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Reviews for The Cave

By : cReaTiVe
  • From danshou on March 21, 2008
    Ok, just to state before hand, because you seem to be rather defensive, this is intended to be constructive criticism/a suggestion to better your writing skills.

    I know a LOT of people use the neverendingwordthat'sactuallyaboutamillioninone to show fast speech, but it's VERY hard and annoying to have to read. If you feel the need to show such a thing again, put dashes between the words or something.

    Also, perhaps it's just me, but ending a chapter with a sentence that trails off is not a cliff hanger, it's an unfinished sentence at the end of an unfinished chapter. You could have the most awesome story in the world, but if I see that happening at the end of all the "chapters" I won't even bother reading it. It's just something that bothers me. I'd suggest looking to other popular and well written/organized stories for examples on how to do this.

    I'm not really sure if there's anything else, as I said, I saw the ... where the rest of a sentence should be at the end of both of your chapters, followed by a rather proud sounding "cliff hanger~!" and I lost interest.

    Again, this is not supposed to be a flame, I'm not telling you "omg u sux" or anything like that, simply pointing out things that I, as a reader, find to be... distracting, so that you, as a writer can improve. And btw, don't say you can't help the level of your writing skills, practice and make use of suggestions and tips as well as observations from reading other stories, and there's no way you won't quickly improve!
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  • From ElementalDemonessSorceress on June 27, 2007
    I really lime this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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  • From SesshysRose on June 23, 2007
    I really like this story and I really really want to see what happens next, so I hope you update ASAP!!!
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  • From PhoenixWolf on May 18, 2007
    Hello! I have enjoyed reading your story, very much. It sucks that you won't be able to update as often as you would like, but I understand the computer problems. *rolls eyes*

    Until we meet again.
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  • From RudeHero on May 17, 2007
    You know, the very first story I posted, I was right away bombarded with flames, it drove me to obsession that I set out trying to prove I can actually write. In the end, the whole frustration thing just snapped. I ended up losing all my reviews, and eventually my reviewers. I hope you don't stop writing altogether. It's really a good start. Take your time, but when you cool down, come back and write again. Don't worry too much about typos. The more you write, the more you learn. This advise is coming from someone who spend more time editing, than actually writing,lol.

    zechs
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  • From marcia on May 14, 2007
    glad your back it has potential (now if only you'd space the paragraphs out)
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  • From DAZ306 on May 13, 2007
    I dont know what the hell a flame is but I'ma be foward.

    You need a Beta and a enter key. All the words up togthter looks really bad and for people who have bad eye sight will get worst for reading this. And this story looks alot like the story about Kagome in the Cave with Sesshoumaru expect it's DIFFERENT. And your story in my case Different is bad realy.
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  • From ladyai21 on May 13, 2007
    yay, im so glade that u updated. I thought u went incognito for a while there. I liked this chap. Is Inu gin 2 come in soon. It'll be cool 2 see sesshy and kags 2gether. (gives an evil smile) that'll serve him right.
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  • From ladyai21 on April 26, 2007
    I totally luv this fic. I always loved Cave stories between kag and sess. there arent many stiries like that, sooooo its great to read a good one now a days. LUV the cliffy although your making me crazy. Want to read what happens next!!!! HEHEHE. Keep up the good work.
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