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By : Nahaujaret

From ANON - Mireille on November 11, 2005
Theres nothing wrong with this story, it's kick ass and anyone who complains about language in it should go read shit on ff.net instead of aff. Please update soon!
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From ANON - Candice on November 09, 2005
UPDATE i love your fic. really nice... I was sad when the next 2 chapters were juss A/n's but keep up the good work!! Love it
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From ANON - kagome2004 on November 09, 2005
there ya go!!!!!!!! * stands and applaudes....cheering u on* don't let people get u down....they don't need to read it if they don't like it so ignore them and post more more more lol.......u do a GOOD JOB ON UR STORIES..........who ever doesn't like it could kiss ur ass....
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From ANON - black iris on November 07, 2005
thanks for continuing the story but... never continue a story because of what your reviews say or what you think people will think of you... do it because you either HAVE to get something out in the open threw writing (like a self counsiling)... or do it becasue YOU want to. sounds corney yes, reviews can help change your story, give you guidence, feel secure about your style of writing (or change it), maybe even change your fictional life threw writing for the better... and many other things. never change for anyone but yourself girl!!! you stated your black... i'm white... not much difference now is there? you say what you want to say you think what you want to think and you do what you want to do... like everyone else. i cant deny it though... no matter how corney or how much this review makes sence (or no sence... hahaha >
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From ANON - L.B.B on November 07, 2005
Love your fic, it was the bast.
later
L.B.B ^_^
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From ANON - Ren on November 07, 2005
Wai!! Wai!! You're continuing, thank goodness!! ^_^ Tee hee hee, I'm so happy, thanks a lot for continuing it, I'm very glad you are going to continue. I will be there to support you all the way...well, when I can that is. Life usually calls me at weird times..*sits and ponders that thought* Tee hee, but yeah, like I said, I'll be behind you all the way! ^_^
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From catrice on November 07, 2005
Hi, Let me start off by saying I love this story. I am glad that you have decided to continue. I am sorry that you got some flam reviews. I have no problem with you using the *N* word in this story. I am a *Black Female* and I am not from the hood or the projects, but I know how the some people from those areas of any town use that kind of speaking. Not saying that people from those areas do not have education and can not talk, but some people just like talking that way. It goes along with your story, so girl keep ding wht you are doing. Like I said I love this story, and update when you can, also I have read this on mediaminer.com too.
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From ANON - moonbabe1989 on November 06, 2005
You know... I dont think you should delete your story. It's original and that's VERY hard to come by these days... you shouldnt delete your story because of those reviewers who complained that you offended them and are too sensitive about things. It's only a story! And a very good story ;-) You kept Sesshomaru in character and I give you huge props for that, since thats real hard. I looked at your reviews, and although I didnt really read the entire review (cuz Im lazy and didnt wanna read through all of them lol), it seems that the majority liked your story and didnt want you to delete it. Well, If I were you, I'd ignore those couple of people who complained and keep writing. You've got great talent :-D well, I HOPE to see another chapter from you.

P.S. To Swiftsword,
Well, I didnt read all of your reviews OR the entire thing because it was FRIGGIN 10 PARAGRAPHS OF BITCHING AND MOANING, I just wanted to ask why you said,"I'm kicking myself for wasting my time on someone who will never realize the gravity of their misdeeds." But you still wasted your time? Just to make someone feel bad err what? Wow seems like you take somethings a little too seriously. If their story upsets you so much, why were you reading it and why did you keep reviewing? Geez just let it go, if theyre doing something sooo bad, theyll learn it the hard way (and some say 'the better way') later on in life.

Anyways, Nahaujaret, I hope you keep up with your brilliant story and ignore the complainers.

Moonbabe1989
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From ANON - Jade28 on November 06, 2005
DON'T STOP WRITING!!!! all because some people are offended does NOT mean you have to stop. If they don't like it they don't have to read it it's as simple as that. I personaly think this ia a very funny story, and I hope you do continue writing it. besides if you let someone tell you how to write then it really isn't your writing is it? you have a disclamer telling anyone who reads it that if they have a problem with the style in which your story is written not to read it, so maybe they should have paid closer attention to it.
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From ANON - nevaeh azalea on November 06, 2005
NOO i been waitin for this story to be updated and NOW it is being DELETED?!?!!?!?!? GOD I HATE LIFE!!! EVERY FREAKIN GOOD STORY GETS DELETED
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From ANON - disturbed chick on November 06, 2005
its a really good fic, and i know what u mean by tryin not to offend anyone but they could kiss ur ass if they cant take it then they shouldnt read it its as simple as that, they keep on reading it so they can bitch about something hell do it to piss em off!
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From ANON - Mmoirai on November 06, 2005
I went back and re-read your story, and I really actually quite admire how easily you seem to put spoken slang into written word. I was able to read through all of it with no hesitation and was impressed. I never 'ran' with that particular type of 'crew' so it is fun to see the differences in lifesyle. Why does Rin speak in slang with the group, and not so much when she is speaking to Sesshoumaru? I suppose you wouldn't speak heavy slang to someone who doesn't understand it. *HEHE!* I answered my own question! You did show us a few instances where Rin's thoughts were in slang, though, indicating that it is not for show, but rather, how she is. Just wondering.

Spacing between the dialogue would help determine when one speaker is finished and another has begun.

There are a few places that an ‘I’ was missing, or you stopped a thought and finished the sentence with something else that didn’t fit.

Ex: “He was extremely he was good looking.”

Your warnings and translations at the beginning of each of your chapters are just right. You don’t need to apologize for everything at the end of your chapters. If you have to write a warning, you WILL offend some people. It doesn’t make you a bad person, and it doesn’t make them bad people.

The above reviewer’s history lesson was interesting, and now I, too understand, why Japanese/Chinese/Koreans hate to be mistaken for one of the others. I learn something new every day.

Soooo….. is that information supposed to magically make everyone plug their ears and look the other way when this particular content is used in someone’s story? He/She saw the disclaimer. Would it have been less appalling to them had it been racial slurs against a black person instead of against a Chinese/Japanese person? Sadly, based on their rant, some of those who read the review Swiftsword left, can, and possibly do, conclude that they were upset because of the author’s seeming to have only a little understanding of the extent to which said peoples ‘hate’ to be mistaken for each other, and not the racism itself.

Don’t apologize! You live in this world too, and your interpretation of it is just that! Yours! But, as a writer, it is your decision as to whether or not to use your reviewers’ responses as constructive criticism and to adjust YOUR writing accordingly. It is also your decision as to the extent to which you adjust YOUR writing. Above all else, please keep in mind the reasons for why you decided to share your story in the first place. Are your reasons valid even when you don't like all of your reviews?

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From ANON - jnkin on November 06, 2005
I think you should continue with your story. Even after the reviews, you should just not use the 'N' word and just check on things before you say why Japanese people hate being called Chinese and all that.
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From ANON - Mmoirai on November 06, 2005
Oh geeeeezzzz!!!! In case everyone has forgotten....this is ADULT FanFiction.net. You must be atleast 17 years of age or older, and if you are not, then you must act like it. There is some really mature content on this site including stories with racial remarks, rape, murder, fetishes, incest, really twisted stuff...I think if you (the author) just make sure that the questionable content is mentioned in your summary, or at the begining of your chapters, then anyone who reads it after knowing to expect it and then still complains can just ....well... feel silly. They were warned, and this is your creative expression, not theirs.

I really like your style. This fic is unlike anything I've read with this pairing. I like it. If you do continue, I will be reading.
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From ANON - kagome2004 on November 06, 2005
i am sorry to hear that ur no longer going to finish the story it was a great story..........i hope u save it and one day finish the story.....some people in the world don't understand that things we are facing in the world is greatly more big of a deal than ur story. ur story kinda gives a realistic view on it.....with how bad neighborhoods really are and how some people in the hood talk......i really didn't see anything wrong with the way u wrote the story......don't let people bring you down........just hold ur head up high and plus u did warn them if they get easily offended they shouldnt read the story so it's there fault they got offended.....i know u didn't mean nuttin by it.
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