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Reviews for Defining Torture

By : CoffeeGyrl
  • From ANON - PoisonAngel7 on March 18, 2005
    I like!!! I could see a story like this ending at this point, but I really hope you are continuing it. The corruption or attempted corruption of Kohaku is such an interesting prospect. Most stories are done from the perspective of the Inuyasha group even when "the bad guys" are brought in they are usually seen through the eyes of at least one of the other characters. I think that is another reason this story is so unique.

    In other thoughts, I think you should jump on Atropa's round robin (that is the actual name of the story if you look for it). I just wrote chapter three and I would love to see where you would take the story from there. I'm glad you reviewed my stories, or I probably never would have noticed this story. I don't mean that as an insult. I just don't read Inuyasha as much as I used to so it would have been easy to miss.

    Anyway, I love the story. And, wow, you are fast with the updates!
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  • From ANON - Coffee Gyrl on March 18, 2005
    THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR ALL THE REVIEWS I LOVE YOU PEOPLE!!!!!! A quick note about Nightshade and Belladonna flowers they are actually of the same family of flowers and are both very toxic. Nightshade was used in worship of Baccuss in orgies and Belladonna is used in nerve gas even today. I figured since she smells like Naraku you know it's gotta be deadly. But since even she dosen't like the stench of his miasma then it must have it's own odor.

    A interesting web site on these poisonous flowers is http://www.nopotato.com/What%20are%20Nightshade%20Plants.htm

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  • From ANON - PoisonAngel7 on March 18, 2005
    Ooooh! I just read chapter 2 and I'll be hitting 3 in just a moment. I really like your insights into the characters. You have put a lot of thought into their motivations and personalities and it is reflected in the story making it deeper than just some fun smuttiness. However, it is still fun and it is still smutty which is highly enjoyable. There were many details I admired like the way you compared her scent to Nightshade and Belladonna. I find many authors, myself included, using sakura or jasmine. It isn't that there is anything wrong with that, but I wanted to used this point to illustrate that I find your use of description to be original and creative. Ok, on to chapter 3.
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  • From ANON - Kiki Ortega on March 18, 2005
    Wonderfully done. I mean, you turned impossible to highly believable in just a few chapters. Even your characterization of Naraku was highly accurate. It is just like him to want to kill two birds with one stone. He tried it with Inuyasha and Kikyo, though sadly (at least to him) it failed when Kagome came back (in the sense that Kikyo's soul recides in her) and released InuYasha after a mere fifty years. That only worked temporarly for him. His plans also backfired when he sent that demon exterminator to attack Inuyasha and she ended joining their little group. BUT NOW.... he finally had both birds die: Kagura begged, and his puppet is somehow now a little tainted.


    Wouldn't mind reading more from you.... this was amazing.
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  • From Atropa on March 18, 2005
    Ahhh, truly awsome story...
    More stories like this one is needed :) Odd pairings... yeah.. more of those please...
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  • From ANON - PoisonAngel7 on March 16, 2005
    Oh, that was a delicious beginning! Your writing is very good and it sounds like this is going to be an intensely enjoyable story. I wonder if Naraku had any inkling of what he was unleashing when he set this plan in motion! And if this is to be torture does that mean he will only tease her with no release? I guess I'll have to find wait until you update to know that.
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  • From ANON - Rob on March 16, 2005
    Please update soon. I love it!
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  • From ANON - Kiki Ortega on March 16, 2005
    Hm... so... what happens next? Can't wait for your update. This is really good.
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  • From ANON - whirleeq on March 16, 2005
    Kohaku & Kagura... *snicker* I love the premise! Ooooh boy! Don't worry too much about the age thing - I think in the manga he is like, 13 or so... and we all know that 13 year old boys are not so very innocent. Heck, 13 year old GIRLS are not so very innocent...

    Wow, well that's definately a hook and something very different, which is refreshing. Most of the stuff around here is the same Kag/Inu or Kag/Sesshy, or Sess/Rin.

    I love Kagura, personally... I wonder what her reaction to the 'torture' is going to be... *grin* Kohaku may be young, but he is a cutie - especially with that lightly freckled nose.

    Only thing is you might want to check the formatting a little, since the words seem to wrap a little funny. Other than that, good job girl, and it'll be interesting to see where you are going with this. I can't wait. (I'm such a hentai!)

    --julie

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  • From Atropa on March 16, 2005
    Now this will prove interesting :)
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