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Reviews for I hate you/I love you

By : sutekii
  • From ANON - ME on May 09, 2005
    I dont think i like ur dad i want to read more about what is going to happen please update soon and dont let parents get in the way please UPDATE
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  • From ANON - bettychan on May 07, 2005
    That chapter was much, much better. It was easier to read, therefore more enjoyable. Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - subjunctivity on May 07, 2005
    No, don't delete the story. You have reviewers, which means that you've kept people interested in your fiction. It means they care about it--and that's a good thing!
    What you've been getting is constructive criticism, but no flames (unless you've deleted them). These reviewers want your story to become better, to have it be easier to read. You should listen to their ideas and maybe get a beta reader or someone to help you with grammar. Nobody has complained about content (except fighting), and that's what matters.
    On the other hand, unless you're foreign or with some sort of spelling disability, you cannnot be 18 years old. While I'm sure that many authors here are not, some of them manage to produce the idea that they are of proper age. You should do that too or go elsewhere. Your fiction as of now wouldn't be taken off FanFiction.net (http://www.fanfiction.net). Go there unless it will soon be rated R or NC-17. Also to produce the idea that you're 18, use a spelling and grammar checker. This is critical! if you have Microsoft Word 97 or later, you have a good spell/grammar check utility. If you don't have it or an equivalent, get OpenOffice (http://www.openoffice.org) for free.
    I'd be willing to beta read your fiction for you! I won't say anything mean or rude, just give suggestions and correct spelling and grammar. Don't let these people discourage you or rush you. It's your fiction. Just write for yourself and improve for your readers.
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  • From ANON - Jane on May 07, 2005
    Why would you want to delete your story? It's really good!!
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  • From ANON - bettychan on May 07, 2005
    This story does show some potential. However, would it hurt you to show a little more attention to detail? And pay a little more attention to spelling and grammer? Every time a character speaks should be a new paragraph. Capitalization wouldn't hurt when a proper name is used, or when a new sentence begins.
    I realize that fanfiction is for fun, but a little attention to the detail wouldn't hurt.
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  • From ANON - AHHHHHHHHHHH on May 06, 2005
    ah you wouldnt dare delete this story you cant you cant you cant i wont let you i think your story is good all i have to say is make the chapters longer and i will read it even if you dont but i want to know what you plan on doing to poor inuyasha and kagome dont listen to other people i want to read the rest of this story UPDATE PLEASE!
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  • From ANON - Stephanie on May 06, 2005
    Don't delete the story fool!
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  • From ANON - Shauna on May 06, 2005
    Ummm.....you have the worst spelling I have ever seen! Do you know what capital letters are? I mean maybe there's potential for this fic, but to make it really good you have to improve your spelling and your grammar. Just out of curiosity what grade are you in? Because I know you can't be 18! I mean come on! What 18 year old spells like that!? Don't take this as a flame. Its constructive criticism. It would behoove you to take some time a learn to spell.
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  • From ANON - kit on May 04, 2005
    longer and with more details... change some of the scenes, they dont need to fight all the time... but the plot is still ok so work on those and you'll have a decent story
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  • From ANON - Kit on May 03, 2005
    Now there are a few big things every writer needs to do... 1. DETAILS, they make or break a story so try to use them to your advantage. with details the length of the story usually improves, so try to make the story longer. I think you need to revise the beginning cuz you just suddenly start out of the blue, the characters could be 10 for all we know... so elaborate and have fun. But I think you have a good plot just add details and it'll improve.
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  • From ANON - blaze on April 30, 2005
    good story intersting plot but i think u have to make ur chapters a bit longer so than u dont have to update every day not that i would object so longer chapters and UPDATE SOON!
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  • From ANON - mr.brightside on April 29, 2005
    im loving it so far keep going especialy when kikyo and kagome started fighting bye *starts dancing*
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  • From ANON - Twilight on April 28, 2005
    yes yes you should keep going it sounds good plez keep going
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