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Reviews for Sesshomaru is punished.

By : Hrtofdrkns
  • From ANON - ArumLily on February 27, 2007
    Interesting...

    You have ideas, but an odd selection process going on, and a rather shakey understanding of character. I mean, it's cool that you don't like Sesshomaru, I can't expect everyone to love the same characters I do, but why waste a fic on a character you don't like?

    'As deep as a puddle' I suggest, if you wish to try another fic using a character you don't respect, do a little research. I'm a character creator and analyst by prfession (yes, i actually get PAID to do that... I have THE most awesome job) and on a professional level, i beg to differ with your initial evaluation. Sesshomaru is, from study of current available dubbed anime and translated manga, the most multifaceted, strangely motivated character of the lot. i could write a bloody thesis on the exciting, conflicting and always surprising nature of the Daiyokai. Sadly, I haven't been called to evaluate the psychological impact of InuYasha on children yet... So I haven't had a chance.

    Though I can possibly understand why someone with no ability to analyse character might not understand... his character is well sheilded, which happens to also be an aspect of his character

    Anyway, my apologies, i do tend to go on a bit in reviews... my point is, you have writing potential. You have ideas, but i think you let yourself down here due to lack of passion for your subject. i admire you for trying to use someone you dislike, but it would probably have been wiser not to.
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  • From LadyTsunadeSama on January 20, 2007
    I loved this :) It was really good..would like to see what happens to poor InuYasha 'when hes old enough'..
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  • From ANON - jen on December 26, 2005
    to the author:

    great work! i loved it. and yes he would flippin cry after taking fifty whacks with a paddle. who wouldnt?

    all these people telling you how to write your fic should butt out.

    you did a great job, and a spanko like me can really apreciate your fic! ;)

    x
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  • From ANON - taro_gurl on November 08, 2005
    ouch that hurt. Poor fluffy man harsh bashful words in the 2nd chappies. LMAO.
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  • From Hrtofdrkns on October 17, 2005
    To anonymus, I just don't like the character of Sesshomaru. I was not attacking you personally, please extend me the same basic curtisy.
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 17, 2005
    He's nothing more then a selfish child trapped in an adult's body. He is about as deep as a puddle.

    Are you sure you're not describing yourself?
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  • From ANON - joy on October 07, 2005
    lovely i would just love to see that bitch cry... i hope he is burnt alive slowly
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  • From ANON - Anon on October 06, 2005
    Am I the only person who thought this fic should have been a angsty, steamy BDMS scene instead of an abusive dad whaling on a little boy? The way it's described, it's way less sexy that it could be. That's why people read spank!fics: because they're hot. This is too bland, vague, and predictable to turn anyone on. It's practically an extended summary statement, like you just churned it out to satisfy someone else.

    That said, revise it! It's actually an incredibly attractive concept which I've never seen done before. I'd love to see Sesshoumaru get a good spanking--hey, that'd be so damn smexy. You have the talent to pull it off, you just need to GET INTO IT! Don't let this story die!
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  • From ANON - Yumi on October 06, 2005
    I wish you would rewrite this fic instead of letting it lie in the dust. It's the first Sesshou spank fic I've ever seen, got its problems, but the idea is just incredibly hot. What everyone said about it is pretty much true, but it's got so much potential. What would make this story so much sexier is if you put LOTS more detail into it, maybe kept Sesshy more IC. Just saying "it hurt" is not enough, we want to know what the scene actually looked like. The humiliation is really what makes a spank fic yummy, you know.
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  • From ANON - Disappointed on September 25, 2005
    I think you need to try a different plot. This one was played out after Inu spanked Kag. Also, Sess would have been Izayoi's step-son NOT her son-in-law. Good luck with a different plot.
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  • From Cepheid on September 25, 2005
    If SMACK! you SMACK! ever SMACK! write SMACK! bad SMACK! smut SMACK! again, SMACK! I'll SMACK!...I don't now, snort rootbeer up my nose everytime you post, as per usual.

    In conclusion: good idea, baaaaaaaad execution. Alright, everyone has their own god-given level of talent and X number of years experience under their belt, but you know and I know that you weren't even *trying* to write well, for whatever reason. Several people have been kind enough to point out glaring errors in your fic, so why don't you avoid the wank-fest and just...fix them?

    And OOC? I think you mean "rabid Sess-bashing". Quick question: why does a few whacks on the ass hurt less in your world than getting your arm cut off at the shoulder?
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  • From ANON - Beast God on September 25, 2005
    Ditto on what Peri said. Inutaishou comes across as abusive rather than as a stern but loving father. He didn't really need to hurt Sesshomaru that much. Most parents are disturbed when their punishments make their children cry, but Inutaishou acts like he's enjoying it. He should just...NOT have threatened to disown him and humiliated him in front of Izayoi. It's not like his brutally beating Sesshomaru is going to convince him not to hate Inuyasha and that his father still loves him. And he, a helpless child, is "selfish and callous"? Gee, Inutaishou, who was it that raised him? And Izayoi's too kind and gentle to enjoy watching a young boy "sobbing and pleading".

    The first time I glanced through this story, I thought Sesshomaru was five or six. That's how little description there was. And the long strings of "SMACK" are REALLY annoying. And--what a minute--is this story half finished? It looks like Inutaishou was going to talk to Sesshomaru then changes his mind and goes to bed. Now that's really bad parenting since Sesshoumaru was upset enough to run away or attack Inuyasha again. C'mon, I've seen your other work, I know you can do better than this.

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  • From ANON - Melida on September 25, 2005
    Wow. Now you've pissed on the backstory of Inuyasha. Congrats or something. Really, you should stop trying to "shock" everyone with these pathetic attempts at dark!fic. In fact the only feelings you've evoked is pity that the characters have been subjected to your writing.

    1.) Sesshoumaru isn't the whiny spoiled brat you've written.
    2.) Izayoi isn't a callous bitch that cackles with glee when her stepson is being abused.
    3.) Inutaishou would not have beat his child. And that's what you wrote. Child abuse, not punishment.
    4.) No servant who wanted to keep his hide would have spoke out against the Lord's first wife and mother of his heir! It just wasn't done.
    5.) Spell check is your friend.
    6.) As is the dictionary.
    7.) Proofreading is fun!
    8.) If Sesshoumaru wanted Inuyasha dead, he'd be dead.
    9.) So, Sesshoumaru's mother was self-centered, but Inutaishou and Izayoi are selfish, self-absorbed child beaters. Gee. Remind me who the "bad" parent is?
    10.) Thanks for once again, lowering the general quality of AFF.N. You must be so proud.


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  • From ANON - nea on September 25, 2005
    Wonderful! I always thought Sesshoumaru deserved a good spanking! Thanks for giving him one. Hilarious!
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  • From ANON - Anon on September 24, 2005
    I think it's good. but admit it you're really a paddle fetishist!
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