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Reviews for Feelings

By : Holywarrior
  • From ANON - Inu-Shinta on October 26, 2005
    I like the idea of Inuyasha feeling mistreated. The necklace was placed around him in order to protect Kagome from him, not so she could have a "pet".
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  • From ANON - Merlin8719 on October 26, 2005
    Pretty good story and I like where your going with it. My main problem is the readability of it. You group your thoughts with quotes and you don't use anything to seperate the speech from narrative. Maybe putting thoughts in italics and the speech in quotations would make it easier to read. Also, you can separate the lines of speech apart and make it flow better. Example:

    "i love you InuYasha" Sango said

    "I love you my little Sango" InuYasha replied

    Something like that. Very minor spelling errors so cudos to that. Keep up the good work and i can't wait for the next update.
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