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By : dinamight23

From LindaJ on October 19, 2007
Sorry I don't usually write reviews, but I wanted to let you know I have been enjoying this story. I actually nominated it as one of the best AU stories out this quarter at the IYFG, but they said it needs to have its punctuation fixed up before it can be voted on. (Seems pretty darn picky to me, but those are their rules. In particular, they said that the main problem was when a character speaks, you end what they say with a period, instead of a comma, and then end the sentence with a period, too.) So, if you want to try to sharpen it up enough for me to appeal their DQ and try to get it put back on the list before the seconding period, just let me know. I'll even be happy to help you, if I can, but it would probably need to be done in about a week. If that seems like too much to do in such a short time, I'll still be happy to help you spruce it up so I can nominate it again for the NEXT quarter. I really like it. It's a great change of pace from so many of the other stories where InuYasha is the one with an extra woman on the side. It's good to see him have to sweat it out for once over Kagome having another guy. It's light-hearted and fun to read, too. Whatever you decide, I'll keep reading and enjoying.
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From missiemae on October 19, 2007
i love it. i can't wait for the next chapter! =] ...
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From ANON - Ro0tin4Kagome on October 18, 2007
One of the best stories Ihave read ina while. I pray tha you are going to finish this. It is just to good to leave incomplete. And finally the tension is shown between InuYasha and Kagome. Though Shun is a real sore loser. And really out of place.
Because its like Hiten and Kouga are more close and Miroku and Inuyasha are closer than the rest yet their still friends . Shun just doesnt really fit into the equation.
Quetion, do you have this story in another site because I could have sworn I read something like this before. If you dont maybe you should check if someones copying your work.
Well I work early tomorrow. Ciao
=D
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From madmiko on September 30, 2007
Yay! I was so happy to see a new chappy up! In spite of the angst inherent in their situation, this is still one of the most "fun" Inu/Kag fics I've read in a long time. So, I'm really enjoying every minute of it! And I see you noted my greatest fault -- long, rambling reviews. LOL!! Well, let me get right to it. THIS was a chapter designed to delight all of us secret Sesshoumaru fangirls. (Secret, because we can't let Inu know that!) You absolutely slew me with his thoughts that he was going to die young and sexy with Inu's driving. And I loved the cards Inu had printed up to hand out to his passengers. I also like the way you keep mentioning the minor charcters, and including them in the fun. (Totosai, Myouga, and soon-to-come Kaede.) I also loved Sess' line about them having to put up with 3 dogs in the house -- 2 four-legged canines, and 1 two-legged baka. Hilarious!! And he got to be all-seeing and all-knowing about Inu's feelings for Kagome. I was very interested that he pointed out to Inu that she was too much for Shun. So devious of him to invite her to lunch, and then not go. LOL!! Well, you certainly shocked me with Kagome's little revelation about Kiyuta forcing himself on her in University! I guess I had assumed that since she and Shun weren't sexually active, that she was still a virgin. This throws her actions with Inu in yet another light, -- if she was attracted enough to him to go ahead and "get lost in the moment", even if it WAS the nasty old alcohol's fault, (HA!), and yet hadn't made that step with her own fiancee, well, ... I have to wonder about her outlook on that. That tends to make it seem even more 'singular' an event, since she has probably been quite hesitant about relations like that, after her horrible experience. How many of her friends know about that, I wonder? Wait. Didn't Sango say something about her still being a virgin? I may have to go back and check that out during their little girl-talk. If that's the case, then I guess Sango doesn't know what happened to her, does she? Oh, this is very, VERY interesting!! Especially since she just told Inu the story. I guess subconsciously, she feels like she can trust him on a very deep, private level. I wonder if she will think about that later? Does Shun know? I'm betting not. And the fact that Inu may be coming to know her better than the others says a lot about their connection. Hmmm. Now I'm envisioning a scene where the guys are all together, and Inu asks Shun why he hasn't kicked Kiyuta's ass for what he did, and Shun goes "Huh?" And the guys suddenly wonder just how well Inu knows Kagome. Oh! Question!!! (And you don't have to answer, but I HAVE to ask. ^_^ ) Will it ever come out to the guys that Kagome was the one Inu kissed when they sent him after the envelope? I can just see him thanking them for kidnapping his furniture at the end of all of this. ^_^ Well, I suppose I should end this before the word count goes bust. LOL! I will be looking forward to more!! (And I didn't even talk about how much I liked her partners' relationship with her. LOL!)
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From ANON - Anon on September 14, 2007
Wow, I really like the story! Update soon, please! =D
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From wicketjax on September 12, 2007
I love this story! i can't wait to read more. very awesome and i'm a sucker for a good sappy story! love it! well written, good descriptions, captivating and funny characters and very few editing mistakes. bravo! more! please?
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From JLucPitard on September 10, 2007
Nice chapter. The flashback was a little confusing, perhaps she could've done that as exposition? The story seemed to slide and it's unclear when the trauma with the ex occurred and when the engagement occurred. All was forgiven for the fluffy scene in the park.
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From ANON - rose on September 10, 2007
wow i love it... thats basically all i can say... i wish kagome would get rid of shun and her and inuyasha fall deeply in love ahhaha but im impatient... anyways cant wait until the next update
xo
rose
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From madmiko on September 10, 2007
I liked the way you set up this chapter, -- starting with Miroku and Inuyasha running into her and Shun, then moving to the flashback of how she came to be engaged in the first place, then her talks with Sango, then back to the meeting. Nice! I really enjoy the way you are writing Kagome and Sango's friendhsip, -- it's very real. We see that Kagome isn't the only one with doubts about her relationship with Shun. Sango obviously thinks the love isn't there. And even though she's Shun's friend, too, she cautioned Kagome about him because of Shizuru. I'd be interested to see what some of the guy friends think about it. Do they think she and Shun should be together, or do they think it's destined to fail? I keep looking ahead, since I have to believe Kag and Inu WILL end up together, to see what's going to happen to Shun. None of us want Kag to be guilty of cheating, or of breaking his heart. But, on the other hand, I don't really want HIM to end up "shunned" (pun intended) by his friends for leaving HER for Shizuru or something like that. It would be a shame for there to be a rift in the friends. I think you're doing a terrific job of building this up to show that deep feelings are probably not going to be shattered on either side, but it will still be awkward for all involved. I'd like a little insight into Shun's thoughts about Kagome and his relationship with her. Maybe he could talk to Inuyasha about her. After all, the two of them really still need to talk about what happened all those years ago. I really liked the way you had Kagome not want to blame the alcohol, but unable to help it, because admitting anything else would destroy everything for her. It's just so REAL. Super-kudos for that. And it was hard to read how hurt Inu was when she said it was a mistake. Again, so REAL, because even though he had said that to himself, it still hurt to hear HER say it. You did SUCH a fabulous job with that whole scene. Their thoughts and feelings were perfectly done, and your descriptions of their expressions, movements, -- everything conveyed their uneasiness with the whole situation. And yes, you showed very clearly that the two of them have decided to ignore what's between them and try to just go on. I, too, will enjoy watching that wall come down. Somehow, I don't think it will be able to stand for long before the first cracks appear. LOL!! A well-timed appearance by Shizuru could put them all in a tailspin, and blow it up completely. But, first, we need to have them realize that they can't avoid each other. (The job!! Heh heh!) I wonder how long it will be before one of their friends sees what's in their eyes when they look at each other, and what will the reaction be? I'm just loving this. It's well-thought-out, well-written, and just a great, realistic, little love story, with a realistic, believable obstacle, that gives just the right touch of angst to this without it being overwhelming or depressing. You're struck the right balance, and that's so rare. More!!
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From ANON - Naomi on September 09, 2007
The previous chapters of this story seemed to be moving a bit slow, but I think you've really struck a chord with this chapter. The citrus was very tastefully written, and I enjoy seeing the emotional connection between these two forbidden lovers growing. Wonderfully done, and I look forward to more of this story in the future!
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From ANON - Jacki on September 08, 2007
Holy Crap!!!! Oh my gosh!!! That was sooooo hot!!! Congradulations!!!! *Gives you a truck load of M&M's (the peanut kind)... MMMMMMMM... Please... Lemon... Soon... You are such a good writer... YAY!!!
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From CloverBabe on September 02, 2007
:D

well that was interesting.

hahha. update soon please. it was wonderful.
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From madmiko on September 02, 2007
I think you handled that situation just right. They got in over their heads, but you stopped them just short of drowning. LOL! And I had been wondering about Kagome's experience level, but you cleared that up. Great way to bring Sess in -- having him see Inu so disheveled. LOL!! What was that tiny mention of Kikyou? That Inu never really just went for a fling -- except for Kikyou? Did I interpret that correctly, and is her name going to come up again? Because I could live without it. LOL! Hmmm. I've been wondering how this can work without Inu and Kag being the bad guys, but I figure since Shun left Kag for Shizuru once, he might do it again, ne? (I guess I'll just have to wait to see what you have planned. ^_^ ) Well, this little meeting is ... awkward. I can't wait to see what's going to happen. The two of them need to talk, and I can't imagine Kag going on like this for long without breaking things off with Shun, -- even if she plans not to see Inu again. And, of course, Inu will be dealing with her through their businesses. THAT'S going to be an inter4esting surprise. You've got lots of good stuff going on in here, and I'm really enjoying the story. The lime was good -- nice and hot, but tastefully written. Now, write more!
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From ANON - oniguts on August 27, 2007
Yes! They're drunk and making out! Now lets situate them into a more horizontal position shall we? Shun so does not deserve Kagome if he is still hooked up on that Shizuru bitch.
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From ANON - Jacki on August 24, 2007
AAHHH!!! Don't stop now... please?? I'll give you a big bag of cookies?!?! YUMMY!!!! Just like Inu... hehe... Well, so far I love this story! It is so good, and you are a very talented writer! Please update soon!
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