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Reviews for In Under Deep

By : BeautifulSilentDeath
  • From ANON - lost child on August 08, 2005
    awesome, just a really cool chapter. go to a family reunion and come back to a great chapter. Keep up the great work and update again soon
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  • From ANON - Subaru on August 08, 2005
    Those ass cracks! They tried to kill an innocent goldfish! Anyway.....Update soon^_^
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  • From ANON - Laini on August 07, 2005
    well it is new ill give ya that..but i am interested.update A.S.A.P plz.:)
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  • From ANON - Subaru on August 07, 2005
    How sad! I was just getting into it, Oh well. Hope you update soon!
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  • From ANON - Kit on August 06, 2005
    Darn I had wanted it to be an update... OH well... I really like the fact that this fic is a bit eccentric, and 'odd'. Keep it up
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  • From ANON - TricksterGoddess on July 30, 2005
    Cool beans.. another story.. that isnt a one-shot... yayness^^ So far it is very interesting and very well written, but of course I wouldn't expect anything less from you^__~ Please update soon and keep up the good work^__^!!!
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  • From ANON - Snowfall on July 30, 2005
    This story is refreshingly different from the norm. The story line is intriguing, even though the sharks reminds me of a movie I saw awhile back. No biggie. Also, you did a great job introducing the characters and environment. I loved how you had Inu scared shitless. That was so funny. You have us feeling sympathy for Kag's right off the bat. Everyone seems to be in character and I like the dynamics you have put into play. Your descriptions are well done.

    I am surprised that your previous reviewers, particularly the articulate, did not point out that you have an inordinate amount of errors in which you used incorrect spellings. The words you used were synonyms of the words you had meant to use. Such as, 'rapped' for 'raped', 'stair' for 'stare'. Had it been only a small number, I wouldn't say anything. However, there are so many that it appears intentional, as though you are testing the educational level of the reader, although, I know there could be many reasons. I'm a bit dyslexic myself, seriously. Some difficulties target specific areas. What can you do? You can't fix something if you don't know it's broken. That's one of the benefits of reviews. AFF has a beta readers group if you would like some help. They are real quick in getting chapters back to the author. http://groups.yahoo.com/group/AdultFanFictionBetaReaders/. I usually get mine back within 48 hours, but usually the same day. Oh, and some will also help with tips on general overall writing skills as they beta, if you invite them to do so.

    I wouldn't take the time to tell you this if I didn't care for your story or didn't intend to read it. I'm merely trying to help you as an author and me, as well as others, as readers. Your errors are simple and easy to fix. If I had the time and you had the inclination, I'd volunteer to do it for you myself. Since I don't, I recommend the group. They are some really great people and there are quite a few who beta in the Inu category.

    All that aside, your story is very intriguing and I look forward to finding out where you will take it. You've got a good mystery going and a lot of room to kick it around. I just love the dimension you've given the characters and know I will enjoy seeing them interact with each other. Ah, your two sharks are sweeties and I love the special relationship they have with Kag's. And, OMG, poisoned water! I hope you don't plan on killing them off. That would just be too sad.

    Keep writing!

    Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
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  • From ANON - lost child on July 26, 2005
    I agree, this fic is different, but that's what I like about it. I'm constantly looking for sess/kag fics that doesn't involve them meeting at work, school, college, etc. Also your story is detailed and you kept mentioning the problem, which I noticed most people forget to do (even me from time to time) And best of all, it's got long chapters and they didn't fall head over heel in love wthin the first 3 paragraphs like I've read with some fics. Your drawing it out and as impatient as I am to see them get together, I'm glad with how this is going to far. Damn you gotta update soon...I just have to read more, I like this story. Write it till it's finished please!
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  • From ANON - Seito on July 25, 2005
    Hey good fic. I'm not one for alternate universe type fic.s but this is really good can't wait for more.
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 25, 2005
    umm u might think this is a dumb question but wat site is SS exactly?
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  • From ANON - Phantomlogic on July 23, 2005
    I was a bit skeptical from the summary, but I completely enjoyed your first chapter. Your grammar and spelling were very well done! I enjoy the premise of the story and look forward to reading more!
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  • From ANON - DragonHunter on July 23, 2005
    Silent,

    I have been reading your work and am interested in reading more. You have such a grasp on fantasy fiction combined with a twist of sexualty it is astounding. Your talent may be raw, but I feel that you have such potential. You are a blossoming Anne Rice mixed with a little bit of William Faulkner. Have you been professionally published yet?

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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on July 22, 2005
    I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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  • From Blackraven85 on July 22, 2005
    Kool!!! Love it!!!!! Please update soon!!!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Shadoe [\"Shady\"(lol) j/k ] Austere on July 21, 2005
    Very interesting! It's been a while since there has been a Sesshoumaru/Kagome pairing with this much plot (and without the regular "business" sesshy and inu-chan executives who aren't demons). War weapons, underwater technology, Youkai, and Ningens working together, somewhat, in harmony; what more could I ask for...? Oh! I know...another chapter! Please...aheh...>_< Do continue writing. Thanky!!!
    -Shadoe SIRII Solaris Austere
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