that would land Youko in some serious trouble with Koenma. To me, this whole chapter just seems like it's just an excuse to bash Hojo around because you personaly don't like him, and it doesn't advance the plot at all. If anyone is going to get knocked around, at least make it the bad guys.
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From ANON - redtatsu on February 28, 2005
Is it me ? I just love the interaction between Hiei and Kuronue? I would love it read a spin-off story with the two of them on an adventure of some kind. Keep up the great work. Oh ya, when do you sleep?;)
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From ANON - Kura-kun\'s-lovr on February 28, 2005
Yo! What's happenin'? Me, I'm just hanging with my fabulously sexy mate Kuronue. Right now he is laying with his head in my lap and we are both happily and contentedly reading your story. Kuronue had to admit he does think it is absolutely hilarious that Kagome can whip Yoko into shape. You wouldn't believe the teasing and the fist fight those boys got in to when Yoko stopped over for dinner. Of course then Yoko tried to hit on me and well, what can I say, I hit right bacl. As you can probably figure out my mate, Kuronue, got a little pissed and then they started fighting over me, right there in the living room. Why I'll tell you it was better than watching tv. I just sat on the couch eating some popcorn and drinking some pop. It was all favulous. And then, who should show up but your mate Kuronosuke. It seems that while you were sleeping he snuck out because he wanted to speak to his brother about something. And well I over heard and I'm not really supposed to tell you this but Kuronosuke is about ready to pop the question. You should have seen how nervous he was. And then Yoko made the mistake of calling you a sexy babe and me a delicious tart, and why do they get all the free, sexy girls. Needless to say there was yet another fist fight. So you might want to treat his injuries when he comes back.

Well anyway, I just wanted to let you know you're doing a great job on the story. But guess what? I went to write the Kuronue/Kagome one-shot the other night and right as soon as I finished writing it, I went to post it and the whole site messed up and went offline so I lost all my work!!!!! I was pissed. So now I have to write the whole thing over again and there is no way it is going to be as good as the first version was. Second drafts are never as good as the firsts. Well, mine aren't anyway. So I just wanted to review and let you know to keep up the good work. By the way, do you know yet which story you're going to start back ujp once you're done with this one? I know you said you weren't going to write them until you completed this story so I was just wondering. If you need any help with your up=coming plosts, I have lots of ideas floating through my head and I'll be glad to lay them on you if you need some inspiration. By the way, I hate Hojo! I hope he dies soon. is he going to complicate things for their relationship in this story? I usually make him a bad guy in my stories too. He just gets on my nerves as well as her three scatterbrained friends. Well, I better be off to heal my Kuronue's wounds. Your man just left and he should be coming through your window any time soon. Oh and watch out for Yoko! He has wandering eyes and hands and has been feeling rather lecherous later since he hasn't gotten any from Kagome yet.

Ja ne
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From ANON - Autumn Norris on February 28, 2005
I forgot to put some stuff on the other review... well about the Tetsusaiga thing, that makes complete sense... I guess I think too much about how Sessy doesn't want Tetsusaiga anymore, that I forgot that he probably doesn't want it to leave the family however. OK then... anyways, about the Hiei glare thing, I prefer to give people the Sesshoumaru glare or the Inuyasha growl... I'm quite good at both of those... anyways... as I said in the last review... update soon!
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From ANON - Gem on February 28, 2005
LOL - loved this chappie! I laughed through most of it. The poor "boys" are starting to figure out just how strong kagome is. I'm sure you have more fun planned with this. Liked that you had the guys watching like that, not that they would miss it for the world! With that kind of entertainment you almost expect popcornand a few bets on the outcome! Can't wait for the reality check you have planned for Naraku. Welcome to th 21st century dude!
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From ANON - Autumn Norris on February 28, 2005
I'm soooo sorry about the last review!!!! It was soooo mean!!!! I just get really defensive when the subject is about Sessy!!!! But thank you anyway for saying it's OK to be stared at (Autumn Norris and Yoko-Sesshoumaru are the same person!)!!! Update soon!!!! Yay! Kurama and Kagome had a little fight! It's finally showing how stubborn Kagome is! Yay!
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From ANON - Jasmine Fields on February 27, 2005
Poor Hojo, just doesn't know what's coming at him, does he?

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From ANON - Ralina on February 27, 2005
Just wanted to let you know that I am still following your story, and I am loving every bit of it. I already feel sorry for Hojo, at least the way he is in this story. Whatever Kurama's or Youko's reaction is to him will probably scare the socks off of Hojo - even if they just growl. Poor guy so stupid and naive... Anyway, keep up the great work!

~Ralina~
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From ANON - whirleeq(not logged in) on February 27, 2005
God girl, you had me absolutely squeeling in glee with your little Naraku/Kagura interaction. I for one positively love Kagura. She is my absolute favorite female character from Inuyasha. But then again, I think Naraku's probably the sexiest male character on the show as well, so my tastes are definately circumspect. :) -- julie
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From whirleeq on February 27, 2005
Ooh... be easy on Yusuke - he was only concerned about his buddy, and didn't really mean any harm. Besides, he's adorable. (As if that's a good reason to go easy on him LOL). Great additions - gah, you're so fast, I can't even keep up with the reviews, LOL! I'm really glad you have devoted more time to Kagome's feelings. I know it's hard to build a relationship between the two when one of them is grieving so terribly (god, do I know how hard it is - I want to scream at the screen on occasion with my own story), but you are doing a very good and realistic job. I would like to see you write a little more from Kagome's perspective, but if it doesn't flow with the muse, so be it. What's our favorite bad guy up to? Did he get hit by a car yet, or perhaps thrown in jail for disorderly behavior, LOL! You really need to have him shot with a tazer or something, at least once ;). But anyway, I really am curious to see more of Naraku's reactions to the present -- especially the technology and less than modest way that people dress. I think it would be quite amusing.

Ta ta for now!

Julie
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From ANON - Gem on February 27, 2005
- (peers guiltily over top of computer screen)- Umm -(squirms every so slightly)- About the fall off in reviews. Ok so ive been a bad girl and been reading and not reviewing. Sigh, I just can't always think of anything constructive to say. And saying great story!!- while very true- just starts to sound lame after the tenth time or so. Besides you don't need my suggestions you do darn good on your own, plus the fact all the other talented people here are always willing to bounce around a few ideas. My only thing I'd like to see latter on is all the guys getting a taste of the rath of Kagome in a humorous way, when she is feeling more herself. Youve kept her with that inner strength that makes her character great. It'd be fun to see Kurama when he realizes just what he hes gotten himself into. Do Kitsunes whine?
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From ANON - Autumn Norris on February 27, 2005
Kuronue is going to piss off Hiei hella if he keeps bugging him!!! I was just thinking that when I read that part... Anyways! Great chapter!!! Update soon!!!! I want lemons! Please? I love you... with a passion!!!!! I'm a sick little kid.... I'm bored...
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From ANON - Autumn Norris on February 27, 2005
You are very lucky that Tenseiga protects Sessy from Tetsusaiga, because if he had died, I would have personally hunted you down and killed you... Now to a positive note! Great chapter! (Except the Sessy part GURR!!!)!! Happy that you put Sessy in! Even if he still wants Tetsusaiga... because he DOESNS'T!!!! He has Tokijin and realized that he can't use the Tetsusaiga, so he doesn't go after Tetsusaiga anymore. The mission in his life at the moment is to KILL NARAKU!!!!! Sorry... I'm just REALLY obssessed with him and I just hate when people say certain things about Sessy... like his mission in life is to kill Inuyasha... which it isn't!!! Because in the episode "Jaken Falls Ill" Sesshoumaru has an opportunity to like cut off Inuyasha's head, but he doesn't. So that shows that he no longer wants to kill Inuyasha!!!!! Well... once again I broke my rule about the chapters and reviews... but I HAD to review this chapter!!!!! Thanks for putting Sessy in the final battle!!!!!!
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From ANON - Jasmine Fields on February 26, 2005
Awesome-ness! Love the attacks and love that Kags saved the day!!!!!
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