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By : BrethlessM

From ANON - Stuey on March 17, 2005
Whoo Hoo, i helped. She likes my idea, YAY. :P holy crap where did all these new reviewers come from?. any way, i checked out dianes art, and it rocks, can't wait to see what you put out for this. i really enjoyed this chapter, i was wondering if sess was going to treat inuyasha as an enemy or not. here's a question i know you can't answer, but im going to ask anyway just so everyone else who reads this post who hasn't thought of it will have it nagging at thier brains :P - will kagome remove inuyasha's necklace? *sinister grin* the anticipation over the answer is killing me, but ill have to be patient (i hate doing that) and yea, some time ill see about re-reading the whole thing to check for errors, but ive got my 'guild wars' clan to tend to this weekend, so maybe next week... argh! you didn't post when you were going to post again. NOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!! please continue doing that, it gives me somthing to look forward to! any way, with the one shots and the sequel coming, along with the art work, maybe it would be interesting to make this somthing bigger than just a fanfic on a fanfic site?
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From ANON - Juice on March 16, 2005
Now this is really getting good and i really like the idea of Inuyasha marking Kagome now i want to see just what Kouga will think of it this should really piss him off. that was reall "nice" of Sesshoumaru to give Inuyasha that gift. Well no typos in this one that i can see and i'll try to get some more friends to read this.

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From ANON - Crossbow Trueshot on March 16, 2005
Yes! another long and outstanding chapter. Also well written, the whole "This Sesshomaru" 3rd person was a bit confusing ...@_@... but i got use to it. Also, this may have beena coincidence, but your weasel demon is a summon for the Temari in the Anime Naruto...just dawned upon me...

I also liked the whole named for herself plot twist....but becareful, especially in this time-line driven show.....i have seen many authors write themselves into confusion and end up abandoning a fic because they ended up over foreshadowing. It was a nice little touch but dont try to make an additions where they look into the mythology around themselves and find out what to expect of their futures, or having their future immortal selves revisit them in the modern era....Its a plot hole nightmare

Other than that it was great, keep it up...........also theres a song out about beautfiul souls....thought it would be an appropriate Theme Song lol.....gomen....i sometimes slip into a chibi like enthusiasm state.. 0_o

Good Work

-The Ever Faithful Crossbow Trueshot
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From ANON - Vikki on March 16, 2005
I can't believe it you got the years of when Inuyasha's father died. A lot of people take a guess on the time of when he died. I got the time from the third movie. I hope you understand what i'm staying. Also, lemons are hard to write and yes if you don't get them right it's porn. I can't wait for the wedding and what is this new evil can't wait for that. Now Sessh. i'm loving the niceness he showed for Inuyasha. I can't believe that inuyasha didn't notice it was a new moon. That's ok, i understand he wanted to protect his love. I think that sessh and rin are going to be together, maybe not in this story but maybe the next. TEHE. Can't wait for that one too. Please Update soon...your fan, Vikki.
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From ANON - Diane on March 15, 2005
This story is very good. I cant even begin on how to tell you how you kept all the characters in there true form, lovely. Any way, I would love to do some fan art for this peice if you dont already have some one...If you think Im worthy let me know, heres my web site http://elfwood.lysator.liu.se/fanq/d/i/dianegomez84/dianegomez84.html . Let me know, and where I should post it, somewhere on here or my own web site. Thanks, and of course I leave a link back to you.
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From ANON - BakaInuGirl on March 15, 2005
I HAD to review this story at Chapter 4. Now you're probably asking yourself, "Why didn't she read all the chapters posted?" and if you're not asking yourself...well, you should! Anywho, the answer is a depressing one: I have to work in the AM and it is 2am e.s.t. This story is wonderfully written and I look forward to reading the other chapters posted as soon as possible. I love your attention to detail and the fact that you have provided FOOTNOTES for your readers (which by the way I can't read a chapter without also reading the footnotes, even though I may know most of the terms I love that you provide a backstory to a lot of the info!) is amazing! Kudos on your knowledge of Japanese custom! Being the huge geek that I am, I enjoy seeing what you're spelling in your A/Ns (and I love the Sesame Street reference, I also have found myself laughing aloud which causes my neighbors to question my sanity ). I love the story, it's wonderful, and I can't wait to finish reading the posts! Great job! I love it!
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From ANON - Crossbow Trueshot on March 14, 2005
Great Chapter...nice and long
And as being a self proclaimed romantic myself, I find the whole together forever thing perfectly acceptable
Keep at it!

-the ever faithful Crossbow Trueshot

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From ANON - Vikki on March 14, 2005
LEMON LEMON LEMON LEMON LEMON LEMON LEMON LEMON. I loved it. This was just like you said it would be. One, if not the best, lemon i have ever read. I love sango and miroku pairings. They hold the kind of love that every girl dreams of, but then so does inuyasha and kagome. Their wedding was so beautiful. I could just picture it with in my mind. Now, them being gods, it's about time they were noticed by the village. I love it, now they have a real home. As for shippo walking in on kag and inu, was a little angry at teh kit, but it's all good. Sessh's in the next chapter, can't wait to hear what he has to say. Also, one more thing UPDATE SOON. With love, your forever loving fan (yep that will do), Vikki.
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From ANON - Queen Bean on March 14, 2005
Wow! i really love this story. i can't wait for the next chapter.
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From ANON - Inuzands on March 14, 2005
Well, I just found this story this morning and I couldn't stop reading it! You've done an excellent job in bringing the characters to life and keeping them in their characters. I was even impressed at how you did the whole Disney chapter. I'm usually not a fan of scenes like that because some people try to do something like that and it just doesn't work. But the way you did it made sense and didn't corrupt the characters in any way. And of course I am uber excited at the rise of a new villain. I love new villains! :) Anyways, keep up the excellent writing, and I look forward to reading the rest of the story and its sequel!
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From ANON - Anon on March 14, 2005
:O noooo!!! evil sucks!
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From ANON - Juice on March 14, 2005
Thank you now 4 the next couple this is realy getting good it just keeps getting better and better and better this is great i can't whart 2 read about Inu Yasha does to his older half-brother this should be a good fight i hope . well i'll see O and thank you for the cookie it was really TASTEY yumy :))) O P.S. the TYPO'S there r more than usual
I WANT MORE

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From ANON - Stuey on March 14, 2005
ooh... lemony goodness. lmao... juice just showed me a wall paper of sango and miroku in bed :P good timing. anyway, yea, ill let you know if i figure out what the thing i didn't like was. :( i want a cookie too.... do i get one if i tell you how to fix the plot whole? just have it heal when she gets the shikon no tama of family (that was it right?) well, thats my 2 cents anyway, but your the author, so if you can think up a better way, go for it. ok, now im gonna be a critic, so i appologize for my tone now. GO BACK AND READ YOUR WORK, THERE ARE A LOT MORE TYPO'S THAN USUAL!! theres usualy maybe one or 2 per chapter, but i caught quite a few in this one. it makes the work look sloppy. not that i didn't still enjoy it, i rather liked it actually. this will be interesting when you get to the lemon of inu/kag. mark on the neck huh? was that out of the manga or an original idea by yourself? ought to turn out interesting. now ill wait patiently for wednesday.......... ok, so it wont be patiently, but i dont have any choice now do i?
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From ANON - PJ on March 14, 2005
Nice chapter. I like Inuyasha's reaction to the whole 'adventure stuff' and that he is reading those wonderful stories. That is me too I will take a good adventure/action movie over most other movies. I like a good comedy but was never into mushy stuff too much. Don't get me wrong I like fluff too I just prefer the action. I did like the Miroku/Sango "action" you had in this chapter it was pretty hot. And Shippou having a bad dream was cute just like a kid would do with his parents I am glad Inuyasha picked up on that. Will the well stay open I can't remember if that was already covered or not? I suppose you will cover that in later chapters. I hope Kouga doesn't find Kagome until after the wedding. I also hope Sessy and Inuyasha don't hurt each other too bad or that they can make peace with each other. If not that at least agree not to kill each other or their family's. when I am talking about Inuyasha's family I am talking about the whole "Inu gang" and Kagome's family in her time. I am going read what you have posted so far again so I can see about the well. I can also understand about Miroku saying that they should agree to be "Kami" it would make things easier in that time it they are considered myth/legends, etc. Anyway great chapter I wonder who that was at the end that 'came to life' so to speak. Keep writing!!!!!
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From ANON - Stuey on March 10, 2005
ok, ok, im sorry i didnt read ch 12 the night you posted it PLEASE FORGIVE ME!!!. right, now that ive got that out of the way, i hate to say it, but i didn't like ch 11 (PLEASE FORGIVE ME!!! [why does that sound familiar])and its driving me nuts, becuase i cant figure out why. well, anyway, ch. 12 was awesome. all the characters spending an eternity together, everyone getting a wish, and not 1, but 2 engagements. i wonder if they'll all wed on the same day... any way, my only question now is where in the world does it go from here. with naraku dead, you get to play with creating your own villans, and since you're already writing ch.17, you probably already have. the disney thing was a great idea, and i couldn't help but smile while reading the entire chapter, great job as usual. oh, and thanks for answering my vocab questions (yay, i'm learning!) and another thing, i just noticed this while going through the reviews again, inuyasha stopped calling kagome his bitch. did you stop doing that, or just havn't happen to write him saying that in a while? anyway, im off to run for the hills to avoid your sequel *turns and runs away franticly while screaming* ^_^ lol, j/k, i cant wait to see what it and the one shots are about. oh, and juice is right, shouldn't sango's arm still be broken :P sry, but it looks like there really is a plot hole this time. oh well, can't wait for saturday now.............................. is it saturday yet?
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