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By : FarAwayEyes

From vbollman on October 13, 2005
My dear you have been missed. I was drowning and then i read this most wonderful life line.
Sorry couldn't help myself. I've been writing my own story all day and this just made my relazation time so much better. I loved the pig scene. That poor monk. I hope he gets back at silk somehow. And where are my fav, dog brothers. out getting into more mudfights? Anyway, thanks for updating, and i'm glad you did well in school.

My shameless plug of the day. check out the first chapter of my story, Changes: Past and present. not as good as you but hey, I like it.
p.s. yes i switched, decided i liked it better over here, then at MM.org. Luvs Ya
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From ANON - DPM on October 02, 2005
*My hands are clapping* . Thank you for sticking to the integrity of your writing. UUUGGGHH. I don't see how a Inu/Kag/Sess triangle could ever develop. (Sess &Kag have no relationship with each other; he's just indifferent to her like to everyone else. Rin seems to be his only exception). This is SO evident in the anime and the movies...

But to each his own. I am just glad that you don't intend to ruin THIS great plot with that horror !!

I am glad that you are bent on making Rin a little more emotionally independent from Sess (I remember commenting about her being away from his "emotional sphere", she needs that to mature psychologically).

She should love him of her own free will rather than love him because he saved her life. (Hey, here is an idea... in order to level the playing field, why can't Rin save his life one of these days ?).

From what I gathered that you've written about Sess, I don't think he's the type who hankers after that kind of crippling, dependent relationship with her.

I am a little disappointed that this particular story will not see Sess/Rin any more than just at the "petting" stage. Right now, it seems so paternalistic, don't you think !!!!????!! (Hhhmmmnn, although, I must admit that sleeping in the same bed like what they are doing kind of mutually excluded this being a familial one).

The emotional love that binds these two together is so evident, but to translate that to a more physical love, is that difficult to imagine ?
Of course, she would have to be a little bit older, otherwise that would ALSO be sick, heh ?..:-).

Your writing style/grammatics is top-notched. Keep it up.

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From ANON - morlana on September 30, 2005
good luck on your capstone work. I know how those semesters do, I have another one coming up. 1. for Associates Degree another for Bachelor's Degree.
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From ANON - beccapatty on September 28, 2005
awesome awesome story I jus read found this story and read the first chapter up to here! Its really really good! i love the Lil pack Inu, Sess, Kagome and rin all have together! its jus sooo cutee.. and Kagome Sess and INu all get along gr8 u should have Kagome become both their mates.. i mean their brother's they can share.. hehe Kag/Sess/Inu is my favorite pairing.. then Rin can be one of their pups along with Shippo.. Besides Kagome seems to feel just as protected around Sess as she does with Inu and she did say that one line "U'll make one girl very happy someday" I mean come on who Wouldn't want the 2 of em as mates? u could put an interesting twist in the story like In order for Kagome to survive a certain experience she needed more power and Sess was the one with her so they mate also cuz they have feelings toward eachother.. and kagome's miko powers could give Sess his arm back. thatd be awesome and it'd be cooler if when/if he got his arm back Rins amulet magically changed with him having his arm as well! anyways plzzz keep up the excellent work and plz update soon! I can't wait!
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From ANON - Zincpaw on September 25, 2005
Hi. I can't stop laughing. I can see them now, "What have you been up to? You're covered in mud. Go take a bath right this instant!" The great dog brothers in a mud fight. I guess they couldn't wait for the snow. I should have stopped laughing by now. I review next time when I'm in a saner state of mind, aka more sleep. Walking off still laughing. Zincpaw.
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From ANON - New Fan on September 24, 2005
I absolutely loved this chapter. I think that was missing both brothers lives.
But, its funny it had to take something that drastic to get Sess to talk. Is Sess
worry for Rin now that she can be a potential target or can he be intimidated by
her power? Please update soon. Sorry for the late responds I was busy with school.
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From ANON - littleolmee on September 23, 2005
at last i finally get to read again! great chapters, just read the chapter with the mud fight and had to stop to review to that one. my ghosh that was the funniest thing i've read in awhile! love how inu got sessh to fight with him in the mud! inu caring so much about rin was very sweet. just wondering why sessh wouldn't realize that inu see rin as someone he is trying to protect, he already has several times. does sessh just not realize it is his instincts that makes him want to help? well off to read somemore!
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From ANON - Miroku2235 on September 22, 2005
Yay! You updated! Great chapter. At first I thought the Grolims had messed with Sesshy's mind the way he attacked Inuyasha. I loved the way you played this chapter out, they really had some pent-up aggression to let out. I especially loved the mudfight, that was sheer genius. *claps loudly* I especially loved what Sesshy said last, "Inuyasha, shut up." Good going! Update soon!
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From ANON - leyley on September 22, 2005
The mud fight priceless. Great story can't wait for thenext chapter.
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From ANON - Dimepieceleo on September 20, 2005
Gommen I have been so busy but I was able to read your last chapter and again FLAWLESS
I love THIS chapter even more and the mud fight was just to sweet* smirks* to compare
I think this is your best inu- sesshy chapter yet
Don't get me wrong the chapter with him cmforting inuyasha was so emotional but this one
showed inuyasha giving comfort and shows the depth of sesshy's trust in yasha to first
continue to fight then give in and confide in him and show that he trusts him with not just his life but his emotions
OK OK ENOUGH ALREADY AS ALWAYS LOVE IT AND CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT INSALLMENT
KEEP UP THE WORK YOU ARE TRULY GIFTED
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From ANON - SteffanyHrtsyew on September 19, 2005
I Love your story!! I love the fact that you have such a good plot along with comedy and love scenes. I have no ability to write like that. Im no good with details. But thats besides the point. I feel bad for Inu having to put up with all of Kagomes thinking. And I'm looking foward for when Koga comes along. Oh and Kudos for the whip stuff!!!!
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From ANON - SP777 on September 18, 2005
First of all, Happy Belated 'yes-it-is-over-12-days-for-me-to-be-mentioning-this' Birthday!!!

Next, I'm glad we FINALLY got to Rin's lesson...can't wait to see how you utilize her blue energy whip as a weapon in the future and I do hope she gets over her submissiveness.

I must admit being gone a long time from reading this story, you have to rack your brains trying to figure out...remember...who the heck is who again, especially if you're not familiar with the story arc of the Edding's series.

Now when we get to the fight with Inuyasha & Kouga, which I KNOW will happen considering Kouga's hard-headedness, you gotta come with it. :-]

Lastly, I'm not sure if you've seen the 3rd Inuyasha movie, but it just occured to me WHY Sesshoumaru can't use Tetsuaiga/Tessaiga....the party line is because he is a Full demon or just a demon per se and with 'Yasha being half demon, he can. Well if that was the case, their father who IS a full demon would have NEVER been able to wield it at all to protect Inuyasha's mother. No, it's all has to do about are you willing to 'protect' the ones around you, in order for the sword to be used..and that is something Sesshoumaru has yet to learn or is willing to learn.

NOW, with all that said...with Sesshoumaru protective of Kagome...and him a 'little' acceptive of the Inu gang, maybe in the far future that could be an idea you could use. It's just an idea I thought about out of the blue. It's all up to you how you do your story.

Anyway, nuff said...and welcome back.
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From ANON - IamReven on September 13, 2005
I'm still here!! I haven't had a chance to review in forever, and then with the hurricane, things have been really crazy. I love the whole thing with Poledra training Rin. She understands Rin and Sessy's relationship better than the other sorcerers, and is better equipped to handle the "Big Dog." Rin does need a little more backbone. Maybe if she hangs out a little more with Kagome, she won't be as shy. I keep forgetting the diferences in her and the other female characters. Even Sango, who was raised in the same culture is not as submissive, but she has the training and the status as a warrior behind her. Maybe if Rin pays more attention to how Poledra, C'Nedra, and Polgara act towards the men, she will be able to find an acceptable medium, allowing her to depend on herself and her power a little more instead of being so dependent (physically and emotionally) on Sessy.

I also like the way that Inuyasha and Kagome have both grown since they've become mates. Writing Kagome's musing may have been tough, but it came out beautifully, showing her growing understanding of what she is involved in as his mate. On the same note, Inuyasha, having almost killed her, is coming to terms with the fact that forgiving himself is as much an aspect of protecting her as any physical defense.

One more thing, (I know, this is probably the longest review in history!) the MirokuSango romance is coming along nicely. You've managed to build a believable scenerio without damaging either character's integrity. I LOVED the pig in Rakad. I didn't pull out my copies of the Mallorean yet, but I have to ask--was it Garion's pig from earlier? I wonder what happened to the old man! I like it when you throw in the little tidbits from the Edding's series. Do you plan on expanding on any of the people from that series? I adore Garion and Zaketh and would like to see some pov from either of them. Keep the chappies coming !!!
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From ANON - leyley on September 12, 2005
I started reading this story because I love Inuyasha Kagome fics. Sometimes I would get a little lost, or it would seem the story was getting kind of slow. But I have throughly enjoyed this fic. Just wanted to know is Ses and Rin supposed to become mates or something like that? because well ew, she is little, just turned twelve, and he has raised her as almost as a daughter. Just wondered. Anyway the story has been great just thought I would let you know.
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From ANON - inuyashaloverr on September 12, 2005
HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY TO YA!
And damn, I forgot about Pol having 'other" remidites ( did i spell that right?). Ah well. I do like pups tho. Im just a hapless romantic, so you have to forgive me. An am so glad for the update. keep it up, and thanx for the excellent writing.
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