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Reviews for Osuwari, Little Brother

By : HimeAndi
  • From ANON - YukitaChiyo-Sama on January 26, 2006
    UPDATE!!! please, please, please UPDATE NOW!!!!!!!!! this is hecka good I SO LOVE THIS FIC.... (all though Sesh is a bit of a bastard but thats to be expected, right XD).... and i want more chapters.... n i want more Sesh n Inu lovin XD... (so great)... so yeah UPDATE!!!!

    SEE YA's ^_^
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  • From ANON - Shadowdog85 on January 24, 2006
    I really like this story, I think it was writen very well. Please update soon, I want to know what happens next. Does Inuyasha give into his brother? Does Sesshoumaru help ease his brother's fears? Will Kagome and the others catch up with the brothers? Will Inuyasha tell Sesshoumaru what he was told about sex in the past? Please write more, I got to know!
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  • From ANON - YukitaChiyo-Sama on January 16, 2006
    YOU MUST UPDATE NOW!!! i wanna know what happenes next its buggin me n i must know so update real soon, please.... UPDATE!... anyhoo... really good fic i absolutly love it n i want more... so yeah... that means you must update... now.... this very second... okay okay just kidding but PLEASE do update soon... well... SEE YA's
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  • From ANON - Criea on December 16, 2005
    Very good, I hope you write some more chapters soon. ^_^
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  • From ANON - Go Elsewhere on November 27, 2005
    This is really cool! I hope you update it soon! I'm loving every last bit of this story!
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  • From ANON - Elric Maxwell on November 23, 2005
    Awww...poor Inuyasha and Sesshie! I like where this is going. Maybe they'll understand each other more, and perhaps something will happen. ^_- More, please!!! EM
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  • From ANON - Cricket on November 20, 2005
    i really like this story and would love to read more. pleas update. i like the way u keep the charicters in chariter, well done
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  • From ANON - sonya on November 20, 2005
    OMG this fan fic is TERRIFIC!!! I stayed up all night reading it. The sex was totally HOT and the story as a whole was exceptionally well-written. More please! You have got to keep going with this. It really is excellent and I want to see where the plot line goes (and read more lemon scenes like this one). By far the best and most all-around captivating fanfic I've read in ages. Great character development, exposition, narrative, smut scenes - even your grammar / spelling was a huge cut above the usual! Great job!
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 14, 2005
    Cool! A bit strange that he could get so much power out of the rosary, but still a cool and original idea!

    Can't wait for the next chapter to come up! Keep it up!
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  • From vbollman on October 24, 2005
    Wonderful. The confusion that's evadant in both brothers is amazing. I can't wait to find out how this finishes.
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  • From ANON - kiara on October 23, 2005
    Interesting plot! Wonderful writing! Can't wait to read the next chapters!
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  • From ANON - cricket on October 19, 2005
    I really enjoyed it. i cant wait for the next chapter
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  • From ANON - AmberWaves on October 04, 2005
    Your mechanics are, for the most part, sound. I did see a few incidents of homonym confusion ("who's" when it should have been "whose", etc.), but overall, good work with that. You did a fine job of finding a balance of describing the setting so we had an idea of where they were without turning the narrative into a travelogue. Blocking was decent as well.

    However, I did identify some issues that shook me out of the fragile suspension of disbelief required to handle an Inu/Sess story.

    1. Sesshoumaru's touch on Inuyasha's ears was the most gentle since his mother had died? Kagome fondled his ears, and I have trouble believing she was all rough and yanking on them.

    2. It is jarring to have Inuyasha so upset over what his brother has done to him, and then follow that nauseous sentiment up with a "spark of interest" caveat. Being kidnapped and raped by your brother is not generally something that sane people-- and for all his shortcomings, Inuyasha *is* sane-- are going to come to enjoy. It is far too early in the story to plead Stockholm syndrome on I's part, too.

    3. In chapter 4, you have Sesshoumaru command Inuyasha to sit, yet I. doesn't crash to the ground at the use of the word. In an earlier chapter, however, you made a point of I. tumbling down when S. said it by accident. Continuity failure.

    4. It doesn't make sense to have Sesshoumaru "faintly disgusted" to be thought a rapist when when he really *is* a rapist. Being forced to provide oral sex is rape just as much as being penetrated genitally. Unless you're planning on including a scene later on where he's confronted by Inuyasha's assertion of this and must therefore adjust and, one hopes, regret the import of his actions-- which I doubt-- then it doesn't really work.
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  • From ANON - venus on September 29, 2005
    oh!!! i so totally want to continue reading this fic! i hope u update soon!!!!!!!

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  • From ANON - Thor on September 26, 2005
    WOW THIS IS AWESOME! I can't wait for more! I love the guilty-Sesshomaru...it makes my heart hurt --cries-- I hope InuYasha gets really humiliated by Fluffy-chan, then Fluffy feels SO guilty, he becomes like the nicest person or whatever...hehe, I'd rather read it your way tho, what you have planned...that's WAY more exciting than MY way! AHHH! Can't wait for MOOOOOOOORE!
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