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Reviews for *FINNISHED* Inu yasha sexy sex dream (revewe pleas

By : tomoelover
  • From vikikibouki on June 21, 2007
    Dude, I don't wanna be a bitch, AND I sure as hell don't wanna flame you, but if you're gonna write, PLEASE! WRITE SOMETHING DECENT! Check your spelling! I'm a dork when it comes to translating some of the stuff I write from French to English, but that's why I got HELP! A DICTIONARY? It comes in REAL handy, believe me.

    Instead of wasting your time(and here I AM BITCHING) and ours, take YOUR FREAKING TIME and please, don't waste ours. We all love to read, but this ISN'T our full time jobs. Be more CAREFUL!
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  • From ANON - Unknown on July 07, 2005
    I thought I was a writer! -gasps- But THIS?!
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  • From ANON - Gyousei on July 06, 2005
    I think this is cute and funny, well done for it not being your first language!!!!
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  • From ANON - tomoelover on July 05, 2005
    i cannot spell and much sorry for it
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  • From ANON - Jadewitch on July 04, 2005
    Damn, I thought this site was for adults, you sure aren't writing like one. I hate to flame people but this is NOT writing. Please consider this constructive criticism. You need so much help though, this is going to sound like a flame when it really isn't.

    This thing is not a story, it's not even a fic, I don't know what this is. It makes no sense and its only 2 or 3 sentences (at least I think they're supposed to be sentences, but they don't look like it). Please, for all our sakes, pay attention in your English classes and read a lot of books before you attempt to write again. Just because you have a great idea for a story doesn't make you a writer, even by the relaxed standards of fanfics. Writing is a skill and a talent, like drawing or singing, and your not showing any yet.

    And what is up with that title? "Sexy sex dream"? That's like if somebody asked you, "what does sex feel like?" and you answered, "Sexy!" Duh. It makes you sound a lot less intelligent than I hope you are. Jeez, even just eliminating one of the "sex" words would have been an improvement.

    If you want adults to read and like your story, you have to at least be able to write like someone who might be old enough to visit this site. I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but maybe you are not cut out to be a writer. If you try hard, and practice, and read a lot of other things to get an idea of what real writers do (books, newspapers, magazines, anything) you might be able to improve, but you have to put the work into it. It takes a long time too, this is not something you can just churn out overnight. The best writers never stop learning and improving.

    If you still want to write, buy yourself a thesaurus and a dictionary first. You can get them cheap if you buy paperbacks. They will be your best little friends, especially the thesaurus. It will give you a dozen different cool-sounding ways to say "sexy", all of which mean the same thing, and will make you sound smart. Like "Inuyasha's Sensual Reverie"- that means "sexy dream". But you should find your own phrase. Don't be lazy, use your creativity and come up with your own words. You could use mine of course, but then everyone will know I wrote it and not you. I love my thesaurus.

    Next, read a lot of books. And fics too. Read everything you can get your hands on, you will develop a sense of what is good and what isn't. And I believe I already mentioned English class. The rest is up to you.

    Good luck, and if you are still serious about writing, you will have to work very hard, all of us do. If this is too much work for you, that's fine too- just find yourself a new hobby you can be passionate about.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 04, 2005
    These are extremly short chapters in fact, I can read them in less than 2 minutes. If you want to make a real story, you have to really put yourself into it and write! Readers reveiw more if you write longer (much much longer in your case) and please check your spelling and grammer! All I'm seeing is three to four sentences of who-knows-what and it's over! I don't like flaming people and I never will please take this advice and rewrite this! You've got a nice plan going on all you need to do is to make much longer chapters and check your spelling and grammer! I hope you're reading this and all those other people who decide to post up a story with bad spelling and grammer and is extremly short! In my case, you should change your title into ' *REVISED* Inuyasha sexy sex dream' and people will come and read and I will be sure to leave another comment once you've revised and rewritten it! ^_^

    D.I.
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  • From ANON - bob on July 04, 2005
    OH MY GOD AND ALL THAT IS HOLY WHAT THE HELL IS YOUR PROBLEM?!?!?! your spelling and grammer suck and your chapters are about 3 sentences long at best do the world a favor and shoot yourself in the head
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  • From ANON - ... on July 04, 2005
    What the HELL was that? You're spelling isn't bad...it's garbled to the point of not being words. You have no story. Basically, as far as I can piece it together, you wrote about...what the hell did you write about? This isn't a story. It's crap.
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  • From on July 03, 2005
    This story SUCKS ASS!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - ldymoonluvsinuyasha (not logged on) on July 03, 2005
    Heehee, these were the quickest chapters I've ever read I believe. These peeps really get to the point. That's what I'm talking abuot, you do your thing tomoe. :D
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