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By : SilenceoftheHeart

From Pumpkinpi on May 10, 2009
I read this story about a year ago and I think you have an excellent plot going. I hope you decide to finish it!!!
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From ANON - Nea on January 05, 2007
Interesting premise, which has been done before (hasn't everything?) but so far not with such credibility. While I like you taking the time to develop Sesshomaru as a female while keeping her in character(and doing a better job of that than do most where it's completely along canon lines), I couldn't help notice from a few author's notes that you've been asked to speed up the time-line. I'm a fanfic author as well, and I know how little any good author listens to reader's wishes when it comes to their plots... but you mentioned at the end of the last chapter that it was boring to write. Author to author: if it was boring to write, it'll be boring to read. While I have enjoyed the story, the interest & excitement of the first meeting with Inuyasha has worn off, and I realize you're about to get to another meeting with him... Just enjoy what you're writing. Enjoy it, don't force yourself to write if you're finding it boring. If you enjoy it (as you're in the top 90% of those writing here), so will we.
Nea
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From ANON - ChaoticSpecter on January 03, 2007
I really love what you have so far. Your character development with Sesshoumaru is amazing. I love it. A female and very complicated (well more complicated than usual) Sesshoumaru is very interesting. I really enjoy your writing style and plot development, makes it a lot easier to read because I don't feel as if I'm forcing myself through portions of the story you didn't want to spend too much time on. Well, I'm starting to get long-winded so I'll end this. Love your story. Update when you can.

ChaoticSpecter
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From ANON - yasha3393 on December 21, 2006
good work nice descriptive details many authors on this site lack this. Please continue your story is magnificent.
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From ANON - Snowfall on December 09, 2006
Chapter 5

Sorry about the your/you�re problem in the last review. It�s late and my brain is fried.

Sesshoumaru�s physical pain, as well as her emotional pain concerning the swords, brought a lump up in my throat.

This was a very nifty concept:

�So the wounded youkai joined with the pain, giving it reign to push through her mental barriers until she was completely merged with it. Once it was no longer working to fight the pain, her body could concentrate on repairing the damage.�

I loved the description of her rising and leaving the tree and of her time at the hotspring.

Her view on Inuyasha�s survival and her attitude are very plausible. Passing the blame for her mistakes onto Inuyasha is funny. I can see that happening.

She sure has a low opinion of Jakken. However, her attitude appeared a bit softer with �Let�s go home, Jaken.�

Darn it! Months ago, I started a fic that had the InuYoukai tied to the land like you have them and I take it even deeper in another fic that I�m working on. Are we psychic? Or would that be psychotic? LOL

I just love your idea of the trees having grown so closely together and opening up for Sesshoumaru. That was terrific! The whole episode with Jaken and the dryad was very amusing. I�m still smiling. I commend you for adding a dryad. It has been my opinion that the Inuyasha world has magical creatures and our fics should not be limited, as some tried to do with my first fic. Thank you very much for this addition.

Sesshoumaru�s strategy to draw out challengers was excellent. I love a good strategist. Your imagery of Sesshoumaru as she waited, when she was approached, the picture when the moon waned was so intense. I can�t tell you how much I was drawn into that scene.

This was fucking hilarious:

�Well,� she commented to it, �at least you died with both arms. Such a waste, actually.�

So if she wasn�t going to get it back, what else could she do? The inuyoukai let her golden gaze drift back down to the dark headless form at her feet--the form with two perfectly good arms that she was beyond resentful for. �It�s too bad I can�t just take one of yours,� she stated to the corpse as she poked it with a toe again. �After all, it�s the least you could do after challenging me.�

I loved the fight scene and the mention of the thunder brothers.

Oh wow! Great idea for the arm! And damn, I had wondered if that poison would have affected it.

Sesshoumaru�s ruminations concerning her father and her past were enlightening as is much of your writing is.

Heheh, you�re humor is wonderful:

�It was enough that instead of howling into the lightening sky, Sesshoumaru just brought her hand to her temple, massaging away the headache that was not there. Because Sesshoumaru didn�t get headaches.�

Wonderfully morbid humor. Love this image:

�As the hoof beats resumed, Sesshoumaru turned her blind eyes from the burning sun. It took two heartbeats for her pupils to heal and adjust and she smiled slightly at the approaching men. After all, if they were to die, it was the least she could do.�

Gah! I am soooo jealous! Even the scene with Naraku was excellent. How you delve into Sesshoumaru�s head is just unbelievable! I�m going to go cry in a corner now. *pouts at your brilliance*

As always, awesome chapter.

Snow

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From ANON - Snowfall on December 09, 2006
Chapter 4:

I can�t possibly mention all of the things that make this a wonderful chapter and an awesome fic. You�re detail is amazing. You�re description of Sesshoumaru�s feelings are so brilliant. It�s all good. I know that I haven�t reviewed like I should and I may have reviewed chapter four, but I doubt that I did it justice.

You tugged at my heart strings with Sesshoumaru�s feelings concerning her father. It was so descriptive and makes her more �human�. Also, the meaning of the sword, the connection that she expected to have with her father, was so poignant. The whole thing being about acceptance from her father was so sad. It makes the seeking of more power moot. Now it becomes personal. And that makes Tetsusaiga�s refusal so disappointing. It almost makes me wish that Sesshoumaru could have the sword.

So, they have a history that you casually tossed in for a brief moment of the action in the tomb. Hm, the way that you put emphasis on �brother� as Inuyasha says it makes me wonder if he doesn�t know that Sesshoumaru is a girl.

Heheh, Inuyasha�s body decided that it perceived their battle as foreplay. Oh, that�s funny. Well, she was playing with her prey. Serves her right.

�Darn,� the white youkai commented, boredness tainting her voice, �it appears she was an ordinary mortal after all.�

That was just too funny! And I must mention that the running gag of Sesshoumaru being irritated with people repeating themselves is funny too.

It is amusing when you do things like this:

�You,� she shouted, turning to Sesshoumaru and pointing the treasured sword at her, �you tried to kill me, didn�t you.

Sesshoumaru blinked. Was the girl seriously asking, because the daiyoukai thought her intentions had been quite clear.

I also never understood why Kagome said that either. Sounded kind of stupid. You were able to make it into something humorous.

Both Sesshoumaru and Inuyasha wondering if Kagome had a psychological disorder. LOL

This almost made me cry:

The sword had accepted him as its master. That realization hurt nearly as much as her shattered limb.

You truly amaze me and I wish that I was half as good at writing as you are.

Snow

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From ANON - Manda on December 07, 2006
Once again great chapter! I loved the bath scene!
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From ANON - Shuori on December 07, 2006
more action please! Where's the Inu/Sess goodness*.*!!!
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From ANON - *sleepy* on December 06, 2006
You know, I just kind of noticed that all the feminine bits of Sesshoumaru are in sharp contrast with "her" character and everything she wants to be. "Gentle curves" and "slender hips" and "soft breasts" just don't seem to fit someone who'd ruthlessly murder millions of demons/people for her personal desire for power. I guess it's sort of a side explanation of why she tries so hard to hide her gender, but I'm not sure if the womanly softness symbolizes a deeper nature that even Sesshoumaru is unaware about or whether environment has truly prevailed over heredity and her body is something she just can't entirely control. But then again, I might've forgotten something I've read so....yeah.

I don't know why I wrote that.
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From ANON - Sparkangel on December 06, 2006
yay! you finally updated^_^
i loved it as usual and can't wait til the next chapter.
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From ANON - Anon on December 06, 2006
I think your story is coming along just fine, and moving at exactly the pace it needs to. As to not having Inu in the chapter, obviously it was NECESSARY for this chapter to occur the way it did. As always, very very well done!
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From VixenArgentum on December 05, 2006
Aha! I've been waiting for this story to update. I swear that I have been following it. I just get really shy when it comes to reviewing ages after the last update. Any requests for a new update at that point always makes me feel like I am nagging the authoress. Or maybe it's just me that gets infernally pissed when somebody writes a review that says 'update pleez! u rok!' like two days before I have the next update ready or whatnot. Anyways...

Another great installation into a great story. I understand the distractedness that you felt for writing this one, its like going back to elementary school where the teachers keep saying "now class...you have to do your have tos before you do your want tos". But, I do understand how to write a fic in such a way that both you and your readers understand it. Sometimes unseen backstory is a necessary evil. Although it was nice that you gave our lovely lady some time to think about her brother...at least in a few moments...in a not so hateful light. Sesshomaru, regardless of how he/she is portrayed in the fandom, is (or should be) a very cerebral creature. Nothing but her own thoughts will move her down the path of change. Because of this, I am very anxious for you to show the relationship between Sess and Rin, which I imagine will come up relatively soon, with her entering in ep 35 and all.

As always, I will be waiting for the next portion...and in the meantime I shall go to your lj and become your friend. I really need to start up one of my own, so I shall use your invitation as a kick in my ass to actually keep my lj functional.

Until next time...
Russanya, the Vixen of Argentum
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From ANON - big_show2000us on October 25, 2006
Im not that in to yaoi pairings but when it comes to altered gender pairings the gloves come off and I must say this is one of the better ones. I can't wait to see what you do with this stroy when you continue.
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From ANON - Shuori on October 12, 2006
You updated! YEAH!
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From ANON - sparkangel on October 06, 2006
yay, i finally had time read your fic and loved it as usual.
i was hoping sesshoumaru would keep her arm
well anyway, cant wait for the next chapter.
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