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Reviews for Room Service

By : PhoenixWolf
  • From ANON - Shanalir on September 17, 2006
    Really good story, I must say. I'm really enjoying it, and looking forward to the next chapter. As far as a title goes, I like "Hotel Romance" the best. Mainly because it starts in the hotel, but doesn't stay there (since they do leave it at various points). "Room Service" implies nothing more than a oneshot lemon where they meet, do their thing, and go their separate ways. "Hote Romance" implies a broader spectrum and greater depth. To me at least. And if no one else understands me, at least I do! (I think....) Anyway, Update Soon, Please!!!
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  • From ANON - Noacat on September 17, 2006
    I like "Room Service"...the pun is just delicious.
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  • From ANON - Megan Consoer on September 16, 2006
    I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From Solaris on September 13, 2006
    What is it with these cliffies?
    I want to read more!
    Please post more of this story it is good.
    I want to know what happens next.
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  • From ANON - kawaii-miko on September 13, 2006
    your soooooooo mean stopping it there

    but ill forgive you if 'o'

    YOU UPDATE VERY SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11
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  • From ANON - anomonics on September 12, 2006
    Tite Hotel romance
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  • From ANON - Aaliyah Starnight on September 11, 2006
    How dare you stop it right there i was just getting excited
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  • From ANON - iluvsesskag on September 09, 2006
    I didn't think it would be interesting with Kagome being a cleaning lady, but hell you surprised me. Oh, how I wish I was Kagome's shoes (sighs). Just a few suggestions: when Kagome's thinking to herself and you're using the quotes to represent it, try using 'I' instead of the third person of 'she/her' (she is thinking these things to herself, ao obviously she would refer to herself as 'I'); maybe describe more of their thoughts on what they're thinking of something in general or of the other person; maybe a better description of the surroundings to give the reader a better visualization; and try not to use words or phrases repeatedly (ex: ground against, grind against, growled, and groaned). It's not a knock on your writing, because you are doing a good job, but some suggestions to help make you an even better writer. (It's up to you to decide to use them or not, and I'm not making you.)

    Some ideas of a title:
    1- Pleased to Serve... in Every Way
    2- Cleansing Acts (as in Kagome needing to rid herself thinking of that bum)
    3- Room Serviced (if you know what I mean; hell, I wouldn't want some other skank to get their hands on him when I am
    all ready 'serving' the guest)

    Hope it helps in any way. Keep up the good work and update soon since you left that 'evil' cliffie.
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  • From ANON - kekee on September 08, 2006
    umm i wouldn't know a title for this but it is really good
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  • From ANON - molly on September 08, 2006
    oh that was so wrong! write more soon!
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  • From ANON - ShadowandFlamePanther on September 08, 2006
    btw I am the one who sent Solaris here for you. She loves Sesshoumaru also.

    Rhonda
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  • From ANON - ShadowandFlamePanther on September 08, 2006
    *stands tapping her paw* COME ON STOP WITH THE CLIFFIES!!!!!!!!!!

    I am waiting and will still stand here tapping until you update. I love this story and love how you are writing it. Please continue ASAP
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  • From ANON - jamie on September 07, 2006
    Nice, realy I like it! Please keep up the good work hi! And as for the name how about "Hotel Erotica!" Or "Hotel Madness!" Or maby go with that name that one person came up with "All work and no play" AHH that is very good who ever you are, I laughed. No realy that was a good name... Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - angel dust on September 07, 2006
    EEERRRR, longer chapters girl boy who ever! I realy like, so keep writing!
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  • From ANON - Amanda on September 07, 2006
    sorry messed up but yeah u sould name it unexpected desire
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