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By : Scottishfae

From ANON - Pretty on December 17, 2006
Aw, I didn't realize this was the last chapter, I'm sad! And I know I won't be able to finish it before I have to leave for my meeting... what a shame.

I'm really enjoying this story a lot. I was kind of iffy at first, but I was still really intruiged. And then it kept getting better and better. I really love the handle you have on all these characters. You have done such a good job making them true to themselves but still really interesting and entertaining. I always like to see Inuyasha behaving like *himself* in Sessh/Kag stories... Brash, arrogant, rude, loud, obnoxious, aggressive, but still very caring, sentimental, and touchy-feely when the time is right. He cares for Kagome a lot and doesn't always have to be the bastard a lot of people make him out to be. *pets your Inuyasha* I love him a lot in this story.

Also, Sesshomaru is written very well as well. He is dignified, regal, civilized, a bit arrogant... I can honestly imagine him approaching Kagome like he did in the beginning, and sort of tricking her like he did into agreeing. I was iffy about the letter he sent her, but it still smacked of his style and the effect Kagome might be having on him so I didn't press the issue. Also, in the past few chapters where he has been joking around with Haru a bit and coming to save Kagome... those scenes really added a lot of depth to this story. I was really impressed. (There is another story on FF.net by Wheezambu, a few actually, where Sesshomaru has a cousin or something who he is friends with and sort of jokes with. But it's always seemed weird to me, not to offend that writer--because I enjoyed the stories anyway--but to make the comparision between Sesshomaru and Noata (or whatever his name was) and Sesshomaru and Haru in your story... Their relationship really impressed me and I liked it a lot.)

The scene where Sesshomaru is laying in Kagome's lap might be my favorite scene of this entire story. It was just so nice... and how it went on from there, with them opening up to each other. So good.

I also really like the Kouga development. I can now see this turning into a choice of Kagome's own. I can see her being given the choice, and obviously telling Kouga 'no' and going to Sesshomaru by choice, because she really likes him and wants to go through with it. She's starting to really care for him and that's going to make the lemon so much more meaningful and special. I was iffy about this story because I thought she would have to go through with that deal and if she's only doing it because she has to, and not because she's falling for Sessh, it's not going to be nearly as good. So I'm very happy with this chapter.

Haru is also really cool. He's like Miroku without being TOO much like him, and having a cool connection with Sesshomaru, and being really family oriented (which is awesome), and being intruiged by Kagome. He's a really awesome addition to the group.

Okay, I have to interrupt with this since I've resumed reading this line is great: [quote] �What?� Inuyasha all but screamed. �It�s not the first time I�ve apologized for something!�[/quote]

Ha ha. "he all but screamed" it. That kills me. I'm really loving Inuyasha in this story.

YES: [quote]�You�re making that crap up,� he said. �Stop trying to sound smart.�[/QUOTE] That sounds SO much like Inuyasha. That is such an Inuyasha-type thing to say, OMG!

"he quirked" --- ehehehe, quirky Sessh!

Oh my god! She's actually holding on to his pinky with hers? That's so funny. Remember the days when he would've tried to kill her for touching him? *wistful sigh* However, that obviously changed when he decided he wanted her to bear his child *grumbles* Oh. *just realized something* Back in the beginning, wasn't it Miroku who was stressing that it wasn't just any child, it was a son? He wasn't the only one, but he did it at least twice right? Is it because the "will you bear my child?" line is his and he doesn't want anyone stealing it? xD

I can't remember what kind of clothes Haru wears... You said they're foreign but didn't explain them further again. I wish you did...

And Kouga... he's so dangerous. His cocky-ness makes him dangerous. Because he will NOT take 'no' for an answer. He always thinks you're lying, playing hard to get, etc. when you say 'no'. And it's not hard to believe he would get really angry when he looses. I can't stand him. I mean.. as a character I like him, but I really can't stand him. So I think the sooner you resolve his claim on her, the better. >>'

I'm sad that Kaede died, but it's an interesting twist and it's one less character that you have to worry about. Kikyou's arrival was sort of interesting too. But what about the bruise she gave Kagome on the cheek? Is it gone now? It wasn't mentioned again....

Aiko bothers me too. I can easily see her going into an insane rage or something. But it's also entirely possible that Kagome (& friends) will be able to win her over.

Sesshomaru is giving Shippou a hunting lesson--squee!

This story's character development and interaction is really strong. It adds an incredible amount to the story.

I can't seem to find anything that says when you last updated, but I'm really hoping this story is still being updated. It doesn't have to be updated constantly, just often enough that I know it's not on hiatus or anything. Stories that go on hiatus hardly ever come back. >>.

I really hope this posts...
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From ANON - Setsuna-chan on December 12, 2006
I'm really enjoying this fic and can't wait for the next chapter. Have you figured out how you are going to get rid of Koga's claim on Kagome? I can't wait!!! Please Update soon!!!
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From ANON - Iris on December 11, 2006
Well, I just read your story and I have to say it's really interesting. I actually like your OC Haru, and I'm typically not a fan of OCs who play a big part in the story. I can't wait to see where you take the Haru angle. A couple of things I noticed were some consistent spelling errors--caudle should be coddle and if you want to add "esc" as a suffix, then it should be spelled as esque, as in grotesque or picturesque or bla-esque, or whatever. I only mention them because a) I'm one of those horrible anal retentive spelling people, and b) the caudle/coddle mistake threw me off so that for the longest time I was confused. Other than that, it's great, I'm glad I stumbled onto it, and I can't wait for more!
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From EternalTwylight on December 09, 2006
Hmmm, I've been reading along and getting quite the kick outta the sense of humor you have, when it hit me... Kagome is kinda 'Mary Sue'ish. Damn, I wanna be the center of attention in that many good looking male characters. *snickers* I must agree with Kouga though... what the hell is with the sudden bouts of touchy feely between the miko and the Taiyoukai? Sounds a bit fluffy for Sesshoumaru.

I don't mean to sound offensive or anything, and I just wanted you to know that I sat down and read all 11 chapters and I really do enjoy the storyline. I wouldn't mind being added to your mailing list if you would. HAHAHAAHAHA... I'd pay to see a fight between Naraku and Sess' mother. Let the fur fly!!

I'm wondering if the fact that Kouga promised to marry Ayame is gonna be the technical loophole that gets Kagome back to square one with the deal? And I must say I've gotten the impression from the beginning that the Inu Lord was too noble and honorable to be forcing the miko into his bed. Really gonna be interesting to see how he woes her for that little event.

Awaiting the next chappie with bated breath. Keep up the good work and much love!!!
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From ANON - mel on December 09, 2006
Your story just keeps getting better. What is Haru up to? I'm glad that the time of the new moon is drawing nearer. Please update again soon.
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From ANON - DROC on December 09, 2006
Yay! My internet just came back up and I have been blessed by an update from you! As I have said before, your story is hilarious and has a great plot line too. I hope that you update this soon. >.< pickles
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From ANON - kit on December 08, 2006
pleasee finish soon! well...just don't stop writing or leave us hanging for months on end :) i LOVE this story. i check every week for updates *feels like a geek* ^^;;
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From ANON - Shiva on December 08, 2006
I'm so happy u updated and I so feel on the skool an written thing...Its so HARD :(
But I just want u 2 know I love it! And I'll keep readin til its done.
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From ANON - fire_eyez on December 07, 2006
yay!!! that was awesome! The plot thickens and things are getting even MORE interesting, which i didnt know was possible. But that whole pinky holding is cute.
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From ANON - Metsuki on December 07, 2006
Chapter 13 was so much fun! I laughed and laughed at the exchanges between the characters. It's impressive that Kagome seems to have such an influence on the Taiyoukai, and leaves Yasha and Koga in the dust with their immature arguments. Excellent job! So much looking forward to more...

Metsuki-babaa
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From ANON - Demitria Miriam on December 07, 2006
YAY!!! Sesshomaru's going into Romantic mode!! LMAO! That's so great! (swoon).

Ooh!! Ooo! So I did what I said I was going to do and wrote a Sesshomaru x Kagome fic, dedicated to you! YAY! You've gotta go and read it now and leave a review on what you think! You may not like it and that's fine, but at least read the first chapter ^o^ *glomp* Here's some info:

Title- Arrangement of Convenience
URL- http://inu.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600090673

I'm glad you updated! I know how hard it can be to not have time to write and post your stuff. It sucks.

Anyway! Happy holidays!

-DM
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From ANON - Noneya on December 07, 2006
I just love your story! Its really good! but just to let you know, the phrase is 'absence makes the heart grow fonder' not 'distance' but other than that its really good.... but i wish kaggy would get laid already... hehehe.
Noneya
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From ANON - akume on December 07, 2006
Sweet Lord! What a beautifully written chapter. Loved all the interacting within the group. Also, let it be noted that I still dislike this Aiko character. Anyway, thanks again. Until next time. Ja.
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From ANON - odango on December 07, 2006
wow I realy like this story so far please update soon
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From kookookitty on December 07, 2006
didn't mean to review anon...

sorry,
ginny
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