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By : Hrtofdrkns

From ANON - ajd5@hotmail.com on November 30, 2005
To the poster above, who defended the rosary, (not that I'm trying to start a debate)- you also are missing one very important point about the rosary- it is very much physical abuse. Anytime he pisses her off she uses a negative stimulus that causes pain (regardless of how little it may or may not be) as a form of punishment. She's not his parent, nor his guardian, so she doesn't have the right to use physical discipline on him. (And even then, if you count the rosary as a foreign object, using it would constitute physical abuse if used by a parent. At least in Canada) Think of it this way; if he slapped Kagome everytime she pissed him off, there would be no debate (and I don't think it's a male/female thing. I think it's just harder to imagine suddenly falling to the ground at someone's will. That's a lot harder to get your head around than a slap. And the fact that Inuyasha never shows he's in pain). The sits are no different than a slap- minor pain, a whole lot of humiliation. That's what I think is the worst part of it, as if being forced face first into the ground by a word isn't humiliating enough, the word is a dog command.

And yes, she uses a lot less than she did in the beginning, that still doesn't make it okay when she does use it. Unless it's to save a life, which since he mastered his sword and never seems to want to go on random killing sprees (even in the beginning), means it should be used even less than it already is. Sure, it's saved his life a few times (well only twice that I can think of), it's also endangered his life (like against the giant Inuyasha and Kagome that the priestesses cooked up. And arguably whenever Kouga's around, he had tried to kill him many times). The point is, situations requiring the use of the rosary to save Inuyasha's life don't come around enough to justify keeping it on him.

And as for keeping her from home; who cares? The fate of the world may very well rest on getting the jewel (which is completely her fault for breaking. 'Oh, just last night Kaede explained that every power hungry being in the world will be after me and this jewel. Why don't I go for a walk, alone, unarmed, in the forest to try to find the well, I mean, what's the worst that could happen?') back together as quickly as possible, but school can wait. It's not like repeating a year would kill her. Maybe if she had been more concerned with finding the jewel shards than she was with school, they could have avoided the slaughter of Sango's village and and Shippo's parents. Hell, they might have been done in a couple of months for all we know. And even if she desperately needed to get home, Sango, Miroku, Shippo, and Kaede are ALWAYS on her side, no matter what happens. You trying to say the four of them couldn't slow Inuyasha down enough for her to make it to the well?

And getting back to the physical pain of being sat... how do we know it doesn't hurt? Inuyasha isn't the type to make whatever pain he feels obvious. Even when he's impaled by Sesshoumaru's hand, he still walks around later like it's no big deal. People hide physical pain all the time, it's enitrely possible that it hurts him a hell of a lot more than he shows. And even when it shows that it does hurt him (getting sat out of the tree near the beginning for instance) Kagome has no regrets about it. Just look at said tree incident, she gives a non-pology, like she stepped on his foot or bumped into him on the street, not make him fall head first out of a tree.

And yes, very often he's an utter bastard to Kagome. I just don't think being a bastard justifies assault. But to be fair, the shard detector comment was said by him only once (that I can remember), to Miroku when they first met him. He didn't really know Miroku, he certainly didn't trust him, so why should he tell him the truth of his relationship to Kagome? For all Inuyasha knew, the strange monk would hurt her for consorting with a half-demon (I know, it's a stretch and a lousy excuse, but I can see how someone who's not used to people could make the logical leaps, and act accordingly). And comparing Kagome to Kikyo? Not really since Kikyo was ressurected. I'm not sure he even does it that often after Yura of the Hair. Either way, he does it a lot less than Kagome uses the rosary. Even justified uses. In the manga, not long after Kikyo is resurrected he even tells Kagome she's different from Kikyo, and that he doesn't want her to be like Kikyo. And, if you go by the manga, he's never kissed Kikyo either. Kagome saw him hugging her.

The rosary did have a place and a purpose at the beginning of the series. It probably saved a lot of lives, and kept him in check long enough to re-develop a conscience. But there comes a point, where he's jumping off cliffs while human to save Kagome, or unsealing powerful dragons so he won't lose control again, that the rosary becomes unneccessary and should be taken off. He's no longer trying to kill Kagome, 'Sit' doesn't always work when he transforms (and if you go by the third movie, sitting him in this state could break the rosary), which he doesn't very often anymore because he mastered Tetsaigua (sp?), and he doesn't slaughter people for fun (unlike a certain wolf I could name). It reminds me too much of Spike's chip and the games of 'kick the Spike' that ensued on BTVS. How is Inuyasha supposed to prove that he's really changed and play the part of the hero if nobody will remove his leash and muzzle?
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From ANON - InuGrrrl on November 30, 2005
Another gem from the master.

I love your works & i LOVE how you DESTROY
that whole 'sit' shit. God, how I hate that.
It makes me cringe when she does it & when
I write I don't give him one. When I do it's
either for his protection or cruelty coming from
someone other than Kagome. She loves him, so
why hurt him?

Great start, can't wait for more!
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From ANON - bettychan on November 30, 2005
Can't wait to read more. Please update as soon as you can.
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From ANON - Anon on November 30, 2005
Even if it seemed kind of cruel, it still pretty much captured the way Kagome tends to treat Inuyasha, he just tends to get mouthier than Kagome did.
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From ANON - chanda on November 30, 2005
Yes I like it very much, great twist with the dream sequence. I look forward to your next update.

Chanda
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From ANON - A non-rosary hater on November 30, 2005
I think you�re missing one very crucial element to the aspect of the rosary: why it was given to him in the first place. Inuyasha was only bridled with the subduing necklace after he tried to kill Kagome� It�s there to ensure her safety and when she learns to trust him, she all but stops putting it to use. Besides, he has demon strength. How is she supposed to fight him when he physically restrains her from going home?

If you want to delve into the morality of using the rosary, by all means� But perhaps you should do it in a way that is balanced. We�ve seen that time and time again Inuyasha isn�t physically hurt by being subdued. Emotionally? Perhaps his ego gets deflated, but he isn�t exactly going out of his way to build Kagome�s self confidence either. He insults her, tries to dictate how she spends her time, keeps her from going to see her family, often treats her like an object (outright calling her his �shard detector�), and compares her to his �past love�. So I guess it�s the age old question; what�s more hurtful - physical wounds or emotional ones? Inuyasha has never actually managed to cause Kagome physical harm, but out of the two of them, he�s inflicted WAY more emotional scars.

Do I personally think that Kagome abuses the rosary on occasion? Yes, as a matter of fact I do. Sometimes she is very much in the wrong and I feel bad for the guy. But how is that any better than what he does? When she�s upset, she uses �the word�. When he�s upset, he insults and belittles her. I find my heart bleeding for Kagome far more often than the other way around�

And to be fair, Kouga and Kikyou kind of cancel each other out. The only real differences are that Kouga and Kagome haven�t kissed, Inuyasha has all but told Kagome he has feelings for Kikyou, and Kagome openly defends Kouga (and truthfully, I think it�s because she knows that Inuyasha could kill him if she let him). Although come to think of it Inuyasha does make lots of excuses for Kikyou�s actions � he just hasn�t ever physically defended her (likely because Kagome has never tried to kill Kikyou; behold another difference).

Try to keep things balanced. Otherwise your fic is going to come off as a rant and you won�t sway anyone. Sure you�ll be cheered on by other rosary-haters, but isn�t your goal to reach more than just those fans?

And then there is that whole point about how the necklace saves his life a few times and all, but you already know that.

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From ANON - AmberEyez on November 30, 2005
Nicely done, and a nice twist. I can't wait for the next chapters, seems like you've got something good under way...
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From kashudoreineko on November 29, 2005
This was fun!
I really enjoyed having Kagome worry about her treatment of Inuyasha.
Will you be posting more soon?
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From ANON - Lynn on November 29, 2005
Hi there!

I think this chapy was kind of cute, humorous and sad all at once. Although I think that Inuyasha would want to keep the rosary, I also think that he wouldn't mind the "no more sits" part. You know, it was a bit scary at first, seeing Kagome in Inu's place. But you got your point across. And it is rare. People tend to just make the characters do things without giving them a reason. Even if there happens to be a bit of OOC-ness, when there is a good reason, it's OK. And I also don't really think that whenever Inu ang Kag confess their feelings, the next thing for them will be to jump straight to bed. So if you can write it whitout making this mistake (and the also classical "and what about Kikyou - oh, I love you now, she's just a friend") then It'll be a wonderfull story! Please, just go on as you started.
It's not that important to have a lemon in the third chappy. But when there is a lemon, than make it good, and worth waiting for!

Hope you don't think I was trying to offend you in any ways. I really like the first ch. and I'm looking forward to reading more!
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From ANON - Spud on November 28, 2005
Oh... Shit... And to think I kinda liked the rosary...forget that...

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From ANON - really good on November 28, 2005
that makes me see the characters in new perspective!! Personally, I think the anime has Kagome does the "sit" too much and unnecessarily. Rumiko Takahashi's original manga's "sit" are much, much more "justified," you can say.
As for the lemon, since Kagome is trying to make it up to Inuyasha, maybe she can doll up a bit and tell him that she is his willing love slave without any condition ^_^?
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From inufan625 on November 28, 2005
I thought that was a really good start. As you said some of the situtations in her nightmare might be a little exaggerated, but she does use the rosary too much sometimes, and that is the way of nightmares, guilty ones especially. I think this has a lot of potential and I will be sure to keep my eye out for updates...So post more soon!
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From ANON - Rawben on November 28, 2005
wow, niiiice! i'm glad she realized that she was being a bit of an ass... ;)
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From ANON - jodibetz on November 28, 2005
That sounds like a great story! Can't wait for the next chapter and the lemon :D
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From ANON - anaidil on November 28, 2005
Wow! I really love this story. It's was interesting to read about Kagome living what Inuyasha has been through. You are right, dreams tend to exaggerate things and make you feel guiltier that�s why I liked the way you wrote the story because we can get the concept that Kagome feels very bad of how she�s been treating Inuyasha and has decided to amend to wrong. Keep up with the good job and please update as soon as you can. I�m really looking forward in reading more chapters.
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