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Reviews for Erased In a Moment

By : ryukotsusei

From kookookitty on January 10, 2007
i couldn't sleep because after i read this story... the following just had to be typed out. i give it to you, a present, to do with as you see fit. i cannot think anymore and will attempt to sleep now that i got it out of my system... if you need to contact me my address is in my profile page... you have my expressed permission to do anything you want with the following:

Someone was up to something... he knew it... as sure as he knew his name...they were, they TRIED to take something... SOMEONE... special away from him, at least his memories... of HER. They did it to the humans... she wasn’t even a shadow of a memory to them. Discrete questioning of the kit and the neko proved they could remember bits and pieces at least.

Desperate, he was compelled to reconcile with his bastard half-brother and the damn wolf. And damn near any other youkai who had ever encountered her while she was with him. This was all just to confirm to himself that he wasn’t insane and to, in a way, keep her near. He did this after he jumped through the well and found a very similar situation on the other side. The adults remembered nothing... well, next to nothing, her mother wore a haunted expression, like she remembered but, if she let on, they would take what few memories she still had of her away. The boy... her brother... had showed him a few treasures he had stashed away of her, but only smiled sadly, winked and held his finger to his lips as if even the mention of her was taboo.

The wolf tribe all had memories of times with her, his brother, to say the least, was beyond pissed that anyone had the nerve to tamper with his memory that IT superceded his hatred for his little brother; and he reluctantly offered to bury the symbolic hatchet in a place other than Inu Yasha’s skull.

It was a start; he had help, allies... in the loosest sense of the word... but allies just the same. The flea remembered everything; maybe ingesting a person’s blood on every encounter bound his memories of her... if he would have known at the time, he might have considered biting her a few times while she was still with him... something he could fantasize about... maybe... maybe not, it wouldn’t help now.

The old miko, on her deathbed started to recall the girl, the adventures she shared with them... the hair youkai, the mononoke who used the girl to reanimate her sister, training her... almost everything she experienced with the girl... he didn’t want to wait until he was dying.

thank you,
ginny

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From ANON - ptbear on November 21, 2006
Awesome. Can't wait for the sequel.
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From ANON - Ms Mina on August 24, 2006
Adding another review because I accidently sent that one too soon. Please don't stop writing. You have a wonderful gift of writing and actually connecting with the characters and making them real and believeable that so few writers have mastered. On top of that you are able to believably bring 2 seperate storylines together and still have readers care what happens to the characters. None of the characters come across as anything less that what they were presented as in their original anime.
Writing takes time and I respect that. I personally haven't succeeded in my goals in that area. But authors like you and others serve as inspiration and a standard of others to read and attempt to match to the best of their abilities. You have brought fresher ideas to crossovers such as "Erased in a Moment." I hope you decide to continue with the works you have started as well as bring new pieces into existance. I believe you will. You have too much passion (as evidenced by your writing) to abandon fanfiction writing. Be well.
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From ANON - MsMina on August 24, 2006
That was an awe-inspiring story. I really like how you brought the poltics of the Renkai into play. King Emma would definitely try something like that, and everyone knows it wouldn't work because it would have left the three realms SOL. That would have been appropriate for being so stupid. I hope the doctors get their just rewards as well even if it is out of the reader's scope. I wasn't expecting that ending, or reprieve from perpetual hunting. I like being surprised. I'm going to go check out your other pieces.
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From ANON - mercy D on August 23, 2006
hey ive read this story at least 5 times lol it never gets old same with the pairing it rocks i enjoy all your stories i just had to tell how much this new kicks ass, i hope to see more ja ne xx
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From ANON - Lady Gina on August 23, 2006
I love your story i would have reviewed earlier but i am on every once in a while. Please continue!!! don't stop for anything, i wish you the best of luck
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From ANON - Coffee Gyrl on August 23, 2006
I'm sorry you feel such a dispirted way I really love everything you write. This is a great story with an orginal plot and I really like how you incorporated the dragon and it's freedom, with a price. I like that Hiei was going to make her walk if they weren't so close, you do an amazing job of keeping him in character. And mentioning that Kurama had been nearby was a nice touch with the rest of the group. I also like the back story with Yukina. I'm sorry I couldn't review more I've been so busy with the new college semester that I hardly have time to even read my fan fiction stories. I feel bad because I don't have the time to give to new writers only to the older favs that I fell in love with during my summer of freedom. Please feel better soon.
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From ANON - Leena on August 22, 2006
Wow. This is a lovely fanfic. You've done a wonderful job of characterization as well as consideration of how a situation will occur. I hope I can express my ideas about these (and other) characters as well someday. I really liked the ending of "Erased In a Moment;" it was a nice twist that solved the issue without being weak or standardized. Willful actions that produce accidental results are always interesting to encounter.

Regarding your author's note: To start with, you write wonderful pieces. Some people don't review because they don't care about the author. Other's that do can only share negativity. Others still have a variety of reasons. Myself, I do not always have the ability to review, and I forget to go and do so when I next have the opportunity. I know it sounds sad and strange, but it is the truth. In any case I apologize for those instances where I have been unable to share my awe, admiration, excitement, and the host of other feelings I have had from reading your work. Your crossovers are on a level that few manage to achieve. I hope that after a break from writing and the time that you require to consider your options, continuing to write excellant pieces of fanfiction will be at the top of your list. Even better if you continue to write your incredible crossover pieces. I look forward to whatever you decide to do. I have yet to see any work produced by you that is lacking. And while this maybe the last portion of my review, it does not make it the least. - Thank you. Thank you for your work, your consideration, your dedication, and everything else you bring to your writing and being you.
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From kimisan on August 22, 2006
I'm so glad this is finished. This was a great story/one-shot. It ended perfectly, you just know Hiei is going to remain with her and take care of her; so sweet. He should kill them doctor's and Enma but I can't have everything my way. Aoshi tells me so all the time but what the hell does he know. Can't wait for your next one-shot. Keep up the good work. *Hands you Aoshi for an hour* (I want him back!)
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From ANON - Megan Consoer on August 09, 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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From ANON - Sayuri-chan (NSI) on August 09, 2006
Another amazing story with an extremely unique plotline. You are still and will always be a number one goddess in my book! I can't wait to see how this turns out. Somehow I think that the jewel has plans in store for Hiei, thus why it repeatedly returns to Kagome, giving them more time to interact. I somehow think that the constant force of it being tainted by those idiot doctors and then purified by Kagome will also put a strain on the jewel's forces itself. Can't wait to read more. Update when you're able! *hugs*
Sayuri-chan~
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From ANON - Haywire_Hakaze (it won't let me log in. hmmm...) on August 07, 2006
So we get to see a little bit of interest from Hiei now. Yayzors. I'm glad that you're staying in character-- well, as far as I'm concerned. Kagome's no weakling, and definitely wouldn't back down in a situation like that. Kudos. ^_^
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From ANON - Lucridlucifel on August 05, 2006
Second time around reading and I still love it. Hiei/Kagome is my second favorite pairing.
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From ANON - Megan Consoer on August 04, 2006
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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From ANON - Haywire_Hakaze on August 04, 2006
I like how it's turning out, so far. (You're right; there are a few typos but they aren't too ghastly. ^_^ )

I love the Hiei/Kagome pairing-- hell, ANY Kagome pairing rocks my socks-- but I like this new spin on things. I don't think I've heard of any similar storyline. KUDOS!
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