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By : Aleke

From ANON - Frimm on July 28, 2005
here.
*hands you a package of concentrated caffine and a bag of cheetos*
since you obviously need all the help you can get.....
now UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!!!!!!!!!
i'm DYING here.
if you don't update, i will come over there and cut off all your toes, then comb your brain for the remainder of this story, force you to update using ver ver painful methods, then once it's done, chop you into little pieces that i shall then devour with bloodthirsty intensity.

i'm sorry, that happens sometimes, my cannibalistic urges are unsuppressable when i feel intense emotions....
yes, that's right... i luvre your story, it's quite exactly how i would imagine a sesshy/rin pairing. of course, if i had my way they wouldn't be together in the first place buuuut....
well, almost exactly.
first off, this is just constructive critisizim (i don't know how to spell so shush) so please don't take it as a flame!
*pleads down on bended knees*
okay:
1. wouldn't seshy have found rin already? i mean, if he could still smell her at the burned up and mangled corpse of the hut she first stayed in, it should be no problem for him to follow the scent, even if she went through water, because it would always emerge on the other side (her scent). and with seshy's lovely nose, it should be no problem for him to do that.
also, after he met up with inu, and discovered rin's scent on him, couldn't he have just followed inu scent back to where rin was staying? he's pretty smart, and even with him being in his little snitty state, he could have easily firgured that one out.

2. IF rin did get pregnant, i don't think she would run away, because she doesn't really fear Sesshy at all. BUT she would feel the instinct to protect her pups. (yes i KNOW i'm contradicting myself, but deal.) so, if she left the castle, i think she wouldn't go tooo far, out of smelling range..but not very far. i think she would probably ask sesshy what he would do if he had hanyou pups, she's too smart to just spring it on him, and depending on his reaction, she would decide what to do. But sesshy wass at war and she had no way of telling wether kimoko (or whatever her name was...sorry she was a biatch so i forgot it) had died or not. so wouldn't she have done the safest thing for her pups? maybe, but she also loves sesshy remember. so i still think would have ran away, but would have tried to contact sesshy none the less.

3. would sesshy get rin pregnant at all? would he be careless enough to do that, when he KNEW he had a mate, and he's a pretty honorable guy, so i don't think he would risk getting rin pregnant in the event he was not able to dispose of kim-something. and would he risk having rin killed, if kim-something found out she bore sesshy's children? i don't think so. but he was pretty uncontained when he made love to her, so would these thoughts be going through his head anyways? maybe not, maybe it was just spur of the moment. but seshy's not very spur of the moment, but then again, it was rin who initiated the sex in the first place. well, not exactly, but you know what i mean.

4. and just to confuse you, i will contradict myself once again, because i am a cruel and evil person. but if seshy loved rin, wouldn't he have just killed kim-something anyways, as soon as the war was over? so wouldn't he not have to worry at all about making rin his mate or getting her pregnant, since he was planing to do away with the kim person anyways?

ah yes...it's right about now when people start to come after me with knives and other sharp things...
but please, spare me at least until you finish your story, or untill i come over and force you to finish.
which reminds me, you have a week to update before my warning is officially in effect. i'm going on vacation, so i better see a new chapter by the time i get back.

and just in case my threatning didn't work, i will shower you with praise and attention, so your guilty conciense will not allow you to not update asap.
so let the compliments begin:
it's really hard to come by such a great story, with just the right amount of love, tradgedy, adventure and comedy mixed in it. but when you do come across a story like that, it's impossible to put down. i have forsaken thousands of chores to read your story, and have undergone ages of nagging, but i still await an update, as a faithful loyal little puppy. with my big dogy eyes i praise your genius and story writing skills, and also give you my famous look to make you update. i love stories with actual plot, and not just mindless sex, especially when there is some huge obstacle keeping the two lovers apart. yes i know i sound spazy, but i am so no argument there.
*note- just so you know, all of the above is true. except the part about my eyes. unfortunately, i still am not able to make them do that look good enough to get me out of washing the dishes...
but it should be perfected enough to work on you, so just update already.

holy crap, this is a long review...
but i'm not finished, so hang in there.
first off, i have an idea as to how seshy would react to his pups..or rather, how he would react to the fact that there are half-breeds he must now father.
i think, that when he finally does find rin, he will of course meet the pups first, whom seshy will just knock aside, the pups being just worthless hanyous. of course, even though rin's scent is probably driving him full on nuts, i think he will still detect part of his scent on them. and of course, when he finds out that they are his pups, he will try to swallow hos pride and scorn, but not be enitrely succesful. of course, he will fool the pups for a while, but not rin, who will refuse him until he accepts them and promises never to harm them. Seshy, being unable to make that promise, will take out his rage on the pups, who will in turn, whup his ass.
thus earning them the long declined respect they were owed. and then they all live happily ever after, with only seshy's pride having been wounded severly.
please do not feel any obligation to use this idea, it's just off the top of my head and is probably nonsense in comparison to your brilliance.

so i will quit wasting your time while reading this, so you can get back to updating...
toodles for now,
Frimm
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From ANON - Cassie on July 26, 2005
Hi, I really love your fic I only wish that Sesshomaru will find Rin and the tiwns and tell her everything that has happened since she left and that he misses her and he loves her, and Rin tells him about why she left him and about the twins and introduce him to his pups and they get back together and be the family that they should have been in the first place..... Sesshomaru has suffered enough 2460 days without her voice, her smile her body and especially her love...... Please he has suffered greatly please make him happy again.... ^____________________^
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From ANON - Altari on July 26, 2005
A response to LordFluffysMate's review ;

It's not his tail (or at least, isn't supposed to be ! O_o). It's supposed to be a femmy decoration, since the character was created during the pretty boy period during the 90s in Japan (Malice Maizer, anyone?). I guess Takahashi herself isn't even sure what it's 'supposed' to be, but got inspiration from a feather boa. Tihehe....
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From ANON - REadER on July 25, 2005
Yes it is a yay moment ^.^ I'm sooo happy! But I'm sad for Sesshoumaru :-( *tear*
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From ANON - Ren on July 25, 2005
DAMN THIS COMPUTER TO HELL!!!!!!! DAMN THIS STUPID INTERNET, DAMN THIS WORLD FOR EVERYTHING THAT HARMS IT, DAMN EVERYTHING...well...not really...tee hee hee, but yea, I typed a review not too long ago but it was erased, so yeah, I'm pissed. GGRRRR ARGH, I just got home not to long ago, saying it again, damn it, and you see, I'm happy, getting new cool glasses that cost a lot of money and more, tee hee hee, so stupid and not tomention, I'm allergy free. So freakin glad for that, I don't know about you but I swear, little sisters are reincarnations of little devils that tell on you 24/7, 5 days a week, because weekend is break days for them...big sisters are obsessed, chatting, lazy, no talking back bitches...argh, they make my life hell, but I wouldn't trade them for the world. What I would do for them...oh wells.. it's nice to know someone understands my pain, I hate it all really, I do, people always tell me, you're too attacted to your family...blah, blah, blah, ten I say, 'Oh yea, at least, I'm not humping my girl/boyfriend every chance I get...'

Their face...princeless...tee hee hee, and it's so true too, I'vve been looking up information about Japanese traditional things, like archery, yeah baby! I love the bow and it's arrows, I'm going to shot my cousin in the ass when I grow older, one in each ass cheek, tee hee hee, weird like you. Tee hee hee, but yeah, I had fun though in my father's home, stayed up late, beated my sisters for the computer, literally with a stick, then we had a fist fight, which was too my horror because my fist of furies is so small...*hahahahaha*, but yea, I'll tell you this, they did not leave without 5 bruises on their body!! Yah for me! Then it was the ass slappin deal, where I didn't participate in, but then again some how got enrolled when they slapped by ass till it was blue, literally, where they get those hard ass man hands from I don't know... But yea, it was hilarious, ass slappin fun....*laughs her head off* I don't know about you, but I'll tell you this, I had a incredible time typing this over, tee hee hee, dont' drink ktoo much coffee. it's bad for you, I'm worried about you, so make sure you don't fall ill, or I'll be mad, and won't review...hmph. Oh yes...

Besides that though, I really liked your chapter, so what if it's not creative, I liked it still, you ARE my favorite author, so keep the great work coming, hopefully I'm not the last reviewer like last time, it was embarrassing, tee hee hee, I'm tell ya, those fights are hard to win, but when you do, the victory is like no other...I'm fine besides that, couple bruises, couldn't sit on my ass for a day or two, but it was fine after that, tee hee hee, oh yes, my sisters said hi, and don't put bad things in my head...but don't listen to them, their wackos themselves. Tee hee hee...
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From ANON - animegirl007 on July 25, 2005
Oh you are so E-V-I-L!!!!!!!! I can only once again say.....good chapter...but, what is Rin age???? if you have her and Sesshomaru together again....I would love for her to have another baby .....so he could watch the one grow up........please have them together.....PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - New Fan on July 25, 2005
I wonder what your next chapter will in tell. I can see how you can face writers block. One
of the things I can see in much later chapter is that Rin being kidnapp and Naraku gangs
three new enemies (in the form of her children and Sesshoumaru). To keep Sess busy for
another few years, let him be in a war or he was thrown into the list of wrong by Naraku. Update soon great chapter.
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From ANON - Vanessa on July 25, 2005
Hey I drawed them big as adults should I draw them like a small little boy and girl? Oh and they have ponytails like theire grandfather InoTaishou or Toga. I did make the little boy look like Sesshoumaru and I am still working on the girl. By the way great chapter. I love it!!! Inuyasha is such a wonderful uncle.
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From ANON - Dimepieceleo on July 25, 2005
I like this story but for one thing why are u jumping so many years so fast ? And why is sesshoumaru so slow that he can't find her he is full blooded he can smell for miles. And to do this it is no wonder he was the way he was.
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From ANON - hiro on July 25, 2005
Yay update! Cool chapter, keep up the good work.

When I say dont listen to them ever really, it isnt just the hair tips, people that tell you such things are most likely to tell you you can wear bright neon green with ruby red pants and that is really not right, believe me I saw this and was really tempted to ask her if her worst enemy helped her pick her clothes. Then I remembered that parents do that (alot!). I am a firm believer that parents though loving and with good intention are just like any other human being: vengful, hateful creatures capable of mass destruction just like politics the only thing is that they have mastered it. They doit from the inside out, starting with your selfconfidence then your fashion sense, so pls dont be a victim of other peoples parents (yes this are the people who coach your friends into saying things like dye your hair with kool-Aid) Other than that carry on my friend.
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From ANON - Altari on July 25, 2005
**claps and jumps up and down giddily** I haven't even read it yet! I'm so excited. Been waiting and waiting....
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From ANON - LordFluffysMate on July 25, 2005
well it's nice to kno you like my name!!! ^__^ i was haven't so many problems w/ my E-mail account at kiwibox that i've changed everything to the name LordFluffysMate and if you think bout it if Kouga and Many others can have tails then that thing on Sessys sholder it his tail!!! ^__^ well that was a great chapter keep up the good work and update again soon please?
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From ANON - Rawben on July 24, 2005
aww! find them sess!
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From ANON - Rawben on July 24, 2005
awww! find them sess!
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From ANON - Ren on July 17, 2005
OH MY GOD!!!! MY REIVEW FROM BEFORE, DAMN THIS COMPUTER TO HELL!!! DAMN IT ALL!!!! ARRRGGG, I TYPE A GOOD PARAGRAPH ONLY TO HAVE IT ERASED....*FIRE BUILDS IN HER EYES* I SWEAR...THIS COMPUTER IS SO GOING DOWN WHEN I'M FINISH. WELL, I ENJOYED THE CHAPTER, KEEP IT COMING, I'M STILL HERE, THOUGH LATE TO THE PARTY THIS TIME...SORRY, OUT OF TOWN, WAS BATTLING FOR THE COMPUTER. @_@ CRAZY BATTLE, FISTS, TEETH, CANINE AND ALL, ALLOWED, *SIGHS* SO MUCH BRUISES, ^_^ BUT I GOT A FEW GOOD SWINGS IN THERE TOO...^o^ HOHOHO, TAKE THAT EVIL SISTERS...*GLARES AT THEM* TEE HEE HEE. SORRY THIS IS GOING TO BE SHORT, MY SISTERS ALLOW ME TO STAY ON FOR A WHILE, BUT OTHER THAN THAT, I'M HAPPY TO READ THE UPDATE, TEE HEE HEE, MADE MY DAY. JA NE! KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK, STILL HERE AND ROOTING STILL!
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