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From ANON - Neko-chan on January 13, 2007
I liked the chapters so far except for chapter five. Rin is starting to irritate me to a point where I wish she'd just break her neck and die so I don't have to read about her anymore. I'd rather hear about Jaken than her annoying curiosity.

I also thought that Higurashi Mama was very out of character. I didn't mind the OOCness of the other characters in the past chapters or in this chapter, but Higurashi Mama has always been accepting of everything Kagome does. Her disapproval of Sesshomaru because he's a demon doesn't seem realistic since she likes Inuyasha. Kagome's mom isn't prejudice of demons at all. I expected the prejudice to come from grandpa since he's a stickler when it comes to demons. I expected him to try to purify Sesshomaru and fail but not Mama.

I also think that Souta would call Sesshomaru onii-sama or Sesshomaru-sama. They're brothers-in-law now and that would have been the proper terms. If Sesshomaru permits it Souta could call him oniisan even.

Anyway, I liked all the other chapters so I hope you don't think I'm flaming you or anything like that. I still like the rest, just not the annoying Rin and Higurashi Mama in the fifth chapter.
From ANON - Tori on January 11, 2007
Back from a long unwanted hoilday time! Sweet I love the witty humour, and the funny side of Sessy, and of Inuyasha. I love the plot it's working great too. Continue on it's going good.
From ANON - natts on January 11, 2007
Geez this girl get layed alot. Reminds me of how bad my sex life realy is.
From ANON - Ashley on January 11, 2007
In the beginning i like the story with sesshomaru as kagome's mate and them having a family but i don't like inuyasha being involved in kagome's relationship with sesshomaru and inuyasha sharing kagome's bed nasty!!!!!! get rid of him now kill him off or something so inuyasha will go away.
From ANON - Rinseternalsoul on January 10, 2007
Chapt. 4.... Damn! I sure as hell didn't see that coming! haha! At first, I thought this story was going South with the Sesshomaru/Inuyasha interlude (not into the incest yaoi - personal preference, you understand), but then you totally surprised me with the fantasy thing! LOL! And it was HOT! I really found Sango's comment hilarious. "Did Kagome bang your heads together until you agreed to be friends?� HAHA! Miroku - that hentai - knew what was up. LOL! Great job. Really.
From ANON - Rinseternalsoul on January 10, 2007
HAHA! I'm really enjoying your story so far. I'm currently starting chapter 2, but I just had to take a moment and tell you how much I loved this particular line: "Since he had learned Kagome was attracted to him, Sesshomaru had become something of a menace." My side hurts from laughing at that one. Nice work!
From ANON - madmiko on January 09, 2007
Awesome!! You've done it again. What a terrific chapter! The emotions, the insecurites, the thoughts, and finally the acceptance of both of the brothers about this situation they never expected to find themselves in ... you've brought it all to life and made it all so real and believable. I salute you! I have enjoyed this story every step of the way. I love it that Sesshoumaru has retained his attitude through it all, and love the interaction between him and Inuyasha. Heck! I've enjoyed the way this story has explored their relationship as much as the steamy romance in it. You turned this into much more than the average Sess/Kag or Inu/Kag fic. When this stopry is finished, I will avidly await your next one. You've got a real gift for writing and such a great handle on these characters. I can't wait to see how you're going to wrap this all up! It was too bad Shippou had to interrupt Inuyasha. How will their friends react? Will they finish the quest? I thought Sess was going to make him wait until the quest was over -- glad he changed his mind! It doesn't seem necessary now, but I had a thought about how to soothe Sess' feelings about the pregnancy: if she found out exactly what it was that had him so unhappy about it (the fact that he thought Inu's sperm was more potent than his),Kagome COULD have just given him a quick science/biology lesson about how that particular night, he let Inu "go first," and therefore the egg was already fertilized before his little swimmers even had a chance. No real reflection on the potentency -- it was all in the timing. Anyway, I have loved it all, and I can't wait for your next posting!!
From ANON - Kawaii Kilala on January 09, 2007
I'm not entirly happy with this chapter...I think its because Inuyasha doens't seem to understand that she loves him, but not like she does Sesshy, also, why is Sesshy being so okay with the second mate thing? Hmm? That is way too out of character for me...:-( And I want to know why you are makeing them all mates, and why you can't just find Inu his own mate? She-kags-isn't really acting like a true wife or mate to Sesshy, she's putting Inuyasha's happiness infront of Sesshomarus, she deosn't even think about how this will affect their -sesshy and kags's- relationship! I am not very happy with this, it just seems wrong to me, I'm sorry, but still, I just don't like them all being mates. I don't mind them shraing the same bed and haveing sex, but the mateing thing just doesn't sit well with me.
Well, update soon,
TTYL;
megan
From ANON - Tenshi Youkai on January 09, 2007
I have to say that I am blown away with this story. Not only have you given us a love story, complete with sizzling sex, you have also written about the very complex subject of having more than one lover. You have taken into consideration not only Kagome's feeling but also the two brothers' and dealt with them realistically, instead of just ignoring the more complicated feelings or brushing past them.

They way you portray Inuyasha's reaction to Sesshoumaru's explaination of the second mate is simply perfect. Perfectly Inuyasha. You have everyones character down so well. Yes, Even in the case of Sesshoumaru. After all just because he hides behind his mask does not mean the emotions are not there. I can not wait to see how you finally get them together and how you deal with everyone else' reactions. I am sure that it can not be all smooth sailing now that the brothers are so close to having a real relationship. One based on trust and love.

Your insight into the workings of the mind in dealing with the intricaciesjealousies of a threesome are most appreciated. Most people cann't even think past having a third person aware of what goes on in the bedroom, let alone write about it with such grace and eloquence. I am so grateful that you have shared this picture of what life, and love, could be like. It gives me hope that I am not the only one to entertain such thoughts.

So, When are you going to have those two hot boys kiss again? That was such an excellent scenario. I especially like how Sesshoumaru had to assert his dominance over Inuyasha and toy with him just a little. VERY HOT!!!! Also a very Sesshoumaru thing to do.

Keep up the excellent work!!!! And ignore anyone who feels the need to flame you. They are just narrow minded dweebs who are too afraid to open thier eyes/minds/hearts to the possibilities around them!!!!! ;)
From ANON - Anon on January 09, 2007
I really like your story. But i don't like how sesshoumaru has to share his mating with inuyasha. I think he should just be on the side and leave Kagome and sesshoumarus mating relationship alone. You are kind of being unfair to sesshoumaru in this fic. He seems to be giving up a lot.
From ANON - amhor56 on January 09, 2007
Ah! Beautiful! I'm so glad that they're all going to be a big happy family. I certainly love the fact that Inuyasha won't be alone after killing Naraku and he can actually raise his child. Update soon
From ANON - Kawaii Kilala on January 08, 2007
Ooo Ooo! What happens next!? And are you sure its his baby? Cause it might still be sesshy's...maybe...possibly...okay no it cant be, but still, there is a possibility...never mind ignor that...
I wish it wasn't Inu's baby, but hey! After sesshy gets a second baby of his own from Kagome she'll just take the pill......
Ya know...Kagome should bring a health book to the feudal era, for sesshy to read, and like show him that while she is pregnant her eggs stop producing, and that its fine to have sex at the moment, and her period stopped so that should tell him that it would be okay for her to have sex with Inu...
Also, if they were to have anal sex, after the baby was born, then both Inu and Sesshy could have sex with her at the same time, and Inu could get her back while sesshy gets her front and then only sesshy's seed would be potent, cause seed can't reach an egg through the butt, that is just not probablem!
Okay, now that I got that outa my system...
Please up-date soon! And have a fun time writing it!
TTYL;
megan!
From ANON - genseng on January 08, 2007
I thought you wanted the truth, but pardon me! I never meant any harm towards YOUR fic, oh and by the way I know the difference between fanfiction and true stories! If you don't want HONEST feedback, then DON"T tell your readers to give it to you! Oh don't worry I WON"T read nothing else that contains your work! ACTUALLY, I really liked the story, but stick it and leave good critical feedback alone, you can't handle it!
From ANON - alatera on January 08, 2007
Well I thought I'd finally add my 2 cents in here. All is well written, and the lemons are great. Its your story and all to write how you want it. Well I'm just giving feedback. I wasn't the happiest with the threesome but I could see it as closure for Inuyasha as he saw how much she loves Sesshomaru. Then when they had a single scene I thought less of Kagome and Inuyasha as he was invited into "their" bed not allowed to mate with Kagome whenever or wherever. I see Kagome's behaviour as disrespectful to her mate. As to her suggestion of letting Inuyasha mate with her till he finds someone is rather stupid in my belief and shows more disrespect to her mate. Inuyasha will become more attached to her, not less. He moved on after Kikyo, he will be able to move on after Kagome. Being a friend to him not a lover will help him with this. On the hunt he could meet someone on the travels he finds interest with but if he continues to mate with her, he will never go away and continually be a sore spot for Sesshomaru and Kagome. I find Kagome being in the wrong in continuing with Inuyasha especially without Sesshomaru since HE is her mate NOT Inuyasha. She is not showing any loyalty or consideration of her mate's feelings which I feel is a keystone of her character. I understand during those times things were different as one pointed out brothers sharing one wife, but I doubt the brothers could share like that unless it was done from the beginning as an aggreement. This is not a flame I enjoy the story very much just my opinion on what is going on. Thank you for sharing your talents with us.
From ANON - cocoke5 on January 08, 2007
wow kegame baby is inuyasha . why that was a super and sessu. is ookay with that. then he ask kagome to have one more for him. that was good and now he trying to talk to inyuasha . i lve the story be waiting for the next chapter of the story.