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Reviews for dog way

By : kagomeAT15
  • From RadioActiveOrange on May 28, 2008
    Hey! Are you and the author Kagome friends? Because both your work sucks. Terribly.
    http://inu.adultfanfiction.net/authors.php?no=1296797210
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  • From ANON - Sayvorie on September 03, 2006
    Urgh
    We have another bad author on our hands
    Someone be a dear and get me the rat poison
    x_x
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  • From ANON - a person on July 19, 2006
    wtf?
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  • From ANON - CherryFlavored on July 08, 2006
    I read the first few sentences of your story. Correction, the first sentence you wrote and I couldn't even register what you were trying to say. It was a paragraph long with no punctuation whatsoever. I understand that you are probably younger than most writers/authors on this site, but please spell things correctly. Here are words that are quite EASY to remember how to spell, and you didn't even both to check if you had done so:
    incorrect - correct
    untill - until
    contral - control
    buttimg - butting
    tryed - tried
    couls - could
    & there are more, but I want to point out other things you had done wrong.
    Dialogue is another thing. When someone is talking to another, there are rules to it. To properly write dialogue, you make it a new paragraph every time. Meaning, you start a new LINE. If you are describing the way a person felt, that can be continued after what the person said, but when you write another line of dialogue, you start a new paragraph. Example:
    "How was your day?" Sango asked with an exasperated tone.
    "Oh, just fine," Kagome slit her eyes into an angry frown as she fisted her hands.

    Dialogue is considered a paragaph. Understand it a little bit? I hope so. Notice the comma after Kagome replies saying 'fine'? That's because the sentence is not done. If you, or a different author were to not show the emotion she was emitting through her words, you would do it like so:
    "Oh, just fine."

    Then, you'd start another line. You cannot write paragraphs within paragraphs. Another thing; it is quite obvious that you aren't 18. If you were 18, you'd know all this by now. I am going to report you unless you can prove that you are old enough to even be viewing this site. Don't copy someone else's story, please. That's plagiarism. I have read stories like this before, they're all the same concept. The plot is interesting, that I like, but it makes me dislike it when the way the author writes it is out of line. You made this story go by too fast, and had many flaws. You are a writer-in-training, as I would call it. But, please. This site is not for you. I'm not telling you to get off, do as you wish, but you are obviously too young to be on this site. If you want tips on how to write, ask me, or someone who has experience. But, this is not the way to learn. You like erotica, a lot of people do too, I like it. I love it, but not when it is written so grotesque. Email me, I want to hear your response.
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  • From XxSangoxX on June 26, 2006
    I have to ask you a question...

    why the FUCK ... are you writing... ??? omg... i have had a bad day and maybe
    that is why i am taking all my shit out on you... but this site is intended for people that are 18+
    NOT 10 yr old pussies...

    GET A LIFE AND LEARN TO WRITE BEFORE YOU POST ANY OF UR SHIT
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  • From XxSangoxX on June 26, 2006
    Her name is Kaede... the 'old hag' is kaede.
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 15, 2006
    This is why 12-year-olds should not write adult stories. You're a stupid 12-year-old, aren't you?
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  • From ANON - pat on June 14, 2006
    ok i guess but u need to space out your words and dont cram them together also use commas and dont rush the storie and on a last note u need some grammer fixed in there so maby a beta or something
    this isnt a flame just critizism anyway good for a beginner jsut bring it up a little more

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  • From ANON - Anon on June 14, 2006
    It would be nice if you would do things like use proper grammar and spelling. Spellcheck is your friend. And don't be too lazy to use capital letters and complete sentences. It would also help if you would put a line between paragraphs (so it doen't give the first impression of one run-on sentence. You really should find a beta to help you make your story even readable. Are you sure you are old enough to be posting here?
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