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By : BlackberryPatch

From ANON - Snowfall on January 11, 2007
Chapter Eight!

So sorry that I haven't reviewed yet! I just reread it. *dancing around, happy action whore* Weeeeeeeeeee! I loved the fight scene (so very well done) and the smart ass remarks and all the subtle humor. I'm on cloud nine. And, Oh gosh! *sniffle* Sesshoumaru being so injured. I really feel bad for him. Kagome pulled Tetsusaiga out of its perch. Even if he owned it, he would barely be able to use it. Then Inuyasha cuts his arm off with it. And now, Kagome goes and uses Tensaiga! (Wonderful cool thing that was!) What an insult and humiliating for Sesshoumaru. Sesshoumaru needs a booster big time! I feel so bad for him. It's all your fault too! Poor guy, standing out there all alone. I'm so glad that you sent Inuyasha out to be with him.

The whole segment of Kagome breaking the subjection beads was...well ...*sniffles, sweet and sad and...I'm gonna cry.

Rin and Shippou are so sweet. I hope that everything works out for Rin. She really doesn't want to live with humans. That's a tough one. You'll probably get us all up in tears over that one too. Meanie.

I don't remember which chapter it was in, but I loved the whole segment with Inuyasha being wary of showing affection toward Sesshoumaru in her presence. You did a great job on that. I almost cried, probably did.

I know I'm missing stuff, but today is one of my dizzy days. *whispers, shhhhh* Totally fucking awesome job with the adverbs! Oh, right. Shhhh. ^_^

Snow

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From ANON - Reaver on January 07, 2007
I absolutely am loving this whole little series! Keep up the great work I cannot want to read more!
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From ANON - gen on January 02, 2007
this is my first opportunity to comment (i think, but then the holidays took such
a toll on me that i dont remember much) but anyway, even if i have previously commented, i still have these to say:

i like your fics. if it seems to be such a bland insipid word, it isnt.
i've been reading your Inglorious, Fraternal, and now Comaraderie -
and have copied the entire thing (I used the copy all feature =) ) on my hard disk
for the times and moments when the internet is down and i cant access aff or mm.

they are wonderfully written fics - and put together is spelling to be a novel.
or novellette. i am not one much for labels.

i wanted to say that you laid the foundation for this fic very nicely
in Inglorious. and the way it was continued in Fraternal...
my apologies if i am putting it is a review to this fic,
but it seems part and parcel to me

i like the development of the stories and the way you set it up.

i am not saying your fic is error-free, there are some minor grammatical errors
but these are petty errors and do not detract from the beauty of your fic.

i hope you continue to write.... even if you dont get anything out of it
you do give a lot of reading (and imagining) pleasure to your readers.

i am one of those voracious readers.
i read not only fanfic but tons of other stuff.
i say that not to brag but to let you know
the quality and quantity of my reading materials.

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From ANON - SP777 on December 31, 2006
My GOODNESS, it's been awhile.

But despite that, your story still evenly flows without losing any of its integrity & the plot remains consistent. That really means something because I've read stories that have gone in a different direction because of a long hiatus and the plot suffers from it.

You managed to keep it flowing and the characters true to form.

Anyway, bottom line is...this story is still one of the best. :-)
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From ANON - Caitriona on December 31, 2006
This has been an excellent story so far. I think that you ahve done a great job with the characters. They are somewhat off of what RT would write, but completely understandable given in the circumstances.

You have really put a lot of thought into this storyline. I am enjoying it a lot. I like the platonic relationship that is developing between Inu and Kagome while the romantic one betwseen Inu and Sess is really blowing my socks off.

Thanks for writing and I look forward to reading future chapters.

Caitriona
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From ANON - anon on December 29, 2006
ur stories up until here are great but now you're just going into details about side characters and that just gets too boring. but it was a great read until now. thanks! :)
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From ANON - c-loke on December 29, 2006
That was awesome...I just love how you wrote about everybody. I love Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru. And I'm glad that everyone was fine with them together. I especially like how you made Kagome so accepting of the fact. I was never fond of Kagome because of all the silly childish things she did, but you made her very mature and accepting. I love your story and I can't wait to read more on my favorite pairing. lol

SESSHOUMARUXINUYASHA are the best!
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From ANON - Shera on November 29, 2006
so um is this done? i love it! u should either finish it or make another sequel! your lemons are so hot and creamy! lmao fabu-lous job!
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From ANON - Split Persona on October 25, 2006
I shall worship you forever.

Over the past four years I have left the IY fandom countless times, because I could never find a story with the right elements that appealed to me. I love Inu/Sess/Inu, but most of the time, stories have them labeled and change their characters to fit into however they want the story. Usually Inuyasha is weakened and 'uke-fied' and made Sesshomaru's bitch. And I found fics that go the opposite way that I usually read as crack because of how unreal they are.

But your series is actually very in-character, the changes they've undergone due to a shared trauma. I love your Kagome, because when I start to think she might have 'wisened' (as it often seems in the anime), she turns back into herself and it makes me laugh at the kind of comments she suddenly spouts off as she rambles. Your Inuyasha is neither 'uke' or 'seme' and neither is Sesshomaru. They are equals. I have waited years for a fic that would paint them in this light. Why must one be stronger, or more dominant than the other when they both are so obviously dominant males? There is nothing feminine about either of them (unless you count Sesshomaru's looks, but that is up for debate. And it's funny that the it's a reverse stereotype where the one who actually LOOKS girly is considered the more dominant and 'manly' of the two.)

Right now I'm jumping around waiting for your next update because these stories have me hooked from beginning to end. You keep the plot going and you don't drag on without anything inbetween. The only thing I see as odd is the interchange in Rin's speech. She sometimes calls Inuyasha, 'Inuyasha-sama' and sometimes she doesn't. It seems rather strange. Perhaps it would make more sense if she had used it consistently, and then slowly stopped, but from the beginning it was like that.

Other than that I am completely in love with this fic and will be waiting for the next chapter. Thank you for such a delightful read.
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From ANON - acr on September 15, 2006
Very good chapter. I like Kagome's reaction--I hate that so many Sess/Inu fics have evil, jealous Kagome.

My only complaint is that the timeline of the events after the flood is very confusing. YOu might want to include more mentions of time passing. For example, "In the three days since the flood" etc.
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From ANON - White_Youkai on September 14, 2006
Wow! Wow! Wow! I love this story! I mean all the sequels of Inglorious: Fraternal and Comaraderie. Please just do not stop writing! I hope to see more of the sequels of this story!
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From ANON - SP777 on September 01, 2006
Well you have to admit, it was erotic, in a perverted way..with Kikyou in the
background, hopefully she got the hint by the 2nd act. :-)

I also liked the dreaded 'conversation' Kagome had with Rin about the birds & the bees. An adult's/parent's uncomfortable nightmare. :-)
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From ANON - Snowfall on August 30, 2006
Oh, you should know, that it is not very often that I try to help out an author like this. It's very rare and a compliment to you that I would take the time to think it out and write it. Just so you know that I'm not doing it because I don't like something. I'm doing it because I like your writing so much.

Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
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From ANON - Snowfall on August 30, 2006
Chapter 7

Oh...wow.

You express the characters emotional states very well; so worried about Inuyasha's safety and anxious for his return. Shippou was so cute and did such a wonderful job getting to Sesshoumaru.

Sesshoumaru disappearing in a flash was a good way to show his worry. Great job with Sesshoumaru's frustration on the way to save Inuyasha and Rin. A tip: that was an excellent place for some major angst. He was afraid that he wouldn't get there in time and he knew Inuyasha was human and defenseless. Also, Rin, his adoptive daughter was with Inuyasha. He could lose everything. He had to have been afraid, yes, afraid. Being that scared has physical feelings as well, knots in the stomach, knife in the chest, dry mouth, burning in the head like your about to pass out, frantic, heart about to pound out of your chest. Believe me, I couldn't get to my son in time as he darted out into traffic on his tryke. I did not realize that my voice could go that high when I screamed (and I don't scream--I pass out when I'm scared). It was like a flare went off in my torso and shot out through my mouth. God! It was awful. And then, when your kid thinks that it would be really fun to hide in the closet under a bunch of blankets and you live next to a lake...while you run around searching, your chest gets tighter and tighter and your stomach burns, especially when the last place to look is in the lake. I could've strangled him. I got so mad about being so afraid and then I cried. Giving a physical description really draws out the emotions of the reader. Another one here for you and other authors. Keh, just because I tell you all this stuff doesn't mean that I remember to do it myself. I forget. Practice, practice. *sigh*

Oh, Kagura tipped off Kagome. Cool. I hope Kouga came out of that fight without very many injuries. He just doesn't get that Kagura is trying to help now, but that she's restricted. Of course, I can't really blame him.

Whew! Sesshoumaru got there just in time. I was afraid that he would have to use Tensaiga on Inuyasha and when you didn't show Rin right away, I was afraid that the monster had gotten her. Scared me half to death.

Hm, what's up with Kagome and glowing? I'm sure that you will be expanding on that one. Oh, I felt kind of sorry for her when Rin and Shippou were asking her all of those questions. LOL

Inuyasha's reaction to Kagome coming back to camp and then what she said to him was so great. Her delivery of the talk was excellent. Finally, Inuyasha knows that Kagome won't reject him. I did feel bad for Sesshoumaru. He had only had a couple of minutes with Inuyasha when everything was interrupted.

Rin being her usual self and getting all excited when she saw Inuyasha kiss Sesshoumaru gave me a smile. And her realizing that Sesshoumaru had been upset...it made me sad for him too. *sniffle* Such a perceptive little girl. She just loves her Sesshoumaru.

The lemon...OMG. That was so good. Even though Inuyasha was taking Kagome's advice, it was a bit dangerous to turn his back on Kikyou. Sesshoumaru must have really been tired to let his guard down. I wonder at what point she left too. Heheh. I doubt that she would ever change her mind. I don't know. I hope that you plan on something there. But, the lemon was hot. Anything between them now is romantic because of how you have built up this story. And them being apart from each other so long and not knowing if the other is ok, and needing each other so much...you know, that's a place that you could have built a little more on. Hm...I think to much. I should be writing on my own fics.

Ah, the adverbs. I noticed that you paid careful attention to those in the lemon. Great job! It really did make a difference. Keh, but then you switched places and put them in the other part of the fic! Gah! LOL XD Eh, sometimes I get so involved in what I'm writing because it's coming to me so quickly that I realize that I'm using a lot of adverbs. But, once I get it all written and out of my system, I go back and make changes. Were you in a hurry on this one? Because your punctuation is usually a lot better. Sorry, but I just noticed it because I would have to reread some sentences and I don't remember having to do that before. Please don't shoot me! I wish that I had time to beta for you because I love this series and you have such a great vocabulary and I love your style. It just hypnotizes me. So, when I see errors, I just want to dive in and fix them. *sigh*

Well, another awesome chapter; action, fear, worry, relief, anxiety, sadness, determination, love, romance, excitemnt, cuteness, lemon. So much is in it and you didn't leave us in the middle of anything. A very meaty and satisfying chapter. And the suspense is building. Naraku is becoming more of a presence. *chills*

Look forward to the next one. I'm anxious to see what comes next.

Snowfall aka Hanyou Slave
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From ANON - Snowfall on August 25, 2006
Chapter five:

Your idea for Sesshoumaru markings on the tree were great. Of course, I�ve already read what it does and I have to say that it is very cool. And Inuyasha almost ran smack into the tree that the carving was on. That was funny.

Wow. Sesshoumaru picked Kagome up. �darting through the rain like a ghost�. I love the imagery.

Inuyasha meeting up with the others was quite a relief. Miroku�s injuries and saving Rin gives him the added character of a hero, which he truly is. He is more than a pervert and sometimes people fail to see that, only focusing on the distracting humor in the series.

That was sneaky of Rin to run off like that. Poor Shippou, he will think that it was all his fault. Inuyasha�s willingness to take off and find Rin and taking Shippou with him was very IC. Whew! Inuyasha got to her just in time. It was great that he understood Rin�s need to find Sesshoumaru.

The whole section with Sesshoumaru feeling guilty to the point of going to a human village, Kouga showing up and being is normal arrogant self and Sesshoumaru returning to fend off the wolf was very sweet. And OMG, not Naraku! Creepiness. Will there be a battle soon? Will anyone die? You scare me.

�I�m not going to kill him�Not yet anyway�Oh joy�� You can be so funny. Gah! It�s Inuyasha�s human night and there are oni about!

It was very intelligent of Inuyasha to realize that the�thing�only went after humans and sending Shippou safely ahead. But what about Rin? They are cutting it pretty close with Inuyasha not having his normal capabilities. Nice cliffie.

Again, nice chapter.

Snow

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