Reviews for Learning to LoveBy : Ikaru |
I'm confused has Sessh ever been with a female before because it was stated that this was his first time experiencing mating season. Also if his sister is a wolf wouldn't she consider her own children as cubs and not pups like a dog?
I am sure I have read this before but I think it was a long time ago. Does mating season only last a day? It seems as if everything has happened surprisingly fast.
Bravo on very long piece and great ideas. Loved strong Kag, idea of kamis matchmaking and having a hand in creating Super Kag, and chibi Yash is adorable! Yash+Rin was original, different from usual Shippo+Rin, and cute. I was glad to see a happy Yash (full youkai so won’t get hurt from hanyou stigma yay!) +Izayoi with Taisho+Sess+Ikaru happy family. Nice touch giving Ah Un a mate, definitely a first!
Though lil Shippo is cute, I think story is being pulled in too many directions. We have strong Sess & Kag (which still really needs to be proven as Ikaru’s taken center stage), discovering K's new powers/abilities, evil man hovering around K +threat to her family, another evil man who killed Ikaru's family and I guess is still out there so ongoing threat to the East (and the West). K getting used to life in the West and her pups, tennyo/kamis and their influence/interaction with K. There seems plenty on the plate without bringing in Ship to story and with a huge background where he's got a crazy bro who's killed all 20+ family members and trying to mate his own sister. And Ship also gets adopted…like Ikaru…and Rin. Felt it was a bit too much.
I enjoyed the read but also felt a bit betrayed to see a great S+K story hijacked by an OC halfway through. While this is your story and totally up to you how you wish to write it, I really hope you turn this story back into a SxK story as it’s stated, otherwise best to amend your Summary. Your summary’s great (certainly drew me in) it just doesn't reflect the story now as the last 14 chapters has been Ikaru’s story with SxK thrown in on the side (and honestly, had it stated this was an OC story, I wouldn’t have read it). The level of detail given to Ikaru early on and how often she popped up did have me thinking she’d be a big supporting character but I never would’ve guessed she’d grab the main roles from both S+K. It was a bit disturbing how often Ikaru popped up during Sess’s intimate moments w/ K, eg not only when S reminisces on Ikaru while comforting K from nightmare, but also S has an Ikaru flashback after mating K for first time. While some of those flashback details were important, the timing was terrible. I thought we were dealing with a Sess with a strong sister-complex…not an appealing thought at all! Haha
My thoughts on Ikaru's another story. I’ve come to dislike Ikaru and will leave my comments on that for next time as I’m a bit pissed at her for taking over the story. (^^; Anyway, there’s still hope for K and looking fwd to seeing a more powerful K w new abilities.
Just sharing some thoughts where I got a bit confused/things seemed a little hard to swallow.
- c12: Taisho calls mate Serenity then tells Ikaru that he and Lady Sakura will give her their blood. I think you mean Serenity right? Maybe getting confused b/c Serenity's fight move name is Sakura something?
- c21: when Taisho recants meeting Izayoi "he had felt a spark similar to the one he had felt when he had met Sakura." You mean Serenity, S's mum, right?
- When Ericka updates S on their families, strange how little info is given on the evil man, simply that a man w/ evil aura came to K’s mum twice to see the Princess. They wouldn’t let anyone see the Queen/Lady so he must’ve had some background to be let through to see her. Also S surprisingly asks no questions to Ericka re this man - especially cuz even if K’s mum doesn’t know the truth of who the man is, surely the tennyo/kamis will know more so what better way to find out the truth? Wouldn’t Sess get details to potential threat? To be better prepped or even better, launch offensive which seems to be what he’d do? I really hope K’s horrible vision doesn’t come true…well they’re guarded by heavenly beings so they should be safe…
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