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By : Rinseternalsoul

From ANON - catwoman316 on July 26, 2005
Wow, you updated quickly! God, what a chapter!!! I loved it! How many chapters will this story have? Is Sess really going to torture Naraku? I hope he will, and after forcefeeding Naraku his own cock, Sess and Kags can live peacefully together! ^_^
God, what a story!!! You do such a great job! Update!!!

Ja Ne!
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From ANON - bd84 on July 26, 2005
you know its quite creepy on how well you managed to crawl into Narakus mind and pull the evil from him. although it does make for a great story :) please keep updating! i love to come here and see a new chapter added! i cant wait to see what happens when Kagome wakes up again! :D
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From ANON - Paris on July 25, 2005
Still laughing over the rooster thing--0u la la. Thanks for the heads up on the updates! I was completely expecting something way worse to happen when it came to Kagome standing up for Sesshoumaru-- it's like Kagome was reading my mind when she was asking if this was supposed to be torture/punishment, hahahaha. Very hot. Very nicely done. And perhaps this story really isn't a comedy, but I do believe that "One passed out miko. One pissed off taiyoukai. One sexually frustrated demoness, and one big white puddle of ogre semen. A very fruitful day." had me laughing hysterically, hahaha. I don't really know why-- it just did. Maybe the part that really got me was the "Big white puddle of ogre semen." If you give me some time I'm sure I could make another great mastercard commercial. Some may not find it as funny as we do, hahaha. Kagura was also funny, te he he, extremely hot and bothered but won't touch the orge, hahaha. Chapter 7 was just as amazing as the last, and you completely took me by surprise once again! I was expecting Inuyasha to catch Kagome betraying him physically, but instead it was more of the emotional betrayal. Still, it was sweet and enduring to see Sesshoumaru and Kagome bahaving like that together-- cannot wait for more!!!!! I have a feeling that Sesshoumaru is going to bring down his fist like the wrath of god upon Naraku. Take care my favorite Hentai sister! ---Paris
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From ANON - Deadlyteardrops on July 25, 2005
dang! I'm so hooked up into this fic that I can't wait the next chapter! Please update soon! I'm a big fan of yours and I wanna read more!!! Oh! Why don't you post this one at Single Spark where your other fics are?

ja ne!

DT
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From ANON - hiro on July 25, 2005
oh goodie! an update.

Let me see if I can word this correctly and you can tell me if you got what I tried to comment. Dont get me wrong It was a good chapter, well we cant always get sick, beautiful smut like that can we? :p Being an author myself I know that at some point the story line has to continue or it would just be pointless, but there is a little something missing in this last chapter. I had all the right explanations and reaction but the feel to it was a little cold and even though it had as I said, the right emotions and at the right time, it wasnt about the characters but more about you as a person or being that finds oneself inside the actual story. What Im trying to say, and am not havin any luck, is that I needed a little more YOU, the author, the mind, the psychology, the twirl, swirl... the way a mind changes, the little web it spins. You know? All and all right on the mark of what Sess, Kag, Inu, and the rest of the gang felt rushed through their minds, but too little of Naraku. Yeah sure he was enjoying every minute of it but not verbalizing it, YOU were the one doing that. Probably if you would have let him express himself the way HE wanted it to maybe he would have had a more active role in THIS chapter. But thats jus my opinion.

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On another note. You can do whatever you want... if only I was your slave, but in this little sick world of mine IM MASTER!
toodles ;p
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From ANON - FayeMegan on July 25, 2005
wow! I can't wait to see what happens next! I hope Kags and sess can be happy and that Inu will accept them! please update soon! I love this story!!!!!
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From swasdiva on July 24, 2005
While I do tend to go overboard on the EXCLAMATION POINTS (woops, sorry! I'm having trouble controlling THE VOLUME OF MY VOICE!) I just can't help it when it comes to your fics! Every chapter is up/down/up/down/so-much-angsty-edge-of-your-seat-emotion that I can hardly STAND it! This chapter especially...Rin, there were literally times I nearly feel off my chair because I was so incredibly distraught over what Inuyasha was going to do when he found Sesshy and Kags, and really, I was scared over what he was going to find. I mean, who knew if they were going to be in the middle of doin' it or something! ACK! Awkward! Now they're free, but how much more torture do they face just from having to relive and overcome that nightmare? How are the Inu-tachi going to cope? And how the hell is Naraku goin' down?? The BASTARD! I hope Sesshoumaru makes a list of 'slow, painful death' methods and keeps it handy, because I'm ready to see the hell-spawn fry. And, oh, if they have time for more smutt (of course this isn't pure smutt, it's smutt with healing intent, positive love smutt) then yay! I adore this fic, Rin. I love smutt, dark smutt in particular, and this is pure erotic joy combined with your signature amazing storytelling skills. It's dark, corrupt, but compelling. Please update soon!
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From ANON - SilentDeath on July 24, 2005
I am very honored that I inspired this wonderful, yes I say wonderful, fic! I am actually blushing like mad right now! You have honored me greatly with this and all I have to say is that I can only be humbled. You work is fantastic and I love every single one of them. I was strung to your work with your first fic, The Unknown Warrior. You imagination is fantastic and I just cant compare to it. I have wonderful stories to enjoy and this one is all the better. Of all I must say that you have out done yourself on this one. Keep up the Fantastic work!!!!!
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From ANON - Ookami K on July 22, 2005
Wow oh wow! I loved the chapter so hard core..... I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work....
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From YoukaiObsessed on July 22, 2005
*Overheats... collapses... falls off chair* Good gravy!! That was beyond hot!! *shifty eyes* Dayum, I can barely think of anything to write. I keep seeing images of the dark hottie Naraku in my hentaified overheated mind. I think my eyes orgasmed at some point. *snicker* Great chapter, flowed beautifully!!
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From ANON - Ashley on July 22, 2005
*Hugs you* I love you O_O, jk but I do love your story. UPDATE SOON!
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From swasdiva on July 22, 2005
HOW HAVE I NEVER READ THIS FIC BEFORE NOW?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!??!??!!? Rin, as if I didn't already adore every fic you post on Single Spark, now I stumble across this disturbingly erotic smutt-fest of indescribable wantoness!!!!!!!!! WHAT A FIC!!!!!!!!!! This is, hands down (where, I wonder? *snigger*), the GREATEST, most darkly HOTTTT lemon I've EVER READ. Crapity-crap! Need cold shower now. Need a boyfriend or at least a hot man in my room now. Need a 'Do-Not-Disturb' sign NOW!!!!!! HO-LY CRAP!!!!!! Geez, Rin....good lord this fic is dark. Good LORD this fic is hot. My drool bucket has been officially upgraded to an olympic sized pool. Knights of Columbus, I ADORE THIS HENTAI WORK OF ART!!!!!!!

Oh yeah, and please, update soon! ^_^
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From ANON - hiro on July 22, 2005
Damn! Im never ever dissapointed with you. pls update. I know its sick but after this chapter me, myself and a friend are going to have a little chat! YYYYYYYYYYYEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You continue torture, I will faithfully read and review!
Your new slave I mean fan
hiro
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From ANON - Oniko on July 21, 2005
Nice chapter.

Sadly though I have more to say this time about your response to my previous review.

'The moon rises daily where I live...' First of all, there is no need to be so condescending. Your story is interesting and engaging but your unusual usage of the word detracts from the story. Something most authors consider a bad thing as the reader, stops reading to try to decipher what was written. I know you mentioned that you wanted no flames at the beginning of the story, you should have also noted that you weren't interested in creative criticism if you are only going to defend your reasons rather then taking the advice in the spirit that it was meant. Advice, to take or ignore, nothing more.

'Actually I said �moon risings� once. Moon cycles... moon up to moon down.' To most everyone else in the world 'Moon cycles' usually refer to the lunar cycle. In fact many writers use the term moon to simply mean a month's time, or one lunar cycle. I didn't catch the 'moon risings' reference, in fact if you hadn't had a character to translate eight moons to eight days, I would still be confused about your timeline. And this isn't really something I want to be thinking about when I came to read a good smutfic.

Again, I am just trying to be helpful. Please feel free to continue the discussion in e-mail, or not. Looking forward to your next chapter. :)

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From ANON - BeautifulSilentDeath on July 21, 2005
Haha! I loved this one. Damn, you have beaten me to what I am going to write in my story. though I am not going to have a threesome, it will have toys involved. *Rubs her hands in perverted delight* I love lemony smut. And you just write the best!
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