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Reviews for Broken Promises, Shattered Dreams

By : MistyRain
  • From ANON - Sayuri-chan on December 08, 2005
    This doesn't sound good...*bites on fingernails* But it's so gooooood!!!! I love this story!! Update soon, guys, I love it!

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  • From ANON - mhall on December 08, 2005
    love it update soon
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  • From ANON - badkitty on December 08, 2005
    When I read the warning at the beginning of the chapter I thought, poor Kagome. As I read on and found out it was Kanaye my jaw dropped. I was so not expecting that one. Thank you for sparing us the details though. I wonder if Mukuro will be spitefull and end up telling Kagome. That would be bad, she would feal so guilty and be so mad at Hiei for being sadistic. Can't wait for the next chapter to find out about her grandfather and to see the reactions if Yusuke delivers the message. Those three need to just get together and get it over with.
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  • From ANON - purp1ebabe on December 08, 2005
    hmmm... i cant wait to find out how things r gunna turn out for yusuke!!
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  • From ANON - kougalover123 on December 08, 2005
    what a punishment. i bet Hiei can't wait to get his hands on Maiko. please update again soon.
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  • From ANON - ShadowsandSteel on December 08, 2005
    Wow. Way to miss the point of Ogen's review, authors and reviewers. Ogen's not calling for happy fic. Ogen's not complaining about the lack of sunshine and bunnies. Ogen is - quite clearly - saying that it's not the mood that's the problem here; it's the way it's written. The plot. The characterization. And I, personally, agree with him (her?) This fic isn't "dark." It isn't "edgy." It's EMO. And it's pedestrian, lackluster emofic, for that matter.

    Who is this depressed, angsting Kagome? She bears no relation at all to canon Kagome. Some OOCness I can forgive, because I firmly believe that it's a necessary evil in fanfiction, but you have to start your characterization with the canon version of the character, and I'm seeing nothing of the real Kagome in your fic. Her lover got her pregnant and then left her? And she gets all weepy? Hell no. Kagome would blow her top so hard, her neighbors would be calling the police. And then two days later, she'd be her sunny, happy self again. That's just the way she is. If you're going to deviate this much from canon characterization, you have to take the time to set it up and tell us why she's so different now. You haven't done that. You simply start the fic with a radically different version of Kagome - an UNRECOGNIZABLE version - with no explanation for why she's so off. And you still haven't provided an explanation. "Inuyasha died" isn't sufficient. People suffer major losses all the time without radically altering the basic characteristics of their personalities. You have to do better if it's going to be believable.

    And that's just characterization. I don't even know where to begin with your plot. As I doubt you'd appreciate the time I'd put into a thorough critique, I won't waste my time. Suffice it to say, it's not the mood that's the problem here. I like dark. I like reading about fucked-up, dysfunctional relationships. I love it when bad things happen to good characters. But only if it's well-written and believable. This isn't.
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  • From ANON - Ox King on December 08, 2005
    Hey there!! I'm enjoying your story. I like the fact that you are updating frequently. I also like were the plot is going.
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  • From ANON - sendosha on December 08, 2005
    Good, Kagome could stand her ground against Mukuro. The lemon was really hot, grat chapter.
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  • From ANON - Sayuri-chan on December 08, 2005
    Nice lemony fresh chapter!! :: huggles you guys :: You guys are the bomb and I love everything you do. This chapter was definately something to remember, especially since Hiei's gotten a new insight into just how much she would do to keep him in her life. Kawaii na!! =^_^= Update soon, I love this story!
    Sayuri-chan
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  • From ANON - badkitty on December 07, 2005
    ~drool~................OMG is it hot in here? Whew! Wow.... uh that was some lemon, I think I should go take a shower now. That was freakin HOT! Loved that chapter, alot!

    Oh yeah, Mukuro is a bitch, I hope Kagome chars her bionic ass. She knows she's jealous because Hiei wouldn't touch that ugly manly bitch. I hopr she gets hers too.
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  • From ANON - purp1ebabe on December 07, 2005
    ohh i loved this chapter lol anyways keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - rtsfhndtngs on December 07, 2005
    write more please
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  • From kimisan on December 07, 2005
    that was so hot, i need a cold shower. Can't wait to see what his punishment is... Update soon my queen *hands you Aoshi cookies*
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  • From ANON - Takhisiss on December 07, 2005
    Wow, I wish Kagome had purified her ass. She deserves it. Bigger question is will they stay at Mukuros now that this has happened. Altho I still think Yusuke needs to take himself out of the picture too but it's not my call. Please update soon. This is great.
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  • From ANON - kougalover123 on December 07, 2005
    Hiei is so sexy. please update again soon.
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