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Reviews for Naraku.....Stalker

By : Sango0596
  • From ANON - angel on June 16, 2006
    hey, i love your story keep up the good WORK!!
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  • From ANON - Lill on December 16, 2005
    The chapter was short, yes, but good enough to be enjoyed!
    All you need is a REAL BISHOUNEN (Like: Naraku, Sesshoumaru, Inuyasha or maybe Kouga!)
    ;)
    and more details....Get those two things and it'll become wonderful!
    Heh...I allready like it ALOT! But details could make the greatest wonders...

    Heh...MELIKE! ^_^ LOL!


    Update soon please!
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  • From ANON - Anonymous on December 15, 2005
    Yes, that chapter was most definitely boring, as it the rest of your story. It might be good, but as there is no consistancy to it, and a lot of holes, it just doesn't make it. It completely lacks believability. First....women do not have morning sickness the day after they have sex, and it is not until the sixth week that any pregnancy test will show if a woman is pregnant or not. Additionally, if either Sango or Kagome were as badly beaten as you say, why was no medical treatment rendered? Sango could not have had sex with anyone that soon after being beaten and raped, with those kind of injuries. As well, it is more than obvious that you are completely unfamiliar with the need for a woman to recover from giving birth. In fact, it is neither safe, nor realistic to expect any woman who has just given birth to have sex the same day or even the same month afterwards. There is a need for time to heal not only from the birthing process, but also from the long term of having carried a child.

    You have a reasonable plot, but you totally lack in any kind of story or plot development. Example: If Kagome was chatting with Inuyasha on her computer, and Naraku stated that he was just outside, why didn't you consider having her leave a quick message to Inuyasha that she had a stalker outside. Kagome is not that slow or stupid in the series, or manga.
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 15, 2005
    ok, wait, i suddenly got the idea that maybe this first chapter was more like a summary, cause that's how its writtten, so i went and read the next chapter and the beginning of the third, and i have to rephrase what i earlier review, just above this one, and i have to say that hte whole story is confusing, it's not written in any format, it just goes by to quick, like you are writting a summary of it, and not an actual story, you need to go back and edit it to death. this seems like the draft before a rough copy. now i wont say if you d that ill like it, i probably won't, i dont like rape, or anything like that, but if it's well written.....
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 15, 2005
    ok, i've only just read the first chapter, and nothing else, but um...that first chapter was really confusing, i dont get it, she was raped so she decides to have sex??? and mirokou, without any foreplay, or even a kiss just f***s her??? arrrghh, it was too confusing i couldn't follow it.

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  • From Sango0596 on December 15, 2005
    Yeah Hobo (A.K.A. Hojo) is a bastard in this chapter :D

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  • From ANON - Lill on December 15, 2005
    Okey...The 4th chapter wasn't bad! It was quick, but where's Naraku?
    Ain't he coming back from prison? I want my little Kuku!
    Heh...Kuku is a nickname I just came up with! I haven't seen anybody else call him Kuku, so...Heh...
    DON'T STEAL IT!!!! Ummm....Well...The whole story is very nice! And I like it!
    But details would make the greatest wonders!
    Heh...Go Kuku! I mean...Naraku! Ahem...Well...Update soon please!

    Heh...MELIKE! ^_^

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  • From ANON - Jayla on December 15, 2005
    So Kimiko is Naraku's baby right? Does Miroku know?
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  • From Sango0596 on December 14, 2005
    Hey People the next chapter is up! Hope you like it :D
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  • From ANON - Lill on December 14, 2005
    Poor Naraku...He's a gorgeous Bishounen! Be nice to him!

    Heh...Anyway: The third chapter wasn't bad either! Heh...I liked it!!

    Heh...MELIKE! ^_^
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  • From Sango0596 on December 14, 2005
    hi peeps! great story huh? lol
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  • From ANON - Taicrazy on December 14, 2005
    details, longer chapters...that's all you need!
    anyway: the story was kind of good. I've seen worse! :)
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  • From ANON - Lill on December 14, 2005
    Actually it wasn't that bad! I think it was quite entertaining!
    Well...Some details would make the greatest wonders, but otherwise I think it's nice!

    Heh...MELIKE! ^_^
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  • From Sango0596 on December 13, 2005
    Well Excuse me for sucking at writing stories! LLLLLLLLLLLLLLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
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  • From Sango0596 on December 13, 2005
    Sorry My Chapters Are Soo Short I Only Have a little time on my computer NOT :P lol
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