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Reviews for Lost Innocence

By : Vague
  • From ANON - Silverwolf on February 22, 2007
    **Written as of Chapter 7**

    Very interesting...that he, Sesshoumarou, would willingly give himself up to Kagome, is surprising...

    As always, your writing style brings every details alive clearly, and the scenes you depict are vivid in my mind. Very nicely done, looking forward to reading the rest.
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 22, 2007
    WOWW VERY HOT
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  • From kitsuneonna on February 22, 2007
    Heh. Before you start thinking this review is more of a flame than con crit, allow me to say that I never review crapfics. They are not worth the time.
    I almost turned back while I was reading the first chapter. You need to re-edit that thing with a hacksaw. It looks terrible and it reads terrible. After that, I was in way way prepared for how good the story got with each successive chapter. I'm sure you've lost readers simply from that first chapter alone.

    I think the thing that irked me the most was the Shikon no Miko bit. Rather than going on and on about what happened with the jewel, Naraku, and her lost innocence (which you really didn't expand upon, making it this kinda nebulous sticks-out-like-a-sore-thumb thing.), you should refer to her raised status a bit more, talk about the upheavals it caused in the youkai community there, leading to the thing with Sesshoumaru hunting her. (Gad, longest sentence ever) I saw you had covered that a bit in the sixth chapter.

    Aside from that, the smut is fantastic. You drag the tension up to a crescendo and then crash into the sex. You're very good there. There is some serious overuse of the word 'arousal' in a few parts, but I see you really do try to mix it up a bit without using euphemisms (i.e. towering marble pillar of lust).

    But as I said, every chapter gets better and better. The bit with Inuyasha still assuming Kagome was purely innocent and had a simple crush on Sesshoumaru? The great deal of double entendre in the chapter where Kagome's asking Sesshoumaru to join them? That was absolute fucking gold. Seriously, if you need a beta though, look no farther. Aside from the first chapter, I enjoyed reading this immensely.
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  • From madmiko on February 22, 2007
    Woo hoo! Awesomely hot and unbearably erotic. You definitely have the touch. I love the way that even in his pride at her reaction to him, he acknowledges her control. Kagome is thinking this is a one-time occurence? Or perhaps just a fling? How in the world does she think she could ever settle for a regular man after this? Poor girl!! I can't wait for more!
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  • From ANON - Tori on February 22, 2007
    I am so glad you are back! Vague I have been pinning for you for the longetst. Your stoies make my day. And this one and the Photography story are great I can't wait to see whatelse you create within this story. However I wonder when is Sess, going to gain back some ground of his own and taken control. I mean Kagome is and will formost be in control but come on what is fluffy known for, his good looks, his sexy-ness, and Ah hell...Your right to pin him down, and even better he should be tied down. He's a walking sin. You keep going now don't let this site get you angery. Your the best at what you do and that's making good stories for us to read, giggle over and to make you love what you do. Keep your readers reading.

    Thank you
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  • From mrskgoodman on February 22, 2007
    YAY your back. Great come back chapter.
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  • From ANON - amhor56 on February 22, 2007
    You have got to continue and update soon. That was amazing. I felt their passion. Geez...where's my boyfriend?
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  • From Cochrann on February 22, 2007
    AWESOME....PLEASE CONTINUE!!!!
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  • From LadyTsunadeSama on February 21, 2007
    Sesshomaru as a sub? That's a fairly new concept, I think deep inside he secretly wants to be dominated by something-- or someone-- This is a finely written story with a good style and it is highly addictive! Ten stars on this!
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  • From ANON - Liquorish on February 21, 2007
    DON'T TAKE SO LONG TO UPDATE NEXT TIME DAMNIT!!!!!!!!!
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  • From MoodSightEyes on February 16, 2007
    You are my favorite author on this site.
    If you choose to further your work, please email me.
    I'm sorry the sight being troublesome.
    Thank you for creating what you have.

    M
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  • From Chococat on February 09, 2007
    And I quote, "I don't feed strays." Damn1 Where the hell did you come up with such a line? It threw me for a loop. And when she calls him Puppy. Yeesh! Thank you for your wonderful writing
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  • From flamingangel on February 08, 2007
    I think I read this before when it was just a single chapter, and I must say that I'm loving it! (Sorry if I hadn't reviewed before, I'm terrible at actually signing in to do so)
    I love the story, and hope to hear more of it sometime in the future, but I guess it isn't very likely with aff.net's sign in thing.

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  • From KawaiiKilala on January 22, 2007
    You go Vague!
    I, my self, who is not sure about her writeing, had to make a whole new account thing, when I'm probably only going to use it to review!
    It is a waist of a perfectly good account for someone who wants one to use to write wondeful stories!
    I believe your solution is right, and will wait patiently for them to take that into consideration before you up-date your story...though I might get impatient after about half a week...
    BUT I will still stand loyaly by your side in this desision you have made!!!
    TTYL;
    megan
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  • From drkstareyes on January 20, 2007
    I am so glad that there are authors out there who share my opinion on the matter of reviews. Some people write because they love it. We want to share with people what our (sometimes demented) imganiations bring. Reviews encourage authors to continue. Without them, what is the point? Sometimes I could care less if I recieved a review or not because I enjoyed writing the update. But when I get that one single flame (that always seems to be Anon) I can't help but wonder who the hell this person is. Is it a random person who does not write? Do they not know exactly how difficult it can be sometimes to write something? Do they understand writer's block at all? Wow, sorry about the rant! Lol, I love your writing. Keep up the good work.
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