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By : sweetsatincocoa

From midnightsweet on September 25, 2008
good as always.
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From midnightsweet on September 11, 2008
another great one.
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From myperversities on September 08, 2008
I LOVE this story!!! I am waiting (not so patiently...argggggg need more *drool*) for more of your amazing story to be posted. I hope it comes soon *puppy eyes* lol. One thing I do have to say though is....Chisato only had one arm...don't get me wrong I'm glad that she got it back as is implied by the story but...how???? XD *cringe* don't hit me please I assume it was just a minor slip-up saying she had two arms but it would be nice to give her her arm back by some cool...maybe magical way....maybe she can just grow it back faster because she's older & more powerful??? Anyways, keep up the great work and I can't wait for the next section! *kiss* all my love going out to you! ;)
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From Plaguerose on September 07, 2008
I just found this story and HOLY SHIT!!!! HOW DID I MISS THIS!? I always look for this pairing AND it's Mpreg!!! When will Naraku and Kagome's ass gonna get kicked? Will it be bloody? Can you have Naraku have a swift kick in the balls in the story? *wags tail* Or just kill him how ever way you plan it, it'll be great ether way. XD

I can't wait for the Inu and Sess's baby to be born and I LOVE Sess's mom! She's soo cool! Is she yours or is she Ooc? The sister's are great also!! I couldn't stop reading about their love lives.

I can't wait for the next chapter! Err... sorry for the long rant?
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From nchsmi on September 02, 2008
That was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I loved it! And see, I didn't threat U not once during the long, long, loooooooonnnnnnnnngggggggggggg, wait! I just wished th@ Sesshomaru had broke Kagome's neck!!!! Or @least let his mother do it! I'm sick of that chick!

B reading U!

L8r!
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From aleabeth on September 02, 2008
Kagome just needs to DIE already.... LOL
Wonderful chapter as always :)
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From Izzanami on September 02, 2008
I love how you make Kagome so evil, I really hate her and it's always fun to see Sesshy beat her up a little in a story. I love Sakura and her tanto too bad she didn't find Kagome, but you wouldn't have her to screw with anymore, and that would be no fun. Sweet scene with Sessh and Inu at the end, I'm glad they made up before the end of the chapter.

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From nchsmi on August 04, 2008
You tell'em baby! Take no shit from anyone, but me! Just kidding *smooches!* Great revision, good luck with your Bleach story! Til next time- B reading U!
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From midnightsweet on August 03, 2008
i glad you got all that of your chest. now you can work on this for us that like it.
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From Izzanami on August 03, 2008
I'm sorry; I know I just reviewed, but I found the flame, and I'm glad you kept it up so the rest of us could see how rude, and ridiculous the person who wrote it was; many people probably would have removed it. I checked the profile too... nothing there. No one should EVER be so terrible to someone, but a person with no stories has absolutley no business whatsoever writing something like that. Reviews that aren't completely positive should at least be constructive critisism, not an attempt to totally rip a person and their hardworking attempt at creativity.

I really would like to see the person who wrote that flame write a story. In fact I hope the flamer see's this, because flamer I CHALLENGE YOU TO WRITE A FIC, and not a canon where you can basically copy the existing story line, do something difficult, do something hard; put the characters in a situation they've never been in before like sweetsatincocoa has, and let's see how good you can do!

Those of us who write do it because we enjoy it, and we put up our work to share with others. I can't speak for everyone, but not everybody is trying to keep the characters totally in character, and there's nothing wrong with that, it's called "creative license". And not everybody is writing to please others, they write what they want, they write the story that is in their head and who likes it likes it.

Sorry I went off there, I normally wouldn't bother with something so completely petty, but that really pissed me off. This story is interesting, and creative, and extremely good, but even if it was the worst fanfic ever written no one should ever be so incredibly unkind!

I totally understand if you remove this since it really isn't a review. I just had to defend another writer, not that you needed it you wrote a great rebuttal in the latest chapter, but I was just compelled to do it. Anyway keep writing the way you already do, and ignore that shit!
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From Izzanami on August 03, 2008
I'm so, so happy you updated, this is one of the stories I've been checking for an update. Sorry you got flamed, some people are such asses. Not having read the flame myself I don't know what it said, but it sounded like it probably had something to do with said person thinking characters being OOC, deviating form the story line, or some crap like that. As far as I'm concerned it would be pretty boring if everyone's stories were canon. Anyhow, in reality it's really hard to tell what's OOC anyway considering these characters were never in the situations we write then into when they were in the manga. Really the only person who could even accurately say anything about it would be Rumiko Takahashi herself. You're a great writer, and it takes some courage to write something, and then put it out there for other's to read and critique. Flames are for lack of a better word just stupid, why even bother? And someone that doesn't even write certainly has no business at all flaming you. I think your story is awesome. So many people stop working on their fics, I'm glad you've kept going with yours.
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From nightfox39 on August 01, 2008
oh... and i like your oc's ^_^ they make the story far more interesting, and naturally more original. i guess there's a lot of sesshomaru/inuyasha stories out there, and you've successfully made your story stick out with GOOD, well-developed original characters that actually enrich your story.
so yeah. as i have said.. keep reading- i'll give you kisses and cookies for the next chapter you write!
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From nightfox39 on August 01, 2008
GREAT story- please, please, please keep writing! Possibly one of the best Inuyasha fics I've read... I love it.
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From on June 19, 2008
I have to say, I haven't been this compelled to write something close to a flame in a good while. Take a bow. You deserve it.

I'll begin by saying this:

If I were a Kagome fan, I'd want to punch you in the face. Seriously.

All of your characters are horribly OoC, mind you. To the point where it actually messes up the storyline as a whole, because certain instances are actually ruined because of this.

And even though she's actually my least favorite character in the series, I was rather...shocked...to see how poorly you portrayed her in this story. I can understand where you where *trying* to go but honestly, it's downright insulting and I have to wonder if this happened because you despise the character, really need to work on your characterization skills when writing, or both. I understand that there are many instances where Kagome isn't likeable (I to this day, still hate the episode where Koga thought Inuyasha killed his clan because her actions and reactions after the fact made me hate her.) but you took her negative aspect and went completely crazy with it, to the point where, dare I say, that's NOT Kagome. As a matter of fact, seeing how you portrayed a lot of characters, other than making excuses for your OC's, I have to wonder if you saw much of Inuyasha or read the manga to begin with, because the characters are just written so awfully.

You also need to get your 'speed' correct. Apart from this story being ridiculous based on the way you portray the characters, some of the events happened to quickly, that made the entire scenario unbelievable. Just as the first part of your story: Inuyasha and Sessy's relationship, given their actual back history and relationship thus far, made NO sense. If anything, you should have built it up, so that the 'love' from either side would be more warranted and believable, instead of trying to rush to get to the sex scene. That's fine and dandy in a PWP story but sense you were actually trying to give a legitimate tale, it ruined the experience. Or you could have even had it start out like lust and then gradually turn into something more substantial.

Then some of your scene literally, made no sense. For example: the part where Kagome seems as though she'd 'turned evil' after her odd dream. (After she'd spoken with Naraku.) If she actually WAS brainwashed during that point, then that honestly one of the lamest ways I've ever seen that happen. It was far too obvious and so much so that any and all characters should have known better--though since you went out of your way to make her an unbelievable (literally) bitch, who the hell, reader or others, should COULD know the difference. You practically HAD to do it in that lame way because honestly, no one would be able to tell the difference.

And yes: we get it. You love your OC's and desperately think and believe that they should be part of the Inuyasha universe. So do you and EVERY OTHER FANFICTION WRITER that must include an OC and believe, (naively by trying to make them 'likable' and more so than existing characters, usually resulting in said existing characters acting, you guessed it! out of character but in the negative sense...) but goodness! Stop shoving OC's during parts where they're not needed, solely because you love them so. They're NOT part of the actual universe and it's not like you give enough backstory or they're that interesting (they're actually quite common and unoriginal) to make anyone give a damn to begin with. Unlike you, we don't actually KNOW your OC so stop writing them in like they've always been a part of the universe: you can't even get the CANON characters right. And stop forcing them into chapters and/or scenes when they're not needed or the story could do just as well WITHOUT them. And stop wasting time dedicating unneeded scenes to them to once again, shove them down people's throat. You need to learn how to actually write the ACTUAL EXISTING characters properly, THEN worry about original characters. You gotta crawl before you can walk...

You need to learn how to add ALL of the proper sub categories, such as OC, OoC, Bashing, ect., because I was mislead into actually thinking this was a GOOD story. You make such amateur mistakes that hold down a great concept, had it been in capable hands...it's honestly sad.

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From ANON - sammy on June 15, 2008
AH!! sango's coming back YAY! anyways as always im waiting for the next so update as soon as your feeling up to it hun
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