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Reviews for Frightful Flight

By : silverlips
  • From ANON - Mystic Hanyou on February 22, 2005
    This is good. A little fast in the pace, but that's fine. The plot is growing and I hope to see more soon. Just a piece of advice. It is some what confusing to have all dialogue in the same paragraph of different people. Each dialogue line should stand on it's own. Here's an example from your story.

    They made their way to his car. "What the hell to you want?" Inuyasha barked out (no pun intended). "Watch your tongue half breed. I'm here to let you know he’s back for the company.” Inuyasha stood dumbstruck for a moment. "WHAT?"

    Now see how it looks in the proper format.

    They made their way to his car. "What the hell to you want?" Inuyasha barked out (no pun intended).

    "Watch your tongue half breed. I'm here to let you know he’s back for the company.”

    Inuyasha stood dumbstruck for a moment. "WHAT?"


    You don't need to follow each dialogue with "he said, she said". Or with anything. Take a look at some other stories out there. I have a few on ff.net and mediaminer.org. Hope this helps you out. If you would like someone to beta test you chapters, just post that in an A/N. I am sure someone will respond. Later.

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  • From ANON - ish on February 22, 2005
    ARRRRRRRRGHHHHHHHH ::frustration::

    I liked Kouga getting his ass kicked for interfering. I kinda wanted Sango to at least get a punch from Kagome. I mean come on, she ruined a potentially great night! Meh... it was still awesome. I wanna know who it is that has InuYasha so upset! Wahhhh, the anticipation! Urg, keep it HOT! Sayonara
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  • From ANON - cathleen on February 22, 2005
    I really reading this story I hope you up date soon.
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  • From ANON - ish on February 21, 2005
    I definitely think you should go for the lemon. I really liked chapter ten, and yet another interruption by Sango!! Urg, if I were Kagome... I would be a very angry anf frustrated girl.

    Nice work thus far, as you know. Keep it HOT.
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  • From ANON - Silverdragon on February 21, 2005
    Darn, I wonder why Inu didn't throw the bloody phone out of the window! I would have done it!!!! Hehehehe... Love your story!
    CU in the next chapter!
    Silver
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  • From ANON - Hello!! on February 21, 2005
    Don't worry it went well for your first lemon....it was kind of funny when Sango interrupt...jejeje....poor Inu. Keep it up update SOON!!!!

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  • From ANON - ish on February 20, 2005
    I haven't reviewed this since the first chapter, but it's definitely only getting better with each chapter. I must say I was disappointed with Sango's interruption at the end of the evening, but what can you do? True to the anime and manga, someone alwyas interrupts InuYasha and Kagome. I really like it. Keep it HOT!
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 20, 2005
    I like it. Nice chapter. I cant wait to read the next one sooo....PLEASE UPDATE!!!

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  • From ANON - Zelix on February 20, 2005
    VERY good story, nicely put together with excellent story flow, all in all: Excellent work BUT there was one error in that last chapter:

    I don't know if you wrote it on purpose or not but a hanyou is not "Half-demon, Half-Youkai" it's "Half-human, Half-Youkai" Because Youkai and Demon are the same thing except on different language, this is not an insult or anything but did you write that on purpose?
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  • From ANON - mowbaby101 on February 19, 2005
    This story is awesome!
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  • From ANON - dev dev on February 18, 2005
    OH THE DRAMA!!!! great story, but i think if you spell "tomOrrow" "tomArrow"one more time i'll have to go yell in a pillow. think of the poor pillow!! I found a few more spelling errors, but i dont really blame you for making them because even if you spell-check there can still be misteaks(hint:spell-check does NOT pick up grammatical errors)You should always have someone read it, if you read over it you will ignore the misteaks because you already know what's supposed to be there. If you cant fine another person to read it, try reading every word from the end back.I' looking forward to the next chapter so update soon!
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  • From ANON - Silverdragon on February 18, 2005
    Hola, this story is awesome! I am glad you explained the demon-thing, because I was already wondering... I really like this story and I am looking forward to reading more updates!
    CU
    Silver
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  • From ANON - sexililkagome on February 18, 2005
    awsome story just a few spelling errors im at the edge of my seat im DYING 2 read more plz plzplz update soon ^_^
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  • From ANON - Mystic Hanyou on February 16, 2005
    I can't wait till Inuyasha puts Koga in his place. I mean come on, enough is enough. Can't wait till their dancing. Later.
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  • From fallenangel7583 on February 16, 2005
    the story plot you have here is excellent. i like the charater depiction you have put together for Kagome, being stronger then she normally is and much less...whiny. i like it. we could use a little more detail for InuYasha's past but what you have set up for him already is great. i love the two of them being stuck together as dance partners. i get flashes of 'Dirty Dancing' scenes in my mind when i think of that...and that out-weighs the thought of our favorite red clad hanyou trying to dance. LOL. things i would love to see....LOL. great story so far. i find it intresting that you used Bankotsu and Jakotsu for the bad guys on the plane. (i love them both, they are teh best). keep it up.
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