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Reviews for The Immortal Soul

By : sbchick1069
  • From BeautifulOblivion on September 12, 2007
    This was very interesting for a first chapter. Your persons (first and third person) keep swapping, and you should considering finding a beta. I am not trying to be insultive or anything, but there are several errors in this. A beta could help you make yourself more easily understood. That's all.

    Still a good first chapter. I look forward to reading more soon. Take care.
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  • From candycrys on September 11, 2007
    good start but you kept going from first pov to third pov and you spelled his name wrong it's Sesshomaru or Sesshoumaru
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